Baffled

So baffled that we choose to live in bafflement!- A Youth's Plight!!!

Life goes on,

I keep growing,

The world keeps changing,

Everyday fighting a battle in my heart,

People have expectations of me,

I love those people,

But, I don't love what they love,

I can't do what they want me to,

The same things I did as a child,

I can do no more,

The same books they gave me to read,

I cannot read anymore,

My heart has started speaking,

It craves for something else,

It has a louder voice,

A desire that never ends,

Those people I love don't understand,

And I don't understand what should I choose,

My choice or their choice,

The one who I am or the ones I love,

My soul searches for light,

To hear the truths,

And every time I hear the same answer, 

My choice and expectations of love from my loved ones;

Puzzled,

Confused,

Baffled

Author's Note

For a long time, I wanted to show a youth's plight. The pressure and their feelings. No one can guide them and even if they can, the student doesn't listen. We are in so much darkness that we choose to be in it! We want to see the light! But let me tell you the dark has so much beauty! A beautiful feeling that makes you feel like heaven! You find beauty in darkness! And maybe that is what light is!
Please review. I hope this has come out well.
Appreciations and Criticisms are Welcome. Hope you liked it.

Reviews

[Confuser]

Rainslover: I enjoyed it very much and look forward to reading more of your work. Your notes are interesting too. There is beauty everywhere, I believe you are correct and very wise. We all learn by our experiences, good and bad and society's dogma will never stop. Finding who you are, the insight we all need to be happy, that passion is within us all. I have a 14 year old son, and OMG, it is difficult. And I remember too. Please keep writing; you are very intelligent and talented! Thank you - Dale

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much Dale! Yes, finding beauty in darkness is the light! God has got pain so that we return to light, the god in us! Yeah! It would be pretty difficult because all you want is happiness of them and all he does is sometimes not understand and sometimes you don't understand!
Thank you so much once again! Will keep writing, I'll just send RR of my good works!
By the way, good username! Lol.

[Confuser]

You're welcome: Glad you LOL about the user name; please don't read anything into it...d - I am certain, it will take awhile if ever to read all your RR....please don't be offended; I'm just under 600; but send a few and hopefully I'll get to read more. I loved your poem and found must insight in your response! Tks...

[Rainslover]

I'm not sarcastic, but I liked the username- depth and hilarious wise! What 600? I'll send only 3 or 4! Because I have come here 1 month back and have written only few and I'll send the best ones! And no there's problem! You may have other works!

[Confuser]

I will love that!!! Thank you....d

[Rainslover]

Welcome! :)

[Confuser]

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[DBKaine]

I love it! Not every poem needs to rhyme to make sense. Its dark but that's not a bad thing because it draws your attention and really makes you think of the words in depth.
Another great piece of work.
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[Rainslover]

Thank you! Glad that you love it!
I like to keep deep dark poems mostly out of rhyming! It has to be taken raw! Everything as it is! Your feelings should overflow!
Thank you!

[Otsana]

I have to agree with Bear that your english is improving with every piece you write.
I enjoyed this, it really is the mind set of someone young, it reflects that age where you are growing into your own person and you start to stray from what you are taught to think to what you as an indivudual think and you have brought that across very well. It is an internal struggle that everyone must go through but becoming your own person is very important and you should never let anyone hinder that. Great work!

Thank you for sharing

[Rainslover]

Thank you! Happy that I am improving! Yes, it is an struggle and I believe this struggle is for whole life, many such situations come! But, when you are in teenage you don't know how to decide, your confused and it makes you so frustrated! You are too confused to think! And that is all this poem is about- the confusion! Yeah! I believe you is important, when you believe it you can fight any struggle and the world against you will turn in your favor!
Thanks! :)

[pikachulover]

Great mann! My poem vacillation, it's the same thought though different explanation, I just love your writings! I hope, I can learn all that I can from you. Good one! :)

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much! That's great! I'll have to read that! Thanks! :)

[pikachulover]

Thanks to you! :)

[Emily]

I really liked the ending!
Keep it up!

[Rainslover]

Thank You! I was not sure if ending was good! Thanks!

[sereenaoutloud]

IT is hard when we finally get our own voice but are not supported! Always be true to you, have your own voice and those that love you will also love your new voice!! :)

[Rainslover]

Thank you! Hope so!

[Bear]

Great topic, and you understanding of writing English is improving with each poem. Let us critique first; a question for you, does these People have expectations "from me" or "of me" or "for me"? In the last line I am no sure what you mean by (My choice but love) can you explain it for me .
Now this poem is spectacular, the insight to the pressures of deciding if I please myself or my loved ones is something everybody can relate to. It is well written and you have taken a very intelligent approach to the subject with out alienating either the youth or aged. This may be the best of your poems that I have read, standing ovation for you my friend, clap, clap, clap :~)

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much! Maybe it gets more improved everyday! Planning to put these for the magazine contests! I was waiting for a review from you so that I know if there are any mistakes! You'r the best reviewer of mine till date!
What I mean is that my heart says have your choice but keep loving those people! I want my own choice but at the same time I expect love, but more than that it says no matter they love they don't, you have your choice and you love them, make them understand with your love! Something like that, I'm not able to put exactly what I mean in the poem! Need to work on that line! I seriously want this to be featured in the magazines! As a message to the world and as my achievement!
Thanks, glad to hear that from you! I always love your reviews 'Mam'!Lol.

[Rainslover]

And people have expectations from me, they want me to do something! Even the of me could work for this I guess!

[Bear]

That is what I though you meant but as you see from my question it could be stronger so you might consider using OF ME, and as for your last line it was your reference to you that needs to be stated better, try this....
And every time I hear the same answer,
It's my choice to love for my dear ones

I think you should do fine in the contest and thank you, it is my pleasure to work with you on your poem. To many people only want reviews of their work and not a real critique. It is people like you who are the future of literature, and as I was helped when I was young by a few older authors I feel obligated to keep this tradition alive by helping anyone who truly wants it. So good luck I will cross my fingers for your entering the magazine contest :~)

[Rainslover]

Thank you! Yes, of me is stronger! I want to change it! The last line- That's great! But, I don't actually want to convey that! It is for example I want to be a writer and they don't support it! So, I still want to be a writer( that is my choice and also what I love most). I also want to love my dear ones and keep them happy! I want to show both in it! That line needs more working I guess! Something perfect fit! Will see if I can!

Hope so that I do! It's my pleasure to have you say as a critic and reviewer! Those critics encourage me, make me want do more and really see where I go wrong! If my mistakes aren't corrected they remain mistakes forever! And if so there wouldn't be growth in my work! Thanks again! I'll write a couple more of poems and select the best! Thanks again!

[Rainslover]

Well, I changed the last line and of me! Check if the last line suits or is it too lengthy?

[Bear]

I still want to be a writer( that is my choice and also what I love most). See I didn't get that from your poem so maybe you should think about adding that into your poem, it sounds so much better than anything I could think of. And know that I only offer things from my point of view and are only suggestions, they don't have to be take or used. Critiques are like a map, it shows you only one of many ways you can go to get to where you want to be, it may not even be the best way but it will most likely be the safe way to go. I hope that analogy helps any of those people who thinks of a critique as an attack on their work. Happy writing my poetic friend :~)

[Bear]

Oh yes that is much better, and stronger.

[Rainslover]

Thank you! If that sets then I am alright! Hope I discover new places on the map! I have never taken critiques as attackers! There's is difference between the ones who discourage and critiques! Safe- true, but I want to go the risky way, it's more adventures, but yes I will need a guide with me who has been an adventurer once! It will help! I am helped for sure! I guess this one needs another para that will show my passion! I will put it tomorrow night after fresh-thinking of morning! We have solitary reaper tomorrow for test- you know! I don't what will happen! You know my surprise when I get more in lessons than poetry- because my interpretation of poem is different from that of my teacher.Lol.