In these quiet places (softly sensual)

Free Verse (lines of poetry written in a poetic voice, with no particular structure, no rhymes, that flows, with line-breaks in smooth and comfortable places)

In these quiet places …

Come, let me pull you gently into our quietness,

where wonder has etched the loveliness of

your softly alluring "take me" eyes

permanently into my hopeful,

azure blues,

where the dawns rise silently ~ gently

to mist our early skies with gold

before surrendering...

on unto the day.

Let us entwine our ever-willing, hungry fingers

in quiet, reverent solitude...

to stroll through boundless amber fields,

where wild stalks of wheat in training

learn to weather life's gloriously

gentled breath of creation,

waving as one together

at all awe-struck

passers-by.

Let me know you in your quiet stillness,

as I have known you like soft waves

fondling the excited shore, while

You are siren, I am sailor...

where the all of us is

~ Eternity.

Let me love you in your calm moments,

that I may know it is me your loins

open in aching hunger for, and

it is for me your eyes close

when your sighs breathe

and flow softly down

o'er me from your

lusty throat.

Then, in the solitude of this time, Our time...

embraced in these hushed surroundings,

let our souls meld into matrimony,

with no clergy or witnesses,

....and....

in these quiet places, let me be

the sole reason your arms,

your moist lips, and

your world

exists.

Richard W. Jenkins

©2016

1st PLACE

Blue Rose Café's

Free Verse Romance Contest

Author's Note

Photograph, from Wikimedia Commons.

This may be a bit too long for some — it is my shamelessly-exuberant pen I blame it on … LOL!

Constructive critique is always welcome. : )

Reviews

[Ruth]

Ah, I am always so pleased when I get the time to read you Richard :) What a piece of honey smooth balm to the senses. A delightful treat, I always find and feel such energy in your writing, magnificent. I have to say these few lines are are epic :)

"Let me know you in your quiet stillness,
as I have known you like soft waves
fondling the excited shore, while
You are siren, I am sailor...
where the all of us is
~ Eternity."

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Sweet Ruth! ; )
Ya know?
As I was reading through the increasingly warming words of your review, it began to dawn on me how perfect they are, coming from one romantic, sensual-hearted, vibrantly alive, and alluring poet to another whom seem to completely understand and embrace one another in a truly meaningful way few possibly can.
Ahhh, but you undoubtedly know what this passion is like, to be appreciated, enjoyed, felt, almost inhaled in such a way only an equal can.

You stir me, make me feel alive and light, aglow with the happiness of your presence.
Thank you, M'Dear Lovely Poetess, for blessing me with your tender warmth … yours! ⁓ Richard

[Ruth]

Always my pleasure Richard and thank you for the smile :)

[SJ Mullins]

This leaves me breathless. So sensual in a beautifully subtle way, and the imagery is amazing. Again, I say like I said previously, "Man, I wish I could write like that!" I like the form too. I've never seen a poem done like that. It's awesome. Brilliant write. Great read. :)

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Suzanna,
It is such a lovely, gracious, and adoring review you've gifted this unique piece; I find myself rather breathless from your deeply gratifying accolades.
We each have our own un-matched style of writing, and yours (in its own way) is every bit as impressive as mine, some even more-so. ; )
The visual form was not on purpose, but is built from the movement of poetic voice, much as movement of cattails, reeds, and ripples on a pond are created by the wind, each grouping leading down to a crescendo of thought, feeling, emotional apex, all determined by line-breaks, too.

Your review is quite awesome and brilliant, too … big hugs of thanks to you! ⁓ Richard

[SJ Mullins]

You're welcome. :)

[kitty blur]

Such an aesthetically pleasing structure!! As if that wasn't enough, you made me fall in love with the person that you wrote this for. It's a soft and easy poem to read. I didn't think it was too long, but that was because I was so eager to read what other pretty words you would offer up in the next stanza. Nice.

[Richard🖌]

Hi there, Lovely Lady Kitty! : )
It is such a joyful pleasure to receive the warmth, appreciation, and praise flowing all through your words … you certainly know how to let a bard know his efforts have touched your emotion, thought, and spirit in rather wondrous ways.
Yours, the review an earnest artist paints his words upon the page in hopes of receiving … my mind, heart, and soul give their most warm and grateful thanks to you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Samantha Canela]

Beautiful language. I love the way the poem blows, like breathing, or the tides. How at the beginning of each stanza is the inhale, the wave breaking, and the naturally and gently coming to it's end. It is beautiful, thank you for sharing

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dear Samantha! : )
I makes me very happy you've selected this lovely, romantic, and sensually-visual little piece to read and review.
I really enjoyed the beauty of your analogy, Samantha … a poem in itself … expressing ever-so vividly, almost a gentle chant I felt touch and wash over me.

I offer you my warmest welcome, my sincere thanks, too, for blessing me so wonderfully … most grateful hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[William Liston]

This is a lovely poem. The way you used exquisite imagery to capture a sense of tenuous bliss was almost too perfect. This poem, through both its vivid imagery and elegant appearance, is a work of art all by itself.
With each word, I felt myself entranced by your masterful use of syntax and vocabulary. Amazing poem. Amazing structure. I give this a 12 out of 10.

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, William!
You keep up with the accolades and my hat soon won't fit … LOL!
Truly, My Friend, your poetic acumen is second to none, and how you perceive my humble little compositions makes every earnest effort feel all the more worthwhile.
Most anyone can create impressive poetry: All they need do is paint with words the imagery in their head, heart, and soul, blend their ink with Nature's colors, textures, and hues, throw-in a pinch of temperature, breeze, and sun or moonlight, and wallah … a poem emerges onto the page! A push here, a tug there, a bit of moving around, shuffling, replacing, sorting it all just the way it best fits one's imagination, desires, and needs, and it's a done deal. ; )

Thank you, William, for your wonderfully gratifying, and always honest, reviews … many gracious blessings, My Friend! ⁓ Richard

[William Liston]

You're welcome, and I must say that this poem is, in part, where I got the idea for my poem "In The Night." I liked how this poem conveyed a sense of loveliness while still maintaing a bit of yearning--a bit of wanting and not having in other words.

[William Liston]

By the way, I wouldn't say that my "poetic acumen is second to none," but I greatly appreciate the compliment.

[Richard🖌]

On here it is. : )

[GalaxyGhost]

This poem is very soothing that I could hear angels narrating it from the heavens. You, sir, are quite the poet!

[Richard🖌]

You, too, GG, are quite the heavenly reviewer … warmest thanks to You! ⁓ Richard

[GalaxyGhost]

You're so welcome!

[Centipedle]

The structure of the poem almost feels like it's beckoning you forward. Telling you to continue. It has words to keep focus and free verse has always been my favorite type of poetry. Very beautiful pen on.

[Richard🖌]

Hi again, Pedle! : )
I feel so very honored to receive two reviews from your lovely self this morning — I must have been a good boy … LOL!
Seriously, Dearest, this is a full-blown, mature work of poetic wonderment that will attract lovers of all kinds of poetry, and I am so very pleased you have found it worthy to your enjoyment and beckon call.
Thank you for the lovely praise, too, Sweet Lady-Poet … hugs! ⁓ Richard

[Veronique]

Absolutely breathtaking Richard as your soft and gentle words flow so sensuously upon the page like the rise and fall of a womans breasts when in the soft throws of loves passion...simply beautiful as always darlin'! xx

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Dear Mary!
How lovely you always are to me, blessing my little poetic efforts with your generous sweetness and praise.
Your reviews are amongst those that have inspired me to keep creating and sharing my imagination and poetic skills.
Thank you ever-so warmly … hugs to you, M'Lady! ⁓ Richard x0x

[B. Boileau]

It's amazing how often free flow has such symmetry in form. You write with eloquence and grace.
The imagery of this piece paints romance in the readers eyes.

A credit to your shamelessly exultant pen !!!


bill

[Richard🖌]

Thank you sincerely, Bill! 😊
Your expressed praise, enjoyment, and appreciation for this unusually formatted Free Verse poem is the kind of gratification a hopeful olde bard seeks and relishes when he creates and shares with his fellow-poets and poetesses.
Many grateful blessings to you, M'Fine Poet Friend! ⁓ Richard

[DIVYA]

Dear Richard,
The first thing that caught my eye was the tapered verses that seem to enhance the punch in each verse. The poem spoke to me of a lover very quietly confident of the depths of his feelings and very sure of his noble intentions in love. A quiet, golden hush descends on my soul as the poem reaches it's peak with just the right amount of gentle yet very palpable sensuality, culminating in the ultimate dream of true matrimony, that of the souls. In an initial glance, the poem may look structurally long but it does not feel long once I start reading it, in fact, I would willingly sell my soul to stroll in those amber fields forever. The greatness of love lies not in its wild, red hot and wanton moments but in the sheer joy and peace felt in such moments of amazing stillness and solitude shared by two souls as one. Thank you for letting me feel and appreciate the true essence of Love...❤

[Richard🖌]

Goodness-ME, Divya!

That this poem is displayed in such a distinct form would be expected to immediately catch your eye, and that its length did not discourage you is a gift to me, indeed, for I would not have received the monumental blessing of your marvelously endearing review.

Your voice speaks to me in such an unmistakable manner, that there is no doubting how accurately and deeply your interpretation of this poem's essence truly is, Divya … not something I am accustomed to, as few do/can/have the capacity to — I do not know. I had thought it must have been my ability to clearly and concisely share my intent, my thoughts, emotions, feeling, my heart and core with others; yet, your embracing words to me have dispelled all that. One cannot convey accurate truths unless they first have it in them to perceive, feel, and relate to them in the exact manner in which You have — there must be a silver thread spanned between us, upon which … ahhh, I could travel this endlessly, but suffice it to say you have gratified me beyond words. I love it that we've touched and connected*

Thank you seems so moot, but I genuinely, sincerely do, Dear Poetess … warmest hugs to you, Divya! ⁓ Richard