Skin On Skin

Skin On Skin

A Poem by Rassoul
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Two lovers drowning in their hearts.

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We are on the same bed
Under the same roof
Loving the hell out of each other
And we got nothing to prove


Your fingers are moving on my chest
Making sure my heart still beats for you
Girl, you're my whole world
After it was dark, it turned to be blue


69 shots of whiskey
And I can't remember anything
Is it lust or love, I can't tell
Is it heaven on earth or we're burning in hell


We're talking and looking at the sky above
But not everything you say is true
And not everything I do for you
Is under the name of love


-Rassoul

© 2017 Rassoul



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To my feeble memory, it seems other poems of yours that I've read have been more simply-stated & showing typical love sentiments (a little boring). This, in contrast, is nicely complex & unexpected. There's a harshness in your direct way of stating things that bumps up against the loving sentiments that might be buried within, & I prefer when a love poem is complicated like real life always is. This feels like there's a backload of passion/confusion/indecision/longing behind your words (nicely done!) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


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Proudly passionate, those words really make the atmosphere warmer. Isn't it? ;)
I've always though that a poem is not an aseptic object but must 'stink' of life. It must bite and sting and make the reader bleed. What I like of this poem is that it does sting and bite: you picture a moment of intense passion. But then you add also the meditation: you question the Line between lust and love. The answer remains untold and to me it is a pity: I like when you go deeper with your thoughts.
The style is similar to a ballad, somewhat pop and frankly naive.
Only one note: 69 shots are enough for ethilic coma. I believe it is an iperbole or else the number holds an hidden meaning ;)
I liked it!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Rassoul i am back 😊 do you still remember me ?
Btw great poem , i really loved it , even though i didn't expect that you write that way , lol 😃

Posted 1 Month Ago


i really love this your storys really touch my heart you should write more like this

Posted 2 Months Ago


This does a good job of highlighting how relationships can be complex and varied in the emotions within them :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


Interesting...the passion there but a common thread in the final stanza I feel.Takes the reader through many emotions and well voiced...

Posted 4 Months Ago


Awesome, it's passionate and flows together really well!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Very well written! It is different, truthful, and simply beautiful. great job!

Posted 4 Months Ago


To my feeble memory, it seems other poems of yours that I've read have been more simply-stated & showing typical love sentiments (a little boring). This, in contrast, is nicely complex & unexpected. There's a harshness in your direct way of stating things that bumps up against the loving sentiments that might be buried within, & I prefer when a love poem is complicated like real life always is. This feels like there's a backload of passion/confusion/indecision/longing behind your words (nicely done!) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is catching my heart as I read it. It is enticing and romantic. Keep writing! :D

Posted 4 Months Ago


it has got pace and flows like a dance...
"Is it lust or love, I can't tell
Is it heaven on earth or we're burning in hell"

Posted 4 Months Ago



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Added on August 26, 2017
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Tags: Relationship, Poetry, Love, Lust

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Rassoul
Rassoul

Cairo, Egypt



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