Unhealthy Love

You are not here in the dead of night

You are not here to cause me fright

You are not here to start a fight

You are not here all should be right

You are not here to yell at me

You are not here that is all I see

You are not here what’s to be

You are not here I should feel free

I do not though with you away

I think of you each passing day

I’m blinded as my thoughts of you are frayed

Why is it I wish you could stay

I battle daily with my very mind

Each day it gets harder for reasons to find

I see all your good I know you can be kind

I long so much for us to be enter twined

I miss you more than youll ever know

I long as a person to only grow

To find deep within my inner glow

The pain though

It is paralyzing at times

As I think of our crimes

I miss you as my clock chimes

I am weak for you sometimes

You cross my thoughts more than I care to admit

I wish feeling for you I could quit

I wish I hated and longed on you to spit

But that’s not me and I have now a broken spirit

I feel ashamed alone abandoned by you

I feel agony despair and imprisonment too

And still hating you I cannot bring myself to do

Especially after all we have been through

I ask for this separation for the sake of me

I ask for your understanding hoping you can see

It’s not that we cannot be

It’s the fact that our love has become so unhealthy

Reviews

[sheandherself]

Great piece. Been there, luckily left. Wish the best of luck to you.
What I like the most about this is that it's little bit of a cliché theme, but you described it so well and chose words so wisely it's actually different. How talented are you!

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you I know at the start I was wanting to beat in the fact that hes not here I wanted to pull the people in in a way that might make them more observant to the emotion and why I am feeling this way. That even when you know you are doing the right thing it is very difficult to do.

[manju menon]

Great work ..U r very good....can really feel the emotions intensely

[Tomás Ó C..]

That would be a great rap!!! Emjoyed... hes the bad boy the girl cant let go of...

[Rachael Lea]

I love it when someone is able to say something of that sort, that my work would make a good rap or song, thank you. I am glad that you liked it.

[andrew mitchell]

A great piece that brings forth much conflict seeking answers or truths. A Splendid display on the pitfalls of love seeked!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh the foibles of young love! You have described the emotion very well (Ps, did you mean intertwined where you wrote enter twined? Both make sense.)

[Willard Wells]

Many loves may come and go, with the one's that burn the hottest often the one we can love, but not live with. Even when you find your true love that you can live with, you will have the deep thoughts of the one you loved, but could not continue with. Well penned.

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you for your kind words

[alifeacoustic]

Isn't it always the things we crave that are bad for us? Your words have lots of conviction to them, seeing and being part of the bad times, yet there is confusion too, about what the future holds for both of you in this piece. Will it be together or apart? Will the feelings ever subside? The list goes on and on, the answers take a little longer though.
Beautifully written. I like the repeating of rhyme, as opposed to each second line. It adds to the feel and flow of the piece and gels it together. Funny you mention the clock chimes. From personal experience, certain times of the day always make me think of certain people.
Beautifully captured.

[Rachael Lea]

Well almost always its in our human nature. I have the answers to them now or to most of them. Thank you for your observations on this.

[Inject Positivity]

Except the 'youll' in the 17th line which i think should be 'you'll', the poetry is superb my frnd...I can feel the meaning of this poem's title....I think many people can relate to this poem with their own life.....Thumbs up!!!!

[Rachael Lea]

Thank you, it was a very difficult poem to write, I feel there is more than I need to work on with it but I know the point is made and that's a good start for a rough draft.
You are right about the you'll I was afraid to mess with grammar as I was typing afraid I would forget what I was typing.