Within Me

Within Me

I don't belong to anyone nor anything

I'm not a name nor an age 

Not a height, nor a weight 

I'm free, but I believe in fate 

No I'm not black nor white 

Yes I love day, but I even love night 

I'm a soul with all it's complications 

I get angry, I lose my patience

You know how is it like living in instability, wearing a smile with it's vulnerability?

I'm a dream with a doubt 

A silent shout 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the real us inside...shouts loud but no one really hears, they tend to analyze us and pigeonhole us into a category, put us among stereotypes...when really we are our own person...the individual ...the one grouped with all the others that he or she is not really like at all...

a very well presented image of what we often fail to see within a person...

j.

[Rachel Rashid]

I'm really happy and honored because you liked it. That's what I meant exactly in this piece, people tend to categorize and define us in a superficial way and that's dehumanizing us and freeing us from our true us..

[The Twin Arenas]

Second to last line is a good one.

[forgotten_ghosts]

I really feel connected to the things you wrote in this poem. Things not many people write about because they forgot that there is more than we can see and hear. Thank you for sharing this!

[Rachel Rashid]

Thanks, appreciate it

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

good use of words, fate will come for sure, it brings connection to the readers and I felt it completely

[Rachel Rashid]

I'm so happy to know that you relate to it, this means a lot to me

[Mariah Slade]

Wow! I love this concept, I often feel like this - Horizon

[Rachel Rashid]

Glad to know I'm not the only one :p

[A.E Dvir]

"I'm a soul with all it's complications "
Love it, great poem

[Rachel Rashid]

Thanks dear

[Inject Positivity]

Your poem makes me think of how we rate people these days, we categorize every single person to a group, we don't look at their inside when it all matters what is inside... This has become a habit of our so called society that we have lost our free self.... This is such moving piece of poetry, both in thoughts and in the flow of the poem... Thank you for sharing this mate....

[Rachel Rashid]

well, that was my message from this piece and as long as it's received, my work here is done :) Thanks a lot for your sweet words

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Statement own dignity and authenticity. I love your brave words. Very simple and strong . Please write more.

[Rachel Rashid]

Thanks so much. I love your writings too and I will

[Erika Jones]

Excellent poem! It's put together just right and usually I love really long pieces of work but this is just perfectly written. I can't wait to read more of your stuff :)

[Rachel Rashid]

I wrote it out of the blue and didn't expect such reviews so this means a lot to me and it makes me want to continue doing this..thanks a lot Erica :)

[A Humble Poet]

I agree, very clever! I really enjoyed how you wrote about being neither one thing or another, and I love how well it flows! :)

[Rachel Rashid]

You know I just feel that most people judge others according to their age,sexuality, religion,looks..and that's all wrong, because we as human beings connect with our feelings mostly and that's what only matters anw thanks so much dear