May you

This short poem describe a person's love to his/her partner.

May you touch the stars,
but please never walk away too far
May you land on the moon,
but please don't forget me soon‪
May you get everything what you want,
Your Boyfriend can forget you, but I can't
May you always cope up with stress,
I always want to see you fresh
May you never loose your smile,
For you, I can walk a mile
May you forget your fears,
Let your dreams be clear
May you never get hurt,
I will be there for you to remove the dirt
May you never forget your way,
Tell me 'what do you wanna say'
May you share everything with me,
I wish the world can see
May God never snatch your charm,
I wish you would land in my arms
May you become my wife,
I wish I could gift you my life

Author's Note

Would love to hear any suggestions....

Reviews

[misha]

This is a good poem. It seems here that you have a rhyming scheme throughout the whole poem except for the lines "May you get everything what you want,
Your Boyfriend can forget you, but I can't "
This throws the flow of the poem off a bit so I would work on revising it. If not, it is still very good =) Great job!

[Rajat malik]

Thanks for your suggestion.... I will surely work on it's fault
Am very thankful to you

[Coyote Poetry]

Last line. "I wish you would become my wife." A perfect poem. Filled with emotion and love. I like the ending a lot.
"May God never snatch your charm,
I wish you would land in my arms
May you become my wife, "
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Rajat malik]

Am very very thankful to you, Coyote for stopping by and checking out my work......I am just sitting on the ninth cloud.....

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I will stop by later and read more.

[Rajat malik]

okk :) thanks a lot once again

[micky]

This is a beautiful poem Rajat truly conveys love and it bring me hope :)
Well done :)

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Micky for your kind review:)

[sapna sagar]

bahot khoob .......kafi kuchh karna chahte hain aap.....sorry sabhi kuch to karna chahte hain aap.....nice poetry...

[Rajat malik]

Haan karna chahta hun agar koi WO 'special person' mil jaaye to

[sapna sagar]

arey!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!hai n tb itna!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Rajat malik]

Haan!!!! Jab koi nahi Hota tab unki kamiyan hame mehsoos hoti hai.....

[Rajat malik]

Haan!!!! Jab koi nahi Hota tab unki kamiyan hame mehsoos hoti hai.....

[sapna sagar]

okkkkkkk.................

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW ... I'm just speechless, your work is ADORABLE. Beautiful and deep deep feelings. I really don't know how to praise it. AWESOME! "May you touch the stars,
but please never walk away too far
May you land on the moon,
but please don't forget me soon‪" Amazing start! Love it so much!

[Rajat malik]

Am very very thankful to you....
Your review encouraged me a lot...
Once again Thanks, thanks and thanks

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are WELCOME! :)

[yvo miki]

this is a good peom it shows love in such a deep way I wish I could exprese it I that way 'I wish you would land in my arms"wow I loved that line the most

[Rajat malik]

Thanks a lot honey :) It's straight from my heart maybe that's why you liked it so much...

[yvo miki]

awww ya I think ur right its the best way to write

[Rajat malik]

Yeap!!! That's why I write every poem through that

[yvo miki]

good don't stop I love it

[Rajat malik]

And I love your review.... So, I won't stop it maybe to make u happy or to make myself happy, whatever the reason is....

[yvo miki]

lol good it makes me happy

[Rajat malik]

Yeap!!!! And my happiness lies in yours or my friends....

[yvo miki]

aww thanks

[Rajat malik]

Welcome

[yvo miki]

what u doing ?

[Rajat malik]

Chatting with you

[yvo miki]

lol fun !!!

[Rajat malik]

Yeap!!!!! Rightly so....I too love talking with you

[yvo miki]

am I that interesting I see how I am but coolzzz

[Rajat malik]

Yeap!!!!! You are both of them

[yvo miki]

lol well thanks so much I want to write but don't know what hay,hay I have an idea since we are friends lets write a book together lol the thing is I don't know how to start it or what kind to write

[Rajat malik]

Okk.....that's a better idea......

[yvo miki]

what is ??

[Rajat malik]

writing a love story, oh!!!! I mean a novel

[yvo miki]

lol ya we can start now if u want

[Rajat malik]

I am ready....

[yvo miki]

me to yay lol

[yvo miki]

gtg talk to u later today okay we can start then

[Pratyush Choudhary]

AMAZING,Awesome,Fabulous....these words are too simple for you & your poem......Just can't describe it in words.. ;) .You don't have to gift anyone your life, you yourself are best gift for your partner. Hats off master..

[Rajat malik]

thanks yaar.......but people don't understand this thing......
I am delighted that at least you understood my feelings

[prajakta]

so sweet...:).ur partner,a lucky one!a nice write!

[Rajat malik]

yeap....I too hope that.....
hoping to get someone who care for me like me

[Pushkar Prabhat]

beautiful emotions.........
passionate writing.......
very well written........
i liked it!!!
:)

[Rajat malik]

thanks, dear.....

[Jeyanthi]

this is what all one wishes to say to their loved one..
Wonderful flow in your writing.

[Rajat malik]

thanks!!!! yaar