DREAMS ARE MY NIGHTMARES

DREAMS ARE MY NIGHTMARES

A Poem by Raghib

I sleep and dream of
what i never had .
i sleep and scream for
my belongings lost in the Duat.
and the oracle of Delphi,
whispers tales of prophecies .
the past is real, they say
the future will be the same .
and when dawn breaks in,
i wake up perspiring .
not coz of some wet delights,
but from these petrifying visions that fantasize .
i step out with this baggage,
my dreams disguised as nightmares .

© 2017 Raghib


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• I sleep and dream of what i never had .

As a reader who knows nothing about the setting and the speaker, what can this mean? The things I've never had number in the millions, and without knowing at least the subject if the line, isn't the statement without context to a reader? Someone we know nothing about is dreaming of things unknown?

• i sleep and scream for my belongings lost in the Duat.

So if the speaker is dreaming of things never owned, how can they worry about unknown numbers of "things," lost for unknown reasons in the Egyptian underworld?

• and the oracle of Delphi, whispers tales of prophecies .

So I'm lost. The Oracle of Delphi gave prophecies in response to questions. She did not "whisper tales" of them. I suspect that while you have intent for the lines, that intent doesn't make it to the page. Only the words do. So to the reader they mean what the words suggest to THEM.

When we release our words, we, and everything about us, becomes irrelevant. That's why context isn't just important. To a reader it's everything. So when we write, and edit, it must be from within the reader's understanding.

Sorry my news isn't better.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/



Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Mirror

6 Years Ago

My dear Jay,

I am not upset with your view. In fact you've been able to argue your po.. read more
JayG

6 Years Ago

• Writing as entertainment is secondary.

final comment or two before I go:
.. read more
Mirror

6 Years Ago

Yes, you are very correct. Some readers read fictional works for themselves, as you say, "ALL fict.. read more



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I liked the honest thought shared in the poetry. When dreams become nightmares. What is left. Thank you Raghib for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Dreams arent true
For me they arent.....It's just a paradox of how we feel
Nice piece :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


I absorbed these words with 'awe'.
intricate perception of nightmares in dreams.
A well written piece indeed

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

thank you for your comment costa .
• I sleep and dream of what i never had .

As a reader who knows nothing about the setting and the speaker, what can this mean? The things I've never had number in the millions, and without knowing at least the subject if the line, isn't the statement without context to a reader? Someone we know nothing about is dreaming of things unknown?

• i sleep and scream for my belongings lost in the Duat.

So if the speaker is dreaming of things never owned, how can they worry about unknown numbers of "things," lost for unknown reasons in the Egyptian underworld?

• and the oracle of Delphi, whispers tales of prophecies .

So I'm lost. The Oracle of Delphi gave prophecies in response to questions. She did not "whisper tales" of them. I suspect that while you have intent for the lines, that intent doesn't make it to the page. Only the words do. So to the reader they mean what the words suggest to THEM.

When we release our words, we, and everything about us, becomes irrelevant. That's why context isn't just important. To a reader it's everything. So when we write, and edit, it must be from within the reader's understanding.

Sorry my news isn't better.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/



Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Mirror

6 Years Ago

My dear Jay,

I am not upset with your view. In fact you've been able to argue your po.. read more
JayG

6 Years Ago

• Writing as entertainment is secondary.

final comment or two before I go:
.. read more
Mirror

6 Years Ago

Yes, you are very correct. Some readers read fictional works for themselves, as you say, "ALL fict.. read more
Dreams disguised as nightmares, very beautiful phrase. I feel those dreams which we call as our best dreams can turn to worst nightmares. But I didn't think that dreams can be nightmare sometimes. I really liked this poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

thank you Najam
Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

You're welcome.
When this title caught my eye, I was mildly shocked. I believed dreams are angelic and when it turns to nightmares, i don't know how to react to it.

"the past is real, they say
the future will be the same ." Got me goose pimples..... great write, Raghib.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

Dreams mostly show what we long for . and when we know we are unable to reach for those things, the .. read more
Dreams are something we can't really control. I think nightmares are fears that linger in our minds and hearts. Hold your hopes close to your heart and chase your fears far away before they engulf those hopes. Nice poem though.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

thats for sure Avia . thanks
It feels terrible.... When your own dreams turn into your nightmares.... And you get caught overthinking... Nice work...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

thank you for the review . keep visiting
anonymous_at

6 Years Ago

ya sure......
dreaming of the one you don1t or can`t have

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

well judged wordman . hoped you liked it .
there's only a thin line separating dreams, nightmares and realities, I think...
Quite a vivid write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Raghib

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the review
Keep visiting
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Years Ago

You're welcome, I'll try to :)

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