Pride untouched

Pride untouched

A Poem by Raghib
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Its a poem on rape .

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Like a spider weaving his web,
Like a hunter laying its snare.
It slithers on your skin,
Suffocating all your will .
It paves its way,
Through the inside of your head .
Urging you to stay,
Lying in your bed.
You will be looking around,
Waiting for the people's aid .
At least some remorse ,
From this hellacious death .

They will goggle their eyes,
Its time for you to hide.
But when they catch you,
They will grope your side .
"The fault is all yours",
They will smirk and cry .
And then lay their hands ,
On your modest life .
Your cries for a hand,
Will reach none but the deaf.
They wil stare at you , paralyzed ,
Unmoved by the state of an innocent life .

You will be looked down today,
By the same beastly men .
Do not fear, for you are strong,
More than their insolence can consture .
Keep your head, held all high ,
Look them straight in the eye .
Make them wonder what is wrong,
When they stand in the eye of the storm .
Choke them with all your might ,
Make them scream for their life .
There will be nothing to be matched,
When you show them your pride untouched .

© 2017 Raghib



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Raghib
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Solid rhyme scheme and style format... Delivers at mild pace, and is pretty easily-breathed... Goggled eyes and spiders catching flies... This is a gritty topic, well done detailing that with word-choice and atmosphere... Well penned...

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Raghib

2 Weeks Ago

arigatozaimashita friend . thank you for your review . means a lot .
This poem has great balance of message, description, and rhyme. Second para second line it should be 'it's'

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Raghib

2 Weeks Ago

thank you my friend .
Najam Us Saher

2 Weeks Ago

You are welcome.
only a low life piece of crap would do this crime,tear a woman down for the rest of her life

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


"Keep your head, held all high ,
Look them straight in the eye .
Make them wonder what is wrong,
When they stand in the eye of the storm"

Oh! You had touched a very bothering topic!
Hit straight to the Heart!
Well done Raghib
and Thank you for this Piece!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Raghib

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for the review .

The word "slither" applies to crawling things. Especially snake. using spider and hunter in the first four lines stanza 1 is not relative to the slithering effect on skin and will.

"Like a spider weaving his web,
Like a hunter laying its snare.
It slithers on your skin,
Suffocating all your will"



You will be looked down today,
By the same beastly men .
Do not fear, for you are strong,
More than their insolence can consture .
Keep your head, held all high ,
Look them straight in the eye .
Make them wonder what is wrong,
When they stand in the eye of the storm .
Choke them with all your might ,
Make them scream for their life .
There will be nothing to be matched,
When you show them your pride untouched .

This last stanza gave me strength. You know, you may be expecting a review telling you something is wrong with this work, it will definitely not come from me 'coz it is a good work for me.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Raghib

3 Weeks Ago

The slither word is actually given to the thoughts in her mind . The first stanza is all about her m.. read more
Mirror

3 Weeks Ago

okay, i agree. Just the symbolism that don't marry in my view. perhaps, it is just me. :)

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