Feel It

Feel It

A Poem by Rainslover
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I got to tell you- I am pure, you are pure, everyone around us is pure. Its just that we got to feel it-The Pureness-The Most Beautiful Feeling!

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Feel It

Feel It
In the deepest of Tranquility
Oh! Listen! The River Flowing
Singing The Purest Melody Ever
Warming Up The Heart
In The Chillest Era
Soul Burning With Love
Igniting Every Inch Of Me
Lighted By The Roars Of My Heart
Restless To Make Me Hear The Truths
In The Purest Of My Thoughts
Dissolved In The Purity
The Sky Swoons To Kiss Me
And I Give In To The Purest Motherly Arms
The Pureness Running In Every Inch Of My Blood
To Rush Out
And Be Absorbed By The Pureness
By Me
Feel It....


Who Am I? Who Are You? Why Are We Here?

The Only Answer I would Be Able To Give is I am pure, you are pure, we are here to be pure! Pure- such a simple four letter word, but it holds so much meaning! It's just that unless we feel it, we can't turn pure, but we would still remain pure! To Feel It, You Need To Remove All The Hatred and Ego from you and fill it with love. When you love and your love is pure, you get refined, you turn pure! So Just Love Everyone, Everything, Every Time In The World! 

Born Pure To Be Pure
Love Pure To Be Pure
Be You To Be Pure...

© 2015 Rainslover


Author's Note

Rainslover
This is the first poem I am publishing here! Hope you people liked it. Please give your valuable feedback. Appreciation and Criticisms are welcome.

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I can see why people would be apprehensiveness about commenting on this poem, it has a unique sentence structure and it shows a person of great understanding as its creator. I feel the need to go back to my teaching days and ask you a few questions, first question; If tranquility is a sense of calm and peacefulness does it have a center? That said I point out your first sentence and as the reader I need more information about this place, I think I know what you are talking about but more info such as it is on a metaphysical plain would help me the reader understand your meaning.
This line (And I Give In Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) you hove one word to many, the trick is to pick the right word take out, either the word IN or MYSELF. A person can either GIVE IN TO or GIVE MYSELF TO so which should it be? Well you have personalized this poem with the usage of the words me and my often so you should go with (And I Give Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) :~) The only other thing I can tell you is to be careful of over using a word in a poem, use it to many times and it can become monotonous and that turns a read off faster than anything. I hope this was helpful, you already write poetry very well and if will only get better, I cant wait to see what your poetry is like when your 15 :~)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rainslover

8 Years Ago

Thank you for such a good reply!
I wanted someone so badly to reply on it so that I can know .. read more
Bear

8 Years Ago

All that is fine but if you have to explain to your readers just what you meant then you have missed.. read more
Rainslover

8 Years Ago

I'll keep this in my mind next time I write. Thanks for reviewing this. :)



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I really like this one!
Well done!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rainslover

8 Years Ago

Thank You! Glad you liked it!
I can see why people would be apprehensiveness about commenting on this poem, it has a unique sentence structure and it shows a person of great understanding as its creator. I feel the need to go back to my teaching days and ask you a few questions, first question; If tranquility is a sense of calm and peacefulness does it have a center? That said I point out your first sentence and as the reader I need more information about this place, I think I know what you are talking about but more info such as it is on a metaphysical plain would help me the reader understand your meaning.
This line (And I Give In Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) you hove one word to many, the trick is to pick the right word take out, either the word IN or MYSELF. A person can either GIVE IN TO or GIVE MYSELF TO so which should it be? Well you have personalized this poem with the usage of the words me and my often so you should go with (And I Give Myself To The Purest Motherly Arms) :~) The only other thing I can tell you is to be careful of over using a word in a poem, use it to many times and it can become monotonous and that turns a read off faster than anything. I hope this was helpful, you already write poetry very well and if will only get better, I cant wait to see what your poetry is like when your 15 :~)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rainslover

8 Years Ago

Thank you for such a good reply!
I wanted someone so badly to reply on it so that I can know .. read more
Bear

8 Years Ago

All that is fine but if you have to explain to your readers just what you meant then you have missed.. read more
Rainslover

8 Years Ago

I'll keep this in my mind next time I write. Thanks for reviewing this. :)

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Added on June 27, 2015
Last Updated on July 9, 2015
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Rainslover
Rainslover

Bellary, Karnataka, India



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