More than a Tropical Paradise

More than a Tropical Paradise

A Poem by StayAnchored
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This poem is about my latest missions trip down to Rio Grande, TX. The camp there was beautiful and we got to experience many things, and this poem is my tribute to one of the most amazing work weeks!

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A tropical paradise might be all that one sees

But I witnessed much more- God’s promises to me

 

I saw the rain, the fruit, the birds

But I saw much more- I heard God’s words

 

I felt the sun rays, the sand,  the wind

But I felt much more- I could finally feel God’s presence again

 

I sensed the joy, the dedication, the love

But most importantly- I could sense God from above


© 2016 StayAnchored



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I like the repetition that kind went along after the the dash.
Also somethings that I thought that would make your writing better:
"I saw the rain, the fruit, and the birds;
I felt the sun rays, the sand, and the wind;
I sensed the joy, the dedication, and the love" - maybe just eliminate the and. It would make the poem more poetic.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review!
And you're right, that does sound better! THanks again :)
Dana :)

1 Year Ago

Yeah, no prob.



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I would've substituted "God" and "God's" with "world" and/or "nature/'s" cause I'm an atheist or something close to that. But anyway, I know good writing when I see it... this is good writing. And so I shall say it is good... meow? Yes. Meow.

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StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Haha, well thank you! I'm glad that people of different backgrounds can enjoy my writing! :)
Dead Alive Dave

1 Year Ago

Meow? Yes, meow.
i like the rhyme scheme and i LOVE the message. i went on a small local mission trip this spring break with my campus church and i felt this exact way. wonderful piece!

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StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Aren't mission trips the best?!? They bring out the best in you, force you out of your comfort zone .. read more
Wow! This is a great poem! It captures that sense of awe and wonder of how powerful God is, and I love how it illustrates how He connects with us on a personal level! Great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Thank you!! You taking the time to read this made my day a little brighter! :)
Jeremy Hiles

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome! Glad to help bring some cheer! :)
^^ Very well done! I enjoyed reading this poem. God knows how to reach each of us.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Thanks, friend! :)
~*~Peace Keeper~*~

1 Year Ago

You're welcome! ^^
I like the repetition that kind went along after the the dash.
Also somethings that I thought that would make your writing better:
"I saw the rain, the fruit, and the birds;
I felt the sun rays, the sand, and the wind;
I sensed the joy, the dedication, and the love" - maybe just eliminate the and. It would make the poem more poetic.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

StayAnchored

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review!
And you're right, that does sound better! THanks again :)
Dana :)

1 Year Ago

Yeah, no prob.

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Added on March 12, 2016
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Tags: Mission trip, Jesus, Christian, God

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