South Of The Heaven's Sides

Just another one of those short and quick story about bloodbath in the poetry way.

 

There's A Detective That Was Tracking

This Crazed Killer Who Left Him All Tacky

 

After Seeing So Many Bodies In The Dump

Tiresome, But Never Gave The Hopes Up

He Was About To Lose All Of His Strengths

But, He's Willing To Go As Much As Any Lengths

Just To Find Any Kinds Of The Clues Left Behind

To Know Where The Killer's Place To Hide

For All Of The Victims' Personal Belongings

To End The Killing, He Had Been Longing

 

Until Serial Killer Had Made A Small Mistake

Great Enough To Know Which Turns To Take

While Weather Became Even More Chiller

He Had Gotten Closer To The Sadist Killer

 

Finally, Caught Within The Harsh Arrest

Now, The Burnt-Out Detective Can Rest

 

Later On, The Sound Of The Thumping

Really Got The Sick Detective All Jumpy

Walked Up To The Door To Take A Look

Blade Went Through And Gave The Shook

 

Bleeding On The Ground, Needed To Know Who's In

It Turned Out To Be The Killer's Evil Twin

 

Author's Note

This is the 21st century, so you can't expect the typical serial killer anymore, because there's all kinds and types of the killers out there now.

Reviews

[Steven Pottle]

"Bleeding On The Ground, Needed To Know Who's In
It Turned Out To Be The Killer's Evil Twin"

I love this twist at the end- the killer's revenge!
I also bow to your rhymes- I try to get that flow and sound that makes me smile at the end of every sentence, but it's so difficult and you seem to execute this effortlessly...good read.

[Sean M. Addams]

nice ending ... nice rhyme flow and imagery is great...

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

hehehehehe.... i love love love the end hehehehehe.... it made me smile a really really big smile... hehehehehe.... okay... this was really good, i loved the plot! It didn't seem to flow quite right but i'm not one to talk about flow lol.... This was good... I like these dark serial killer poems...

[darkgurl]

"Bleeding On The Ground, Needed To Know Who's In It Turned Out To Be The Killer's Evil Twin" This is a well way to sum up this write, This is a most amazing write and I love the twist in it, very well written.

[Michelle Lea]

Yea I agree I know all types of killers are out there right, even the types that don't actually kill/murder someone instead they slowly take the life out of their victims... little by little, day by day, strike by strike and word by word until there's just no life left worth to even consider breathing anymore. DEEP write and the twist at the end too, I really enjoyed it!

[Nicole Renee]

Wow, that was a really good twist! :D I thought this poem was really really good. :]

-Nicole

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Haha! That was awesome! I'll be honest with you, most (if not all) of the poem had a bit of a comical tone to it... in my opinion, it made the reading tenfold better! lol Satire...

Assuming that this is part II to the other poem you've got, I must say that this serial killer is sort of impressive... until he made his mistake. ;)

Killer's Evil Twin? Scary... what could be more evil than a serial killer? cough*Catholics*cough

Great work with this one. You're quite the story teller. XD

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

[Nik Dendera]

Oooh, like the way you've incorperated the violence continium, escallating until he makes mistakes!

Liked it! Do you read Jeff Lindsay, by any chance? His Dexter series is amazingly, and disturbingly, accurate.
Loved the last lines, clever twist!