Wept A Lot!

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Wept a Lot!

 

Weeping, weeping, weeping…

They weep all the time

Gas, dust, fumes, and anger

Over eyes, mouths open

 

For me, it is a puzzle

For you, it is another play

For us, untimely work-out

Of inept pain —

 

Just tears!

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

"For me, it is a puzzle
For you, it is another play"

I love these lines Raja, there ought to be something to say, on the tip of my tongue... I don't know.

For myself, life is a puzzle that I just can't seem to fit together. Other people do it so well... I keep trying to make the wrong pieces go together. Maybe if I pound on them just a little bit more. Doesn't make them go together, it just messes up the pieces. That's my life... a bunch of beautiful pieces that were never meant to go together... I never was good at games.

This was very good.

Thank you

Kristina

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

another very emotional piece... fantastic write

[Vanessa]

I'm sorry that it took so long; I've not had timeto geton here.

For one, the play on words is extremely captivating.
I love the way you stated this in such a simple manner.
The exclamation marks gave me an image of someone so swept away in their own simplicity.
I loved that.

This is an extremely nice poem that I will remember.

//vk

[Gandré]

Showing sorrow... this was unusual. To me this was like ... a poem written on a napkin....from a moment ..thinking about someone.. who loves drama. well, we women, sometimes like it. the drama.
well done, I hope she has the courage to the change.

[Emily Elizabeth]

A short but touching little poem. Very sad and sweet. But I have to say, i don't think the title is effective. That's my only criticism- otherwise, your work is effective and as brilliant as usual!

[An owl on the moon]

You touch on the emotional and the environmental impact of tears in your vivid description! Very sharply written, Raja!

Craig

[Ray Hamilton]

Sad but nicely penned
Ray { Not a Poet }

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

This had an emotional feel to it and although I'm not sure crying or weeping is the best way to accomplish something, it certainly does have its moments.. There are times when it is best to just let your tears fall and hope the cleanse your soul..

Wonderful write!

[Ms Jessica Renee]

This is an emotional piece and in it's entirety, it had such a driving force. Well written my friend.

[Sparrow]

The cadence and direct truthfulness of this piece struck me strongly. The flow was magnificent. I don't know how long you worked on this but it seems like it just seamlessly flowed from your heart to your mind to your pen.

It's reflective of the many different ways tears are used as an expression of the heart, and even as a weapon by some who don't have the strength of mind to get their point across in a less manipulative way. "For you, it is another play". Very well phrased if I take your meaning correctly.

"For me, it is a puzzle, "

"inept pain. "

Such truth to your words. Thank you again for sharing your talent.

[Kitty]

A very emotional piece...

Nice job!!!!

Josie