Quiet Girls

 

ask the old man -

its the quiet girls ,

the ones you don't notice

 

she stopped   

on his corner in a spinning city 

twirling her silk umbrella

a rain drop carousel

of prismatic moments

 

life    

 

a secret in an oblivious world

the crowd moved around her

another stranger in a stranger land

she knew there was something more

 

beyond this night

 

she raised her chin

the spell of her icy eyes

quivering the sky

releasing diamonds from her mind

 

and the lightning struck

 

she chanted out loud , as he took notice

clock hands slowing  

street lights flickering 

blackness draping the rush of madness

they felt it  ...

 

Fear 

 

and she laughed  

"humanity bred in sin and greed

shouldn't mind this insidious weather"   

"artificial light , so easily replaced

especially for the human race "

 

and she looked around

having fought this battle 

so many times before

and thought how she probably will

so many times more 

she caught the old man nodding

as he looked up at the falling sky ,

and he turned and grinned

wide eyed and wondering

 

" Whats your name ? "  he politely asked

 

" Kali " she winked

 

and then burst into flame

a burning lotus 

upon the rising sea 

of chakras in the rain 

 

 

 

Author's Note

for Selene's "Poetry That Doesn't Suck" contest.

graphic credit - Woman Flame (Myspace Graphics)

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

wicked~ you captured imagery in motion~ a fluid reel spinning from the laughing mouth of endings on a fiery carnival ride ~ Kali has the best sense of wistful (and ok sometimes deadly) humor~ few capture it as well as in the tilty wink above~ =)~

[sienikeha]

wondrous! unexpected.

[Emily B]

oh wow!

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an intense heat is generated by such inspired writing..

[Jessi Leigh]

GOOSEBUMPS!!! How unbelievably magnificent, the imagery, the tone, the words.... goosies goosies goosies goosies

[Linear]

Often times we reach out, we ask our futile questions look around and they are no longer there, and it's then we wonder what we missed........so many chances vanish in the mist.

:O) enjoyed

[Kenneth The Poet]

Phoenix.

[Dream Weaver]

Enormous creativity going on with this…
I thoroughly enjoyed it. Nice scribe Brother!

[Danielle M.]

Very nice!

[Amber Betty Marie Child..]

im speechlees(quiet).....*silence*




so well done robin
always place the jewel
the (silent) part in the middle

[Quinn Blackburn]

Splendid wordcrafting! Beautifully woven with a razor grin :o)