Clouds

I'll do my crying in the rain

Please clouds, rain on me

Cause I don't want anyone to see

These tears rolling down my cheeks

This voice screaming at it's peak

Those chaos that are in my heart

That hole that is tearing it apart

The love that I lost today 

And the pain of being betrayed

The dreams that I believed

And the belief that was deceived....

 Please...., decorate my sadness with rain drops

And I admit in life, we need to face the dark parts

 Make this ugly scene into a beautiful painting

Make it a masterpiece worth craving

So, softly and slowly sprinkle on me

This wet comfort is all I need

Gently...... pour on me

Please Clouds, rain on me

Author's Note

I really love the rain but not in winter though It's cold..... lol. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I've said this before but why do we think that only tears are the medium to show one's grief? There are people around who bear all without a single tear but of course they are the ones who're thought of as tough and unsentimental.. Because maybe they have cried so often that even their tears dried up..
I'm sorry I was ranting.. This is a beautiful piece!
I hate rain btw because it seems to me as if the whole sky is crying over a certain situation..
Interesting imagination too 👍

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Tears – the outward symbol of our emotional upset(s). Your sad but poignant composition uniquely employs how the disguise rain would play in hiding the pain! Great work ...

[Sonakshi Arora]

This is a lovely poem to read! Good job and keep it up!

[Luna]

Thank you very much friend :)

[Zephyr]

Lovely poem, Luna!
Keep writing!

[Luna]

Thank you very much my friend :)

[William Liston]

I love the symbolism and imagery throughout this piece, with the tears representing melancholy and the rain conveying the underlying beauty, peace, and comfort. I also enjoyed the theme itself: a pain-stricken soul hoping to hide her sorrow in the rain. I think it's a relatable one in that being seen while hurting can be worse than the hurt itself. On top of that, I really love the beauty of rain itself in how soothing it is ... I certainly prefer rainy days over bright sunny ones : )

- William Liston

(PS: In line four, "it's" should be "its.")

[Luna]

I'm really happy of the way you described my poem so beautifully :). Thank you for your beautiful words my friend (and also for the tip ;) )Stay blessed .

[Beautiful Intentions]

Utterly breathtaking, Luna... Had brought heartbroken tears to these eyes. There is so much to love here, so much to relate too that I find it nearly impossible to pick and choose from the lines which had touched my heart the most. For a moment standing beneath the clouds with you... Pleading for the gentle rain to mask the tears... Not wanting anyone to see, to know just how much it hurts to feel so betrayed, so utterly deceived. These feelings of foolishness in even believing, in trusting in a love which has only rendered such heartache. Such a gorgeous poem this is. So full of emotion. Full of soul. As this pain has become a beautiful expression upon the page. Stunning.

[Luna]

Thank you for your beautiful words :) . And I am glad you liked it. Your words made my day. Thank you again ;) Be happy

[Beautiful Intentions]

You are most welcome, Luna!:)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

"RAIN" "SKY" "STARS" "FLOWERS" & offcourse "GOD" my all time fav's & this poem is extremely beautiful & soft.

"Please...., decorate my sadness with rain drops!"

[Shabeeh Haider]

Even at the height of your pain you are asking for the ugly scene to be transformed into a beautiful painting, a masterpiece.
I love this attitude. It is a hope that the Creator has not forsaken you. And believe me He will never forsake you.
Good things come to those who wait.
There is always a silver lining behind every cloud.
I hope the rain will not just hide but will wash away the tears and pain.
Wonderful use of words and rhyme

[Luna]

Thank you Shabeeh :). Every thing He made really is a blessing. All of these things around us have a reason for there existence so we should appreciate them. Thank you again for liking it :)

[Tony Jordan]

I love the song "Crying in the rain."

I think the rain in Winter starkly reminds us that bad situations can grow increasingly worse whereas rain in Summer reminds us that relief is often just behind the next cloud.

Crying in the rain shows perhaps a need to hide pain from our loved ones so they don't fret. It can be an ego thing too, wanting to always appear stoic and invulnerable ironically then a sign of vulnerability.

Your poem suits my mood Luna. I'm sure many can relate. Thanks for posting.
:)

[Luna]

Thank you Tony. I loved the way you explained it and I agree with every single word.And do you read minds (lol) How did you know I saw that song or is it because of the lyric I put up.

[Tony Jordan]

Nope, I dont read minds Luna, lol.
The lyric line you posted gave it away..heh heh. ;)
You're very welcome...