Ambushed by Silence

Ambushed by Silence

A Poem by Candle in the wind
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This was inspired by the 10 word challenge- I had to write a poem incorporating- "vase,water drop, throat,pollen,stain,ambush,wood,casualties,surprise,silence"..phew!..it sure was good anecdote to "writers block"

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The wilted flowers
In the stained wood vase
Trying to soak in the last water drop
No pollen or humming bees
Looking at them I feel
A constriction in my throat
A sudden ambush of faded memories
I look back in surprise
At the casualties my emotions have suffered
And silence reigns
A desolate silence that resonates inside.
 

© 2008 Candle in the wind



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So gentle and beautiful presentation of grief or loss. My wife died in December 2007 and I have had much help from good people and have learn to deal with the pain. I will always have moments though when something I look at tells me of my loss. These are beautiful pictures you have chosen that in themselves say so much. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The text is not as poignant as the title promises...definitely a nice piece though!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes, it is that echoing silence that gets you every time and the parallels drawn here between the wilting flowers through neglect is wonderful by way of explaining the 'dry, empty heart'
This is as always a lovely piece of work, heartfelt and true in every sense.
Cheers,
Helen xxxx

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your ten lines speak volumes..poignant...and so close to the heart..ITS INEXPLICABLY BRILLIANT..!!
KEEP IT UP...!1

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

One of the few pieces I truly enjoy reading.

Good form, well painted imagery, good choice of words, different flow, well imparted message.

A good piece

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a spectacular presentation of the words you were asked to use for the contest. Your poem never gave away the fact that you were using requested words. The flow and beauty of your poem doesn't show anything forced, like many poems that are written with word specifics.
There is a heartfelt and sad romantic story tucked away within your poem written with beauty.
All the best in the contest! This is truly a work of art with words and your photos with it are perfect.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So gentle and beautiful presentation of grief or loss. My wife died in December 2007 and I have had much help from good people and have learn to deal with the pain. I will always have moments though when something I look at tells me of my loss. These are beautiful pictures you have chosen that in themselves say so much. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The comparison of your life to wilted flowers in a stained wood vase gives this write a feel of desolation and despair...maybe hopelessness. So sad....in a world where dreams die. But for every door that closes, a new one opens somewhere.
Love...Liz/angelinmypocket

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very beautiful... we can feel an ambience of silence and solitude... fading colors... Lovely!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is simply WOW...I am at a loss of words and cant really describe how i felt reading this...
This is sheer brilliance the way you have breathed life into those couple of words ... they portray a myriad of emotions... Excellent work



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, absolutely stunning poem. I could not fault anything about this.
Excellent work, beautifully presented with those lovely graphics.
The 10 words woven seamlessly into the write.....everything about this
write was top class. Good luck in the challenge!

Helena :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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