UTOPIA

steel touches the sky
like one hundred year old redwoods
passengers move through neighborhoods
like ant colonies carrying wants and goods
others lead the young seeking play
to relive lives of storytelling without delay
swinging on threaded vines
the king of the jungle awaits
childs imagination and
a thousand other fates
Natures flow still finds it's smaller path
cracks in cement nuture blades of grass
a pool of water, bathes a fowl
a song to the ear is winters howl

Reviews

[Aurora Lynn]

A very interesting poem. I like the image that you gave the reader 'steel touches the sky' and 'swinging on threaded vines'. Though I'm not really sure I get the whole point of the poem, there isn't supposed to necessarily BE a point. Though this poem isn't really the type of poem I'm used to reading, I liked it. Thank you for writing.

[Bailey C. Writing]

Favorited. I love your rhyme schemes, and I love the imagery.
swinging on threaded vines
the king of the jungle awaits
childs imagination and
a thousand other fates
My favorite part, myself. But of course, I love all of it.

[joshua deathdealer]

I really like this write. The imagery of a city with nature growing underneath it!! Awesome write.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

This is so full of so many images. I love the way you can take so few words and twist them into so many vivid images. I can always see exactly what your writing as if I was standing right there. xo

[Rene Velez]

the wilderness growing over abandoned buildings...yes Elijah my paradise...

[Elijah Gleaves]

A combination between the big city and a lush wilderness is that you idea of paradise?

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This makes me want to go outside and play again...........wonderful!

[Ruth]

And innocence could return through such a scene, a place we are no longer ghosts but use of our voice!
Beautiful piece love :)
xx

[Kenneth The Poet]

Awesome work to say the least. This is real utopia, not the bullshit politicians and philosophers parade in our direction every so often.