Seasonal Nostalgic

Seasonal Nostalgic

A Poem by Raef C. Boylan

Leapfrogging my grandparents’

Battenberg patio

On crucial missions known only to me

Observed by sluggish ants

Milling sun-drowsily

About the cracks

Whilst their winged cousins

-       Oh, the flying ant,

Summer’s notorious villain! -

Boldly emerged upon

The grey, baking slabs

 

Didn’t it seem the clock hands

                                    Were bleeding                          (time stigmata)

Choc ice and water fights

Outgrown school shoes scuffed

And faded, a forgotten concept

On the horizon: dread

But the future

Could be squinted away

 

Yet the soil thirsted for Autumn

 

And in the end

Everything is dirt


© 2012 Raef C. Boylan



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Wow. This was so sweet it took me back to the hot summer days! "On crucial missions known only to me" oh boy do I know what your talking about.
The only part I don't understand is this " (time stigmata)" I'm not quite sure why its there, it really messed up the flow for me.
Ok back to the poem. The ending was so real and so powerful, that those summer days and nights are going to end but we want to and as kids we are going to ignore the fact that autumn, school is coming back around soon because right now we just want to play. Great Job :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raef C. Boylan

4 Years Ago

Hi, thanks for the read and review. i'm glad you could dig the kind of memories I was trying to get .. read more
Imara

4 Years Ago

The were bleeding part makes a lot of sense to me. I took it to mean that the time was wasting away .. read more



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summers notorious villain, nice. This felt like summer.
I also really liked the part about the clock hands.
I think the third to last line would be stronger without the preposition

Posted 5 Years Ago


Raef C. Boylan

5 Years Ago

Hey, thanks for the review. I think you're right about that line, but I don't know how to fix it wit.. read more
Seb Harris

5 Years Ago

'for' is not the preposition in question, 'yet' is.
Raef C. Boylan

5 Years Ago

Ah, my bad. Sorry :)
I like the "Yet" to be honest, because the line conflicts with the previ.. read more
Good job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

there's always the inevitable end . . .

Posted 5 Years Ago


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