Two Roads...

Two roads diverged in a black wood

Robert Frost travelled this way long ago

For hours and hours and hours I stood

Staring at the now-black barks in the wood

And the tiny springing grass, lifeless because of snow

The first road was thorny, the vision blurred

The second one was cold, and overgrown

I stood like a statue, for an hour, not saying a word

The heavy load on my back was now seeming absurd

I was cold, confused, very scared and alone

Next morning, the black leaves spread before me on the road

I couldn't make out which was more worn down

So I was ready enough to lighten my load

The projection of the idea my mind showed

The enlightening dream which broke with the break of dawn

The area where the roads diverged

Fearless, I walk between the two ways

I walk into another path, as the trees merged

When I looked back, the trees had disappeared

And slided to the sides with grace

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Can't make a choice?

Can't choose a way?

Make your own path

Make your own way

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Author's Note

Where there is a will, there is a way...

This is NOT a copy of the poem 'The Road Not Taken' by Robert Frost, it is very deeply inspired by it. And, this is DEFINITELY NOT a parody of that poem AT ALL. Robert Frost is one of my favorite poets, and 'The Road Not Taken' is one of my favorite works. It's just about what I would do, if I was in Robert Frost's place.

It's in the ABAAB format, which I've tried for the first time, so if it's not upto your standards: please review it accordingly. lol.

Forever and Always
Rhea

Reviews

[Belle]

I strongly agree, definitely this is not a copy of the poem " The Road Not Taken" for like you this one from Robert Frost is one of my favorites so I know it more than any other poem ( well except for The Man with the Hoe).

As to your poem I was impressed by breaking out with the kind of mind set with how most readers understand its theme.
You made an excellent point, that why not make your own trail instead of following the road that have been set by others. Reminded me so much of Steve Jobs. " Do not live by somebody else' dogma", for we have a chance to make a difference.

As to the form, I believe each stanza is a cinquain, but I find the form more like of a black verse and good for the poem for it speaks louder with the intended meaning of the content. If you may validate black verse is a form of rebellion against the classical form.

[Reeti]

It's a beautiful verse. When i first read the title, it reminded me of Robert F.'s famous work. You are no plagiarist, since u have mentioned the original author's name giving him some credit in the first stanza. i must say your own way of conceiving paths is very influential and enticing... although Robert's one is more dramatic to me. Your first stanza is most intriguing. You've put the perfect image to go with your poem. The rhyming is also well-done. The varying syllables have been presented impressively.

[timothygalexander]

"The springing grass dead from snow" seems a little out of place. You place a lot of emphasis on the trees, e.g. Wood, leaves, bark( I know wood is the reference to the entire biosphere but it still has a strong connotation of trees)
Second, "enlightening" is an overused word, and for a poem as original as yours, Perhaps revealing or cathartic might work. Either way I enjoyed, thank you.

[Southern Cross]

Loved this inspiring poem Rhea..made me stop and pause in my day and that's a good thing..Miss you girl been awhile for me

[Aehr]

thanks!
i know.. miss you too!!!!

[Hester Vane]

Good job, the structure and rythum is strong.

[PurpleQuartz]

That was a really amazing poem!! I loved the whole meaning in it.

[deepblue04]

OMG I love Robert Frost, and I like how this is inspired by it, He's amazing!

[Danielle]

I have to say this is one of my favorite poems that I have read. I love that you were inspired by Robert Frost and out of that inspiration you created a beauty of a poem!!!

[AK]

Wow girl! This poem is so utterly brilliant! It did remind me, strongly, of the Road Not Taken by Robert Frost (the title itself did actually) but I completely get a deeply inspired poem. It shows how passionate you feel about the poem and the author of the poem too. You have my complete awe and appreciation. Keep writing!

[Becca Bishop]

You know, I totally agree with Zainab UF.... TOTALLY FREAKING BRILLIANT!!!!!! But I did mine in caps so obviously I should get a cookie and or some other delectable treat. Robert Frost is the greatest, isn't he? Pure genius!! Wow, just like you!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The Road Not Taken is a great piece, and your spin on it is just as great, if not better. I especially loved the next to last stanza, about making your own path instead of just choosing one someone else has already made. Beautiful piece you've got here. You obviously deserve a cookie and/or some other delectable treat for your inspirational writing!!! I'd give you one...but they're mine :D Don't hold it against me.

Amazing write!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D :D :D

[Aehr]

wow, thankyou. you do deserve a cookie. Give yourself one for me! lol

[Becca Bishop]

Well ok :D if you insist :D :D :D