Yellow

Photo by: me

Have you ever noticed the color yellow,
no less brilliant but uncommon.

Have you ever been drawn to a cello,
it's music just as passionate.

 

Who questions the shape of a tree,
or measures the gravity of a raindrop.

Consider the softer gender

 

Asymmetric rhythm and variety,
are essence to femininity,
it’s strength not weakness.

There’s no true quintessence.

Nature shapes these,

to individual perfection.

All women bear it's essence
with natures affinity,
beautifully incandescent.

Author's Note

Quintessence: The most perfect embodiment of something.
..Embodiment: the state or fact of being embodied.
.....Embodied: to give a concrete form to or to provide with a body
..........Body: the physical structure

Essence: The basic, real, and invariable nature of a thing or its significant individual feature or features: or the inward nature, true substance
....Nature: the universe, with all its phenomena
....Inward: toward the inside, into or toward the mind or soul

affinity: inherent likeness or agreement; close resemblance or connection.

"A rhetorical question is a figure of speech in the form of a question that is asked in order to make a point and without the expectation of a reply.[1] The question is used as a rhetorical device, posed for the sake of encouraging its listener to consider a message or viewpoint. Though these are technically questions, they do not always require a question mark." http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhetorical_question


Photograph by: me

Reviews

[Laura Maidah]

@Revery: It repeats the suffix. It's literally the same word at the end. It sounds like a mental stutter IMHO. But I get what you're saying about theme. Try a synonym? Probably for "essence'. I love quintessence. It's quintessential to your whole vignette.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is a Gorgeous write...one of my favorites!! ...a Classic for all time....I will come back and read again!

[Revery]

I'm playing with adding a transition line in the middle. The new line is
"Consider the softer gender"

In thinking through the experience of the reader, the second half of the poem and real focus of the poem just comes out of nowhere.

I'll read it with this sentence for a while but feel like I can do better with that one line.

I'm thrilled with the photo and have special permission for it, so if this poem is ever published hopefully the photographer will want to participate.

[The Refined Poet]

I love the flow of this poem. Beginning with the color and transitioning to the beauty and form of the woman. excellent!

[Revery]

Thank you. Your the first that noted that. Since I wrote it I couldn't get a fresh read/perspective if it lead the thought process the way I intended. I tried to get the reader to think about things not so popular/common that were not lacking in beauty just because of conventional opinion and than into a beauty that should hold no convention, that of the feminine form. Thanks again

[Yellow Butterfly]

I like your appreciation and attention to detail in this exquisite write. Not just for the detail surrounding the Cello, nor just for the way you questioned the shape of the tree and not forgetting your perception on a woman's femininity all of which are a sublime overview written by a wonderful fellow. But for the way you built this poem around my favourite colour yellow.

I loved it :O)

[Revery]

Lol, great color isn't it. Thank you for your kind review.

[Yellow Butterfly]

Brightens up my world...... *smile*

[Revery]

By the way, I took that photo. I'm proud of it, I think its the best of my photography hobby.

[Yellow Butterfly]

It's beautiful and you've captured the true essence of nature in your lense...it looked like a truly beautiful day.

[Revery]

Thank you.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Beautiful words! I love the use of women compared and combined with nature! Great write!

[Revery]

Thank you Priscilla!

[Priscilla Sayers]

You are always a pleasure to read sweet man!

[Blue Ivory]

This is beautiful! I love the words, they make my mind sway lol :P
And this picture is so lovely! our poem made me smile. The words just flow so easily with you :)

[Revery]

Thank you Siren, haven't spoken in a while, hope your doing well.

[Blue Ivory]

Yes, I am :) Thanks so much for asking. You?

[Pax]

the poem show appreciation to our mother nature and its creation. I like it. its has a calming feel on it. good job..

[Revery]

Thank you again

[Debbie_Philly]

Oh this is gorgeous..... so much beautiful imagery.... it was a pleasure to read!! :)

[Tate Morgan]

Very deep thought on our place in this universe

[ChaoticSoul]

This is really gorgeous. The soft yellow imagery that carries on throughout the whole poem really builds a wonderful structure and theme. I love your vocabulary choices as well!

[Revery]

Thank you so much, I am flattered by your review. This is my serious poem, this is the one I have hopes for.

[Bats In The Belfry]

Beautifully orchestrated poem. I wish the world could see with your eyes.