For You I Will

more old poetry

 

Simple syllables

More intimate than a touch

A beautiful caress

I crave with all I have

They fall loosely from your lips

As pearls from a string

To roll across my heart

Like a defeated floor

Those three words lie

Thorns in my wound

They grow in suffocating coils

That draw closer

Every moment of your absence

I stand like an acrobat 

Tiptoed on an invisible tightrope

Tense and fragile

On the edge of happiness

With you on the other side

You beckon me

To come with you across darkness

With no net I can see

Your smile draws my love

You entreat me with a dangled promise

More lovely

Than anything I have ever seen

It reflects the light you offer

A stronger force

Than the screams  

From the spectators

They entreat me to jump

For the wire surely can’t hold

I crease my face in a crooked smile

To close my eyes

And dance anyway

Reviews

[Annelise]

"I stand like an acrobat
Tiptoed on an invisible tightrope
Tense and fragile"

God, I know how that feels. You portray love with a great amount of beauty and grace. The fear of it, the beauty.

"As you entreat me with a dangled promise
More lovely
Than anything I have ever seen"

There is just something about this line that just strikes me. Such a lovely poem, it really is.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

"They fall loosely from your lips

As pearls from a string

To roll across my heart"
this is beautiful imagery
i enjoyed this piece alot
nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[MorganLyn]

On the edge of happiness

With you on the other side
absolutely loved this line!!
great work!

[__Flaw__]

"For you I will"... Fron the header i thought it's one of those too-very-inclined-to-do-anything-for-your-love poems....but well...i was quite pleasently mistaken.

Just superb i say... :) ... Well done.

[Alicia Jean]

"Every moment of your absence
I stand like an acrobat
Tiptoed on an invisible tightrope
Tense and fragile
On the edge of happiness"

Wow. I have always tried to put it as beautifully as that, but have never been able to see my own soul so well in someone else's words.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Love this poem.. it has some great lines in it, so much beauty..

Chloe
xoxo

[John Stussy]

Wow, I love the haunting-yet-trusting feel this poem has. There's something else about it that I like, I'm not quite able to put my finger on it, but... I like it. Great poem.

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this one is really awesome. I loved this part greatly

I stand like an acrobat
Tiptoed on an invisible tightrope
Tense and fragile
On the edge of happiness

Good luck on the contest, I know you got my vote.

[Yvonne Heidt]

This is absolutely haunting. I could feel the tension. Great job.

[Rie Sheridan Rose]

Compelling imagery here. I have been at the end of that rope...and the other side always beckons, no matter how wrong we know it is... Well done.