Illusion of me

The need to express myself

I ache to splash my blood on the page,
to pour myself out, wonder, love and rage.
I am neatly put together, attempting perfect you see.
Few know the complex paradoxes of me.

Reviews

[Robbie]

There is no greater illusion (than the magic of your pen)....this is me in a nutshell... I think we are one person. ;)
Great write to read over and over....as I always do. This is timeless!~xo~

[Revery]

Thank you Robbie, every word you write for me is worth ten times it's weight in gold. I cherish every one of them.

[Robbie]

as I cherish your writes... noble, distinguished, passionate, intelligent, eloquent, and timeless.... (sigh) Priceless indeed!

[Que Sera Sera]

I know I've commented on this before, haven't I? We are complex creatures.. Seeking perfection? Not I. I seek to continue to be a good person, enjoy and not waste a moment of this gift of life, and raise my children to be happy, self-assured, productive adults. If perfection is within that then so be it ;)
I love the first two lines of your poem the most - as that resonates to me as a writer.
Wonderful writing, my friend!

[clairekeown25]

reality is full of paradoxes, quanta, the tiniest of things and the greatest of things, every human being is a million paradoxes, every one is interesting

[Revery]

Thank you Claire. I agree whole heartedly.

[John]

The paradox, I suppose is that you need to be put together to express anything coherent or meaningful even if the desire is just to let it all hang out. The first line expresses a real sense of yearning. I thought more could have gone into the second line of what you wanted to pour out while I also feel that epigrammatic neatness is what is being attempted even when 'rage' comes too quickly and too neatly.

[Revery]

Thanks John, for reading and giving a great review with both compliments and suggestions. I appreciate that. This is really a free form that just came together, the rhyming was an extra. I may go back and rework it at some point and will definitely keep what you said in mind.

[LA Lorena]

I like this one a lot Revery. Glimpses shimmer in the written word, but to know completely takes volumes. Does the human body contain that much blood I wonder?

[Revery]

Thank you Lorena. ps, i miss the heels

[LA Lorena]

LOL. I decided to come back as me. I did keep the heels though, I used them for a recent poem.

[Revery]

Ya, I've seen your recent poems. ;) All that I admire in a girl.

[LA Lorena]

glad you approve. just being multi-dimensional. ;)

[Revery]

Multi-dimensional? Is that the same as flexible?

[LA Lorena]

LMAO!

[LA Lorena]

I don't believe in having two different accounts here. I write what I feel, and if the critics don't like it, they can tune me out. I don't belive in faking it or pretending. I write on many topics, and enjoy it.

[Revery]

Ya, I understand. I'm going back to that and republishing some works that show all dimensions of my psyche.

[LA Lorena]

good on you! you're off to a good start already. Will get the cold water on stand-by!

[MOON]

More then the sum if the parts. Well said , lovely write.

[Revery]

Thank you moon, you honor me in reading and commenting.

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

Love it..........few ever do really know us.......sometimes we don't even know ourselves.

[Revery]

Thank you so much for reading and giving such a sweet comment. :)

[Frieda P]

I think you've accomplished that right here, beautiful piece of work, so few words, such a huge message. It's perfect.

[Revery]

Thank you Frieda. I appreciate you reading and commenting.

[Jagged memory]

This is pretty darn good! Luv this write. so very poetic

[Revery]

Thank you. I appreciate you reading and commenting. :)