I miss you

A poem in which the lover describe the moment spent with his lover. He too miss the moment very much, just like us......

I miss the way you would hold my hand,
And the way we would play in sand
I miss the way you used to smile,
Whenever, to meet you, I would walk a few miles
I miss the way we used to kiss,
I really remember the taste of your lips
I miss the way we would talk up to midnight,
Whenever I felt lonely, you would make me all right
I miss the way you would wait for my call,
But Dear, you are still my baby doll
I miss the way you would write me a letter,
And your sweet words would make me feel better
I miss the way you would cajole your hair,
Though I know you still care
I miss the moment which I spent with you,
But now it's over so there is nothing new
I miss the way you went away,
I wish I would've asked you to stay
For I can't live with these memories,
It only hurts me and it has burnt down my calories.

Author's Note

If possible please point out the mistakes.
P.S.- Your review matters a lot :)

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

This is really sweet you capture the sense of missing someone and longing for them really well in this write!! :)

[Rajat malik]

Thanks for stopping by :)

[Mitali Shah]

very nice Rajat. I can relate with this and many of our frnds would. Thanks for sharing

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Mitali,
I feel obliged that you can relate it with your own.....

[Mitali Shah]

your welcome dear. God bless

[Gurleen Saluja]

A heartfelt romantic write. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Rajat malik]

you are welcome.....

[R Smith]

you tell the story very well, its an age old tale of love lost, it rhymed very well and had emotion and passion, well done Rajat, I read other reviews and I agree with my friend Maumil, it would be interesting to see you try blank verse, the freedom can be quite exciting, excellent work my new friend :)

[Rajat malik]

Thank you so much, Mr. Richard
And, yeah!!! the other time I will try blank verse only :)

[R Smith]

you are very welcome :)

[Mamta Vashisht]

Love hurts! People come and go leaving memories which gives you peace for sometime and then it gives pain. Nicely portrayed Rajat Malik

[Rajat malik]

Thanks dear.....You understood it rightly @Mamta

[micky]

This is heartbreakingly beautiful actually brought tears to my eyes...
Stay strong :)

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Micky, Actually It hurts when someone goes away from us......
P.S.- Wish I would have wiped your tears

[micky]

AWW thank you:) ....

[prajakta]

a well written piece.most of them here can relate to this:-)..

[Rajat malik]

Oh!!!! really prajkta.....
thanks for your review.
I hope you can also relate to this :)

[anne]

I like how you structured..nicely penned..

[Rajat malik]

Thanks Anne, for your sweet review :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Aw so Cruel! Lovely write... love hurts, right? :(((

[Rajat malik]

It does sometimes, but not when both side understand each other perfectly

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yeah sure! :)

[sapna sagar]

mai apni hi 2 lines likh du? yaad ek bahot chhota sa shbd hai,
pr ek puri zindgi bsi hai isme.,
har guzra pal jb b dohraya jayega
wo yaadein hongi us pal ki,
bbatei bhul jaati hain yaadein yaad aati hain.............

[Rajat malik]

Such bol rahi ho....
Aur aapki lines ke to kehne hi nahi hai

[sapna sagar]

nhi nhi last line filmi hai bass.....kehne hi n matlab....thik n likhi kya?

[yvo miki]

what languge is this ?jw

[Rajat malik]

It's Hindi, dear....
Mother tongue of Indians

[Rajat malik]

Nah! Nah! Mera kehna hai ki bahut acchi hai

[yvo miki]

oh okay sorry and whats Nah! Nah! Mera kehna hai ki bahut acchi hai mean

[Rajat malik]

Oh!! It means that 'No, it's very good' - I was telling her that you write nicely

[yvo miki]

really u where talking about me I feel special

[sapna sagar]

arey waah....2 ko ek saath tackle karna bhi aapko ata hai....kamaal hai....meri hindi or unki english.

[Rajat malik]

Coz you are really special

[sapna sagar]

what?

[Rajat malik]

Hmmm.....Kabhi kabhi karna padta hai.....aur WO bhi bahut hi jyada accha likhti hai :) @Sapna

[yvo miki]

aww thanks lol what did she say ugg I wish I could read Hindi and I wish I could speak it too

[Rajat malik]

Main Yvo Miki ko keh raha tha @Sapna

[Rajat malik]

It's too simple....I can teach you @Yvo miki

[sapna sagar]

:) :).......chaliye baad me baat karti hu......

[Rajat malik]

Okk....@Sapna

[yvo miki]

really yay

[Rajat malik]

Hmmm.....I can really teach you Hindi @Yvo miki

[Rajat malik]

Hmmm.....I can really teach you Hindi @Yvo miki