Black and White= Grey

Black and White= Grey

A Poem by Perry
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I'd rather have black or white (good or bad) than grey...

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Black and White= Grey

Going to look for myself,
selflessly far and near.
If i return before i get back
please keep me here...

Flowing like a river
like blood in the vein.
Red like fire outside,
but blue inside like rain.

The world sings it’s lullaby
and I’m counting the sheep.
Life is a nightmare,
yet I’m dreaming not asleep.

Black and white,
wrong or right?
Black and white,
night or day?
seperated in blind judgement.
it started all grey.

It painted a portrait of the day,
threw away the canvas at night,
giving only one truth:
everything dies wrong or right.

Trying and fighting,
trying to fight back the mourning tears,
even after bombing years of mornings
even the smoke of the dead clears..

Flying is defying
nature it is true,
but never trying is dying
and never knowing
truly what you can do.
 

-Perry Moore

© 2009 Perry


Author's Note

Perry
idk i just hope that you enjoy and i'd love any feedback at all, I'd like to hear what any readers got from this piece good or bad and if anyone would like me to read some of there stuff just leave me a review and I'll go check out your stuff for sure. THX!

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again, another finalist in my contest :)

but this is a really good one, i really like the stanza

"Going to look for myself,
selflessly far and near.
If i return before i get back
please keep me here..."

that line if i return before i get back...., thats an incredible line

Posted 14 Years Ago


The world is full of black, white and so many shades of gray. We sometimes get trapped in the gray areas and other perceive us in the black.. or white. I dont think there is much black and white and gray is all around. You said it perfectly ! Thanks for sharing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Ah! I really liked this one...
I mean, the plot was really very interesting and thoughtful which made the poem so appealing to the reader.
Great work :)
Keep writing!

Posted 14 Years Ago


HAHA I just found a one stanza poem I wrote lol, so scratch that, what i said before lol! I'm postin it lmao!

Posted 14 Years Ago


yeah I totally agree with you legion, that's exactly what I thought too actually. I'm not really into the whole one stanza poems a whole lot, like I have read some that I really like but Idk I just dont really like to in my writings. Thank you everyone for showing my writings some love, I joined a couple poetry/writing groups on myspace and all everyone on there seems to want to do, is point out the flaws in everyones writings like punctuation and structure, s**t like that and I personally always have hated grammar class and with my rebellious nature anyways I just never really cared too much, I just write from the heart and just try to release as much of these pent up emotions as possible... But I really really appreciate the good reviews because I was starting to feel a bit discouraged because of all the s**t people would say on myspace. Ryosei, I do remember having problems with that exact stanza and I totally agree, i think i'm guna change it to what you got thanks a lot. and Sydney, thank you so much for your positive wonderful compliments you truly made my day!!! I'm looking forward to reading all your guys writings and showin you all some love.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I thought it was great overall, and I think I get the message you were trying to convey. The rhyme scheme is right up my alley, so I enjoyed that. The only thing that sticks out to be criticized is the sixth stanza which seems a bit awkward, but I can't pinpoint quite why. And:

"Flowing like a river
like blood in the vein.
Red like fire on the outside,
but blue on the inside like rain."

This is a bit awkward as well, to me anyways. I, personally, think it would have flowed better like this:

"Flowing like a river
like blod in the vein.
Red like fire outside
but blue inside like rain."

But, of course, that's just my opinion. ^^; Other than that, it was a very well written poem, and I like the message it conveys.

Posted 14 Years Ago


i really like the way you write.


Posted 14 Years Ago


Okay, as a whole piece it is a bit strange. With that being said, each stanza could stand on its own as a poem itself. Some (to me anyway) don't seem to go together but are very strong by themselves. I read this twice. Once as a whole and then second each stanza by itself. I think it works better each piece by itself. Anyway, I like it and it is thought provoking either way. Kudos.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on August 7, 2009
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Perry
Perry

Platteville, WI



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My name is Perry Moore, I'd describe myself as just a soul truly trying to find my higher self, my soul so I can describe who I am truly to myself. I don't consider myself a poet or writer, I like.. more..

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