A Kiss

Inspired by a kiss.

Intoxication,
In flames,
Down my throat,
And through my veins,

Burning desire,
Scorching my skin,
Teasing my lungs,
Letting you in,

Sweet slick delirium,
Rapture from ecstasy,
Pushed so deep,
Searing the core of me.

Reviews

[Lilly]

Very passionate - great description

[J. Randall Dodd]

rasika,

i like this work. lots of description. i can see it; however, there seems to be a lack of greater passion. this could be helped with some simple change in punctuation.

o a kiss! a kiss
so rough and tender-less!
so wet, so searing,
so sweet that it turns my stomach
with burn'd desire.
take your temptress tongue
and twine it with mine,
that we no longer speak in recogniz'd tones,
only the passion'd moans of lust!

overall, i like very much. keep writing, you have a talent that has no need to be ashamed or fearful. later.

sincerely,
jr