Sub Rosa

Sub Rosa

A Poem by Robin
"

under the rose

"

 

Opium fires
Flame transient desires
 

         Burn Baby Burn
 

Inked incubus
Pleasuring animus
 

         Mystify You Cry
 

Conjecture infused
Reality Bruised

 

       Dream Darling Dream


Midnight delusion
Flicker of illusion

      

       Your Truth Belie   

  

Black water spills
Desperation chills


     Slide Honey Slide


Surreptitious veil

Clandestine tale

 

  Lovers Disguise  

 

       Under The Rose ~

 


© 2011 Robin



Author's Note

Robin
at the invitation of the gifted Poetic Justice , this is my first poetic collaboration with another poet . I found it to be a very interesting experience , hearing two voices blend into one poetic vision ...


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:) well, considering that "sub rosa" means actually "secrecy, confidentiality", and considering the blending of the two voices in it (which is actually a beautiful blending, i'd say this is a wonderful poem.
in three of the single-lined stanzas a word is repeating, framing what i would call to be the essence of this "affair" - "baby", "darling" and "honey" - and their association tends to sweeten a bit the "clandestine tale".
i also liked the "inked incubus" idea, which in my opinion is a very nice and subtle symbol for "writing" (i may be reading a bit too much, but that's just me :)).
one can see that there are two poetic minds co-working here, but this is a collaboration that really worked, from my point of view - not always it happens that two different styles can bring to light (or to "midnight"? :)) such a beautiful result :).

Posted 6 Years Ago


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THIS IS WHAT...
I CALL POETRY...

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful!!! Two greats, on pen. Nothing can be better than that.

You two rock..
Mags xx

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved saying every word of this poem! It felt right to the tougue. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a gem. The counterpoint pulls at the want and the encouragement in the voices. Original phrasing wrapped in the mystery of the rose.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

marvelous wordcrafting! twisting along like vines with velvety shadows, surprisingly sharp points, and a lingering perfume. lovely work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I hear only one voice... and it's beautiful.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is a lovely collaboration..with both the voices in such beautiful symphony and yet retaining their individulaity.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yeah, Baby!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I admire any two artists that can blend into one. Although I have many talented friends, I have never felt that I could do justice to what the true essence of them should be. You two did an excellent job, not an easy task.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this reminds me of those oh so blissful dreams but ones that are hurtful upon waking and take you hours to move past the pain. This is what this poem reminds me of and you two have done a great job writing together for I can't tell the difference between the two poets here.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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