Fake reality

Fake reality

A Poem by Raghib

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Don Quixotes of this landmass,
Doesnt it pain your bleeding heart ?
When fortune despises you,
Smiling deceits abide in you .
Look how you pretend ,
That you have what you need .
By the celebrated divine grace,
"I live better than thee" .
Then what of him,
Whose heaven lies in his sleep.
Is this what he deserves,
Whose best lies when he is free .
Whom will they look down on,
To feel better for themsves .
See one more time,
You are trying to convince yourselves .
At the end of your time,
When the cold rush sweeps in .
Only then will you realize,
The truth of my chichanery .
I laughed as you suffered,
Just to feed my empty stomach .
These lies you weave so intricate,
Hid the forgery of my FAKE REALITY .

© 2018 Raghib



Author's Note

Raghib
Ever heard of the idea - "when you feel unsatisfied,
Look at people below you " .
This poem is my counter argument againts the thought .
Because how far can this chain continue ?
The last person to whom we reach ,
How will he console himself ?
"Whom will they look down on,
To feel better for themsves . "


The "me" in the poem is a choice for the readers . It depends upon the thinking of the reader , who they think it to be .
Is it the idea personified
Or the divine grace I talked about .

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Bravo to you, my friend, well woven piece.

I laughed as you suffered,
Just to feed my empty stomach .
These lies you weave so intricate,
Hid the forgery of my FAKE REALITY .

These are some of the best lines I've read in a while, piercing and true.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I love your thought, 'whom will they look down on to feel better for themselves' it is a thought that struck my mind too, very concerned poem that makes one think and feel for the poor.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Raghib

5 Months Ago

Thank you for the review Najam
Najam Us Saher

5 Months Ago

You're always welcome.
gives you something to ponder on

Posted 5 Months Ago


Raghib

5 Months Ago

Certainly wordman
 wordman

5 Months Ago

ron,and you`re welcome
It is a beautiful poem. I love all of your writing!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Raghib

5 Months Ago

Thanks . honored to hear something like that
Stanzas, to poetry, are like paragraphs to prose. They keep the reader oriented on the page and make it easy to find your place. You should be using them.

I read the comment, but should a reader have to read a disclaimer in order to understand? Shouldn't the work have context as read, in and of itself? Wouldn't it be better if, during the reading the reader makes the connection, and has that moment of "I get it!"?

• Don Quixotes of this landmass,
Doesnt it pain your bleeding heart ?
When fortune despises you,

You also need to keep in mind that the reader does not have your intent and personal interpretation of phrases. You address this to the "Don Quixotes " But remember, he, as presented, was a madman, and delusional, someone who did not realize his own situation. Are you really addressing them? His problem wasn't that he's not appreciated, it's that he truly was an entertaining figure because he was an innocent fool who mistook a common windmill for a dragon.

A problem we all face is that when we release our words we, and our intent, become irrelevant. Do your intent for how the reader should take the words, reinforced as it was by your note, comes in a distandt second to what the words, themselves, suggest to the reader, based on that individual reader's background and interpretation, not yours.

That makes it a b***h, and imperative that we either write with their understanding in mind—which is pretty well impossible—or make them embrace ours, without ever noticing that we're doing it.

And that's why they pay poets such large salaries. 😁



Posted 5 Months Ago



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