Fields of the Moon

Fields of the Moon




Warm the fairest moon;
sleeping with our wild flowers
blossomed from earthly cadence;
the breath of children,
cradled beneath the sunless shade.

Burn our matured roots;
hands bound in fetal sap
beaten by sharpened metal
while our sweetened teeth
bite the rotting wood.

Kiss my purple petals
with your soothing rain
gliding along the tips
of my clutching leaves,
aroused inside the storm.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Samuel Jack]

Wow, this an erotic tour de force! Rich green vivid images flooded my brain!

The last stanza is the classiest,sexiest thing I've read in a while.

Of course it could just be about watering plants, that's why this poem is so arresting.

Good words Mad Benthil, good words indeed.

[Vria P Crow]

HAHA I love the beginning like of your Review! "Erotic tour de force!"

To be honest, I knew I could make Nature sexy with my play on words. ;)

~signed
Mistress Ayra Benthil

~the MAD BENTHIL!

[Heno Zwarts]

...liked the rhythm of this piece that mirrored the pull and the sway of the Moon.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you for reading, Heno! I am annoyed that past submissions with images changed so I have to edit the picture. Your short and sweet observations are always welcome. :)

[Mark]

I'm getting mixed imagery. A night scene, a violent one, and an intimate finish. I shall get my head wrapped around them eventually.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you for your thoughts :) Storms around my house begin quite quickly. They converge into a nice, shiny day to a cloudy day. Believe it or not, it stormed like crazy a short while after I took the photo.

[Mark]

I was born in Berlin NH, have lived there in two periods of my life. I wrote about a summer thunder storm I experienced in Milan NH actually.

[Vria P Crow]

I fancy Berlin! I am from the Northeast in America so I experience the Four Seasons. It sounds beautiful! Please send it by inbox, dear.

[Mark]

You are from the Northeast.. Maine I see... so you DO know where NH is right LOL

[Vria P Crow]

LMAO HAHA Yeah, sorry...I am alittle drunk so bare with me! :P

[Mark]

*tickle*
no problem

[Vria P Crow]

*giggles and runs away

[dw817]

That first stanza is really quite enchanting. And lovely photography - I am understanding these are your original photos as well. You must live in a beautiful countryside. :)

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you, dear:)

Yes, these are my original photos. I live nearby there so it is a treat :)

sincerely,
ria


I wanted to publicly apologize for attacking you the other day. You should be able to comment on my last Review.

[dw817]

I deleted it thinking it was an attack since I was unable to reply due to being blocked by you. I don't keep messages that I cannot reply to - as I answer all messages sent my way, if I can. I'm sorry ...

[Vria P Crow]

Oh, I understand. I would have done the same. No not apologize. I was highly immature that night.

[dw817]

That's fine. I would've replied tactfully and politely nonetheless. :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Kiss my purple petals
with your soothing rain
gliding along the tips
of my clutching leaves,
aroused inside the storm."
A splendid read and write...:)

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you. This seems to be the favorite stanza of each one :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Larry Dyson]

I especially think that the last stanza fits well with this pic..."Kiss my purple petals
with your soothing rain
gliding along the tips
of my clutching leaves,
aroused inside the storm."

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you Eclipsing Moon :)

[Friday]

Very beautiful writing that seems (to me) to suit the motif very expressively. The ending is simply wonderful. Thanks!

[Vria P Crow]

You are very welcome :) Thank you for the kind compliments :)

[Larry Dyson]

nice write on the picture..was yours a picture first then poem like mine was?

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you :) I'm not sure. I take these photographs and then place the poem.

[Vria P Crow]

Okay, I reread that! :P I wrote the poem first.

[Rahul]

Wowo, what a beautiful pics and poem...i want to read it's IInd version...can you write for me plz.. ?
i wanna read more....500/100 :)
beautiful written.

[Vria P Crow]

Thank you:D I'm sorry, but did you mean lined version?

[Rahul]

I meant you can add few more lines ...i wanna read more..so continue it :)

[Vria P Crow]

haha Oh, I'm sorry haha I'm so silly. I shall do that.