Just then....

It is a short abstract from my novel.

Just as I passed off from my street, I saw her sitting inside her school bus but I noticed that she didn't look cheerful that morning. She was thinking about something, maybe me. She didn't looked quite happy yet she was adorable. I just wanted to hug her at that moment may be to console myself or to console her, whatever the reason was. I had never wanted her to be sad but after seeing her in that condition, I prayed to god to take care of her in my absence. After sometime she saw me staring at her blindly and she waved her hand to say goodbye. I also tried to lift my hands but I didn't had so much power to move them. Tears rolled down my cheeks and I moved my face in the opposite direction from her, because I knew that after seeing me cry she would also do that. I took out my handkerchief and wiped away my tears. Just then, in the background I heard the school bus leaving. Few minutes later I cried and I cried hard thinking about everything which we shared before.

Author's Note

It's my favorite Page from my novel..... Hope you will like it

Reviews

[Maumil Mehraj]

That was so cute :) you managed to convey the emotions loud and clear...
I loved it :)

[Rajat malik]

Thank you, so, so and so much.....

[Maumil Mehraj]

where can i read the novel?

[Rajat malik]

Sorry, but not yet published though am having it's hard copy.....

[Maumil Mehraj]

well whenever its ready, do tell me :)

[Rajat malik]

okkk.....surely why not??

[Rajat malik]

Although you liked it so much?

[Maumil Mehraj]

I am curious to know what happened before and after this.

[Rajat malik]

Hmmm.....actually I am stuck up in a place....I don't know what I should write ahead of that place

[Maumil Mehraj]

don't think about it...when the time is right, you will know what to write
yay! it rhymed

[Rajat malik]

Yeap!!! I too hope so....u encouraged me, thanks for that.....
p.s. congrats on your rhyming

[Maumil Mehraj]

hahaa....i am glad i could do that

[Rajat malik]

Hmmmm.......

[anne]

oh its beautifully written...very well described...:))

[Rajat malik]

I am greatful to you.... thanks

[sapna sagar]

nice cute & innocent short si story.....pr puri si hai..well written.

[Rajat malik]

Thank you so much.....

[Dipanjan Dutta]

The piece is nice. A little story full of emotions and well portrayed. Please correct the mistakes already pointed out by others and then this could be a short masterpiece

[Rajat malik]

thanks for stopping by :) I appreciate your views

[Dipanjan Dutta]

My pleasure

[Shubham Joshi]

it's good but there are just mistakes which you must remove

[Rajat malik]

I would be very thankful if you will tell the errors.....

[Shubham Joshi]

she didn't "have" cheerful face,didn't "look"

[Rajat malik]

okk....thanks will change it soon

[misha]

Other than some grammer mistakes, its cute :-)

[Rajat malik]

I am glad that you said it's cute....

[prajakta]

hmm..good work:-)........

[Rajat malik]

oh!!! thank you so much dear

[Pushkar Prabhat]

really intriguing........
well written......
p.s. didn't "have"
really liked it!!!
:)

[Rajat malik]

Ohh!!! Thank you so much, pushkar

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome bhai.........!!! :) :)