Sub Rosa

 

Opium fires
Flame transient desires
 

         Burn Baby Burn
 

Inked incubus
Pleasuring animus
 

         Mystify You Cry
 

Conjecture infused
Reality Bruised

 

       Dream Darling Dream

Midnight delusion
Flicker of illusion

      

       Your Truth Belie   

  

Black water spills
Desperation chills

     Slide Honey Slide

Surreptitious veil

Clandestine tale

 

  Lovers Disguise  

 

       Under The Rose ~

 

Author's Note

at the invitation of the gifted Poetic Justice , this is my first poetic collaboration with another poet . I found it to be a very interesting experience , hearing two voices blend into one poetic vision ...

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

:) well, considering that "sub rosa" means actually "secrecy, confidentiality", and considering the blending of the two voices in it (which is actually a beautiful blending, i'd say this is a wonderful poem.
in three of the single-lined stanzas a word is repeating, framing what i would call to be the essence of this "affair" - "baby", "darling" and "honey" - and their association tends to sweeten a bit the "clandestine tale".
i also liked the "inked incubus" idea, which in my opinion is a very nice and subtle symbol for "writing" (i may be reading a bit too much, but that's just me :)).
one can see that there are two poetic minds co-working here, but this is a collaboration that really worked, from my point of view - not always it happens that two different styles can bring to light (or to "midnight"? :)) such a beautiful result :).

[TAO]

Read this on Poetic's page. I'll tell you the same thing; reminds me of Evanescence, just the entire feel of it. In fact, I had to keep myself from turning on the music after this. Great stuff, Robin.

[emmajoy]

An interesting collaboration, two voices descanting in echoes .. some great phrasing; the language is quite extraordinary in parts. 'Clandestine tale' indeed.

It's always interesting to search for clues when two people work together, did he write, did she write .. here you can't even see the joins.

[Michael of Gilead]

Kinda sounds like an INXS song, in my frozen head

[S Sanders]

What a beautiful blend. The words roll of my tongue with ease. The poetic melody is memorable. The rhyming is seamless and non-forced. Kudos on the collabo.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

unique and beautiful~ each word sparks the next fllowing into a beautiful flame fanning outward~extraordinary use of language to draw an ethereal fire~

[MuSe Ampoule]

Love this. You both did a spectacular job! It'd be impossible for us to tell that there were two writers here.
" Mystify You Cry
Conjecture infused
Reality Bruised
Dream darling Dream " Love this!!!

[An owl on the moon]

There is such an interplay of dreamish fire, blended beautifully into one voice... one vision... Intricately woven into a passionate fabric...

[Fran Marie]

fabulaous collab! you two blended the inks well ~Kudos!!

[Brad]

what a collab...you two have such different voices but you blended so well here bravo you two

[E.H. Monroe]

yeah i was worried at first thinnking one of you monstres was a goddamn thief. see hers for a review or I'll just cut and paste it.
Greedy people always want a double review.

Shame on you both..

for being good