Lost

Lost Somewhere I don't know the way!

Thirteen years passed,

As I grow,

I look at me,

From what I was,

What I have become,

All the smiles fake,

Dimples dying down,

The glint in my eyes gone,

My hands shiver everyday, 

With an unknown fear,

A pale looking me,

With no happiness,

Filled with greed and hatred,

I am no more the innocent I knew,

Who got angry at little things,

Who cried at the silliest of things,

Who laughed for the smallest of things,

For whom the moments of love are what mattered,

I know somewhere,

Looking at the golden cup of winner,

I have lost the golden me...

                                                    - Rainslover

Author's Note

Maybe this is what I cry for! Most of them lose themselves as they grow up. I remember reading a t-shirt in one of Ipl ad for starsports.com. It read 'Don't grow up! It's a trap'I used to laugh at it. But how true is it, you lose yourself as you grow. Maybe I have lost myself and I hope I rediscover myself one day!
Give your views on the poem! Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Bear]

The ever evolving state of youth captured through the eyes of youth, observing the harsh facts of life. Bravo! This was a great topic coming from a person of your age, it is easy to relate to by most of us who can remember the harsh realities faced by growing older.
Personal note: Every day we all change a little because of the things we experience that day and over time we do become a completely different person. But it is up to you in how you let it change you, an example, some people live in the past in an effort to stay forever young. I will tell you that growing old is not as bad as people say, it may seem bad at the time but someday you to will look back on your like and see it differently.

[Rainslover]

Thank You! Glad you could relate to it!
Ha I know it's actually fun to be old! You get to see life in so many stages and everyday stay happy if you want to be! There's a poem on it! I don't remember what but there's one.

[Chris]

Some children never have the innocence of childhood... just walk the knife-edge of the unblinking lost-eyes and the noseprints on the glass - forever looking in on what will never be.

[Rainslover]

I have seen such! Hope that they understand one day!

[1Disawsum]

Yeah, I can totally relate to this! Words so simple, yet it brings so much truth, depth and meaning to the reader... you grow up, things happen, environment changes, people and relationships change, and all of a sudden, you're thinking "Is this really me? Who I've become?" We change so quickly and so easily, it's quite hard to stick to who you thought you were... and sometimes, it's all for the better, changing, that is. Changing for yourself. Not for others. that is the key. Love this poem, brings so much truth! Well done, hope to read more of your work soon! xxx

[Rainslover]

Thank you! True things change and none can help it but your changes still depends on your decisions! We change for good, for like as I said you lose the innocence but then it is so that you become mature! We need to see and understand world because we live there and in this process we lose ourselves! However, we can still keep that bit of innocence and ourselves to only us and let that be open to us, in that way we need not feel broken!
But, the main thing here is as we grow we not only lose innocence but also the gift that comes along it- Sacrifice, Selflessness and Honesty!
Thanks for reviewing! :)

[1Disawsum]

That is so true :) you're welcome, glad to!

[Rainslover]

Yeah! Thanks!

[S.F]

Absolutely beautiful. This poem's simple raw words kept me lingering till the last line with its crude honesty and tragic truth. You transformed the reality and fears of a million people into 21 perfect lines. Well done, Rashmi! :)

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much! :)

[Flutterby aish]

13 and truth smashed in the face of all the readers. Wow girl, you wrote the truth in its rawest form. And I love that! :D Keep writing :)

[Rainslover]

I'm 14 dear! I just changed that in my bio! All the ones here think I'm 13. It was yesterday that I realized I was 14!Lol.
Glad that you love it! Thank you!

[Flutterby aish]

Oops sorry. I thought you wrote this when you were 13 so you see...

[Rainslover]

Nope! Just joined a few months back! And sorry ka koyi necessity nahi hai!

[DBKaine]

I agree. Innocent is lost too soon because of life, society and environment. Another enjoyable, truth filled piece of work.
Just work on your grammar a little bit more as its hard to tell where one line ens and the other starts.
I can relate to this piece of work. I've been there emotionally myself, so I can understand the emotions caught in every word.
More please.
D

[Rainslover]

Thank you! You can relate to it and that is the biggest reason of mine to right! So, I am happy! read moreThank you! You can relate to it and that is the biggest reason of mine to right! So, I am happy!
Yes, I need a lot of work in structuring and grammar! I'll have to spend some quality time for it! Will improve next time! :)

[pikachulover]

Yeah, I also think like this sometimes as if I've lost myself..my talent...my good thoughts and you explained it accurately, keep it up!

[Rainslover]

Thank you dear! It happens to everyone as we grow, but that doesn't mean growing old is not good! It's wonderful! But thing is you leave your childhood character and frame up into a new character! A transition phase! Sometimes losing yourself and being a whole new human being is good while sometimes not! Changes are good as well as bad! It's you who decide if those changes should be brought in your life!
Thanks!

[pikachulover]

Hehe yeah! :)

[Rainslover]

:) :) :) Yeah! Lol.

[Madison]

This really great. Good Job!!!

[Rainslover]

Thank You!

[sandpiper66]

A beautiful and bittersweet poem. I can feel the sadness at looking back and forward simultaneously.

[Rainslover]

Thank You! Glad you can feel it! Once you can feel what I write I have achieved my goal of making people feel!

[Vishal Suthar]

No age was so sacred than our childhood's.....Glimpses of our past..no..no..better we say Our childhood are still create goosebumps...

[Rainslover]

True! Childhood will be the best and I am enjoying this childhood though at times I feel I am losing myself!

[Vishal Suthar]

Oh..I must bow down to you...Great...Your journey of becoming a writer has been started early....Keep writing...
let your words invigorate India to walk on Good path...

[Rainslover]

Thank you! Just maybe they reach India!

[Vishal Suthar]

Yeah...then Let it pervades

[Rainslover]

Hope so! I would be really happy!

[jeannemarie coulter]

a fine penning which i enjoyed reading...as we age we loose parts of ourselves and gain others....sometimes we are better for it and sometimes not...never loose your ability to see the funny side of things...it keeps us all a bit closer to sane when we can laugh...

[Rainslover]

Thank you! True, the circumstances of life make us do it! haha. We should always see and appreciate the funny side. It keeps you insane which makes you sane.