Touch

I have run a lot; just come and have me rejuvenated

 

Touch

 

When half of the world falls asleep,

You keep me awoken the rest of the night

 

When half of them are in their mid-dreams or

At the outset of another dream after completing the

Previous ones, you bring me your unspoken desire to

Hold you!

 

When half of them generally treat agony as bad part of life,

You come and say, “Pain…I want pain like a sweetest song!’

And it stays

Long after it has gone

 

When half of them finally take an oath of not to get close,

You suddenly vanishes in me with your magical touch

 

And I lay virtually on the stone, fighting to get me…

 

Deeper the rhythm,

Faster the storm

You stop in the middle like a rock

Behind which sets the sun and rises

On the temple of your flesh!

 

I am in the lull

As quite not often

As to find the job of love at the zenith,

Whereupon you made your city

Where I stay—

 

‘Tis all about your touch

That fuels me on saying

I love you, my dear,

As nights start!

 

Just touch the heaven taking me with you

 

When half of them cheer,

You tell me an old song

And I sing with your notes

With a backdrop tune of a piper!!

Reviews

[quill of shadows]

wow defanetly not my style but i cannot deny talent or a well writen poem when i see one thanks for the reviews btw and keep up the good work

[Sorry Infamous]

Wow, an instant favorite.

"Pain�I want pain like a sweetest song!'And it stays Long after it has gone."

[Ivory]

fantastic piece.. very creative! loved it : )

[T]

This is exquisite, Raja ... wonderfully written ... hugs

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

a beautiful piece of writing... great read

[Gandré]

This was such a sweet expressionistic poem for you 've chosen a style in which you are seeking to express emotional experience rather than impressions of the external world.
When half of them generally treat agony as bad part of life,You come and say, "Pain�I want pain like a sweetest song!'And it stays Long after it has gone-------------i mean here.

you reject that traditional idea of beauty and use distortion what well expressed the dreaming..... and exaggerating here ....... And I lay virtually on the stone, fighting to get me

and those non-naturalistic devices in order to emphasize------------- I am in the lullAs quite not oftenAs to find the job of love at the zenith,Whereupon you made your cityWhere I stay- -------------------and here you express your inner world of emotions.

Tis all about your touchThat fuels me on sayingI love you, my dear, As nights start!----------so your images are derived from your real dream experience, or imitating it very closely.


I thougth this was sweetly moving within itself... and sublime-beautiful writing!!

[Last Lying Look]

Wow. I really like this poem. I kinda of feel like that at times, which makes me like this poem even more. I love reading stuff that is relatable. Good job!

[jen]

lovely and romantic....sigh-worthy :) thank you for sharing

[emmajoy]

Think this is your best work so far, it's beautifully created. The feelings come jumping out of the poem...

Certain lines will stick in my mind...Deeper the rhythm, Faster the storm You stop in the middle like a rockBehind which sets the sun and rises On the temple of your flesh!

Many thanks for sharing.

[An owl on the moon]

Beauty and brilliance in the touch of love! You write this so vividly and deeply... Wonderful words!!!