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A Poem by Livana Lowell
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first new years poem

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Like the mixing of a painter's palette
above my head another dawn sets,
black and blue sky like the ink of a pen
brushed away like a veiled curtain
I taste salt and fish in my mouth
as my eyes turn away from the north and south
and welcome paper white winds on my cheeks
against my fingers, they feel hard as seeds 
I hear the melody of daffodils waltzing,
in prisms, the leaves begin gliding 
as the grass bends like a smile in the east
I breathe gunpowder, raise my head above a sea
of ideas simmering in my chest like fireworks.
as my champagne lips welcome January 1st. 


© 2016 Livana Lowell



Author's Note

Livana Lowell
so I wanted to try my hand at structured poetry instead of free verse. I may have sacrificed content for rhyme. Let me know if you can spot that. Let me know what you think.

I want to know if you can feel with me. Did I paint a picture? Could you see yourself there in my piece? Does it capture the festive holiday?

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Yes, there is a real sense of looking to the future - retinas still ghosting the pyrotechnics - the cordite on the nose.
The mind soaring on thermals of possibilities.
Yes Jazz Lover... to the future
Oh and mission accomplished re form here in my book.
And thanks again :))

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A very unique and new way of describing nature. Yes, the picture you created was truly endearing, it reminds me of the early nights that i stayed up with my laptop and just sitting under the swift sky. Either i dissolve on the keyboard or just weave on clouds.

I have written both structured and free structured poems and in my opinion the antique way has never took away any grain of emotion from any piece. Yes this poem is not better than the newer ones you have written, I read three poems that you wrote but i chose this one to review, there has to be a reason...

Thanks for sharing


Posted 3 Months Ago


You did. The good description made the reader feel your thoughts and the places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


Yes, there is a real sense of looking to the future - retinas still ghosting the pyrotechnics - the cordite on the nose.
The mind soaring on thermals of possibilities.
Yes Jazz Lover... to the future
Oh and mission accomplished re form here in my book.
And thanks again :))

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your poem is so lovely, I was right there with the words, seeing, tasting, feeling, hearing along with your descriptions. I really enjoyed it, you have an amazing way with words.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

no sacrifice done here...it's all so smooth, and natural i barely noticed the form at all...for me that is such a victory...
especially love the line, "I breathe gunpowder"

happy new year, poet!

j.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: new beginnings, celebration, new years

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Livana Lowell
Livana Lowell

Huntsville, TX



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Sooo, hello guys! Not much to say about me. I've been a writer since I was in kindergarten. I used to write stories about dinosaurs surviving the meteor (my favorites ones usually lived) because I had.. more..

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