Sub Rosa

Sub Rosa

A Poem by Robin
"

under the rose

"

 

Opium fires
Flame transient desires
 

         Burn Baby Burn
 

Inked incubus
Pleasuring animus
 

         Mystify You Cry
 

Conjecture infused
Reality Bruised

 

       Dream Darling Dream


Midnight delusion
Flicker of illusion

      

       Your Truth Belie   

  

Black water spills
Desperation chills


     Slide Honey Slide


Surreptitious veil

Clandestine tale

 

  Lovers Disguise  

 

       Under The Rose ~

 

© 2011 Robin


Author's Note

Robin
at the invitation of the gifted Poetic Justice , this is my first poetic collaboration with another poet . I found it to be a very interesting experience , hearing two voices blend into one poetic vision ...


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:) well, considering that "sub rosa" means actually "secrecy, confidentiality", and considering the blending of the two voices in it (which is actually a beautiful blending, i'd say this is a wonderful poem.
in three of the single-lined stanzas a word is repeating, framing what i would call to be the essence of this "affair" - "baby", "darling" and "honey" - and their association tends to sweeten a bit the "clandestine tale".
i also liked the "inked incubus" idea, which in my opinion is a very nice and subtle symbol for "writing" (i may be reading a bit too much, but that's just me :)).
one can see that there are two poetic minds co-working here, but this is a collaboration that really worked, from my point of view - not always it happens that two different styles can bring to light (or to "midnight"? :)) such a beautiful result :).

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:) well, considering that "sub rosa" means actually "secrecy, confidentiality", and considering the blending of the two voices in it (which is actually a beautiful blending, i'd say this is a wonderful poem.
in three of the single-lined stanzas a word is repeating, framing what i would call to be the essence of this "affair" - "baby", "darling" and "honey" - and their association tends to sweeten a bit the "clandestine tale".
i also liked the "inked incubus" idea, which in my opinion is a very nice and subtle symbol for "writing" (i may be reading a bit too much, but that's just me :)).
one can see that there are two poetic minds co-working here, but this is a collaboration that really worked, from my point of view - not always it happens that two different styles can bring to light (or to "midnight"? :)) such a beautiful result :).

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Excellent -- Kudos to both of you -- both of your voices blended perfectly!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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This may very well be my favorite of yours. I love the meter!
I would love to hear this spoken!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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hauntingly paired. A stereo vision beneath the rose. It was like watching flame flicker through a frosted window. In jazz, there's a form of improvisation called "call and response" this piece reminds me of this. I'd say it warrants further collaboration.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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the blend is intoxicating

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It is interesting and different.

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great stuff...Robin..your a pleasure to work with...

Posted 13 Years Ago


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wow,both the voices blend so wonderfully together...i'm in awe..

Posted 13 Years Ago


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The poem is so good. The words took me on a journey. Each set of line allowing me to fall into the spell of the poem. Last lines are face.
"surreptitious veil
clandestine tale
Lovers disguise

Under the rose ~"
A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

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