The Devil Of Poison

When one is empty!

Words ran out of my reach,

So far that I could not catch;

My lips were sealed with numbness,

As I felt a deep sense of emptiness;

I was no longer the same,

I felt myself as being lame,

With no purpose,

Wandering for no cause;

Suddenly from this dead feeling came the race,

Of tears that graced my face,

In pain that was made of poison;

I entered the dark prison,

To turn the devil,

Who couldn't sail,

Alone, and craved for others,

To pacify my heart of their pain songs;

Years after I looked back,

How my heart was sick!

My second name was hatred,

All I did was to destroy and get destroyed...

Author's Note

Something I wanted to pen for long. Maybe some turn cruel just because of this. Just shadowed, maybe not really evil. The world alone knows its ways! And I know I should learn to respect everyone!

Hope you liked it! Do give your views! :)

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

Emptiness is one of the main reasons for leaning to the darkness. For if one cannot fill the hole in its heart, one will find a other (not so friendly) way to fill his/her hole. The world is both a beacon of hope but also the harvester of humanity at the same time. For some have reached for the light and others have sought the darkness, because were there is light, there is also darkness. No one is born evil, the world just shapes the heart of the person in the wrong way. For when one is born, one does not know the concepts of 'love', 'hate', 'good' or 'evil. Our environments learn us that in different ways. I like this poem and I find it an awesome poem. It is very well written and bears a powerful message that must be heard by this world.

Good job :D

[Rainslover]

No one is born evil. Exactly, circumstances turn him so an some how we might the ones who denied to help him in the past, to love him, to care for him and remove the emptiness. Now, the question comes who really was evil? So, we should never disrespect anyone and no matter what always be good and kind.

Thank you so much!

[Nightfeather]

No problem and you are so right. Being good and kind is the first step towards the ideal future of the human race :)

[Rainslover]

Yup! Thanks! :)

[Emily]

Great idea for a poem!
Love the title!
Keep it up!!

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much!!!

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Defintely caught my attention: both the title and the poem itself. I can't fighure out the theme though...

[Rainslover]

The theme is, he who felt all empty, like with no purpose no one to love him no one to care him no reason to live, turned evil because of emptiness.

[Rainslover]

Thanks for the reply! :)

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Oh. Now I see. I see it. Nice. Your welcome.

[Rainslover]

Thank You!

[Bear]

This is a little different for you, I like seeing you expand and experiment with new styles, forms and topics so well done my friend :~) and I just sent you a note about this poem.

[Rainslover]

Thank you! I'm trying to get well with my vocabulary and rhyming scheme. Thank you so much! I have seen it and have replied back! Thank you!

[jeannemarie coulter]

a fine use of word and image to create a word tapestry...thank you...

[Rainslover]

Thank you so much! :)