Your Sweet Rain (sultry)

Your Sweet Rain (sultry)

A Poem by Richard🖌
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Diminished Hexaverse Form

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`/'·/ /` // /,

`, .

/// // ‘`  Your Sweet Rain  `’// ////

’ `’ `’`

/// // ‘`,//// //// ///

// ‘`,//

,//'./ ·

Unquenched, my thirst cries out for your sweet rain,

for there's no other's who shall sate this thirst.

Ope wide thy gate that I may drink again ...

I crave from thee warm sips thou hath coerced.

With thine sweet rain fill me until I burst ~

Moon, down in all your glory, shine o'er us ...

pearl-glinted waves a'flow merge two as one

these souls to e'er be bound with golden truss;

soft, tender ties by loving hands were spun,

and nevermore they're e'er to be undone.

·//`///,/

Strike, Eros, love's air in torrid flash;

stir dark clouds, a most ferocious storm,

send your winds in taunted, howling clash ...

then, command all elements conform,

that, we'll breathe your sultry atmosphere;

moist, as dewdrops sweet upon the tongue,

like a taste from joyous saline tear,

or the silken flow lovemaking's sprung.

Sing the songs of rain 'til they're all sung.

// ‘`,//

O' how I've dreamt and yearned your taste

I lack tempest words to tell it.

Never's been known such a sad waste

and there's nothing can dispel it,

but to receive my fill of you ...

to sate this ever-thirsting pit,

all from a spell I must pursue

by every ploy within my wit.

`, .

Come, show me your oasis ~

un-parch my thirst ~ at your well.

Fill all my empty spaces,

and release this arid spell.

Let me partake thy graces,

where I ever long to dwell

and I feel my ardour swell.

,//'./ ·

To quell a man's dire need,

a wondrous thing to do;

for, always he'll concede

his loyalty to you.

With pitcher filled to brim

give all you have to him.

`/'·//`///,/

No better way known

do I have to say,

"If your man has flown,

bring him back to stay,

and ever atone

// ‘`,//

with your dear ways

that he will know

for all his days

you love him so!"

,//'./ ·

Lover's task;

You, I ask,

"Fill my flask!”

·//`///,/

Champagne

refrain ...

`, .

"Rain!”

/// // ‘`,//// //// ///

’ `’ `’`’



Richard W. Jenkins

©2015




"Diminished Hexaverse Form"


In this form of five stanzas minimum,

the first stanza consists of five lines of five syllables each;

Stanza number two has four lines of four syllables;

Stanza number three is three lines at three syllables each;

Stanza number four contains two lines at two syllables each; 

And the fifth line is a single, one-syllable word.


The form may contain more than five stanzas,

 but five is the minimum required.

Starting from any number of syllables

and its equal number of line counts per stanza,

one need only diminish the count by one at a time

in order to arrive at the cumulative monosyllable.


Rhyming is a must, but the rhyme scheme is the author's choice.

Mine here, of course, begins with ten-lines and ten-syllables,

which makes it a Diminished Decaverse.

Have fun, and enjoy this wonderfully creative form.

© 2017 Richard🖌


Author's Note

Richard🖌
Critical reviews are always welcome. :)

Try this form … it is great practice and loads of fun!

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"Your Sweet Rain"
Richard,
Description of human need for a very special someone; we are somehow not sufficient to only ourselves.The thing I found so true in these verses was the commitment to the true dedication to heart of their loved one. It was beautiful. Very mature with a self discipline to remember to not forget nor take for granted this precious commitment. Lovely. The verse form really works well for your message.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Kathy,
Your sentiments and insights of my poetry always express a deeper gras.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

5 Years Ago

Richard,
It is blessing to express at all, to voice, to rejoice in our own beings the unique .. read more



Reviews

"Your Sweet Rain"
Richard,
Description of human need for a very special someone; we are somehow not sufficient to only ourselves.The thing I found so true in these verses was the commitment to the true dedication to heart of their loved one. It was beautiful. Very mature with a self discipline to remember to not forget nor take for granted this precious commitment. Lovely. The verse form really works well for your message.
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

5 Years Ago

Thank you, Dear Kathy,
Your sentiments and insights of my poetry always express a deeper gras.. read more
Kathy Van Kurin

5 Years Ago

Richard,
It is blessing to express at all, to voice, to rejoice in our own beings the unique .. read more
Woah! I loved the way your words danced and trailed down the page! Really breathtaking this piece was ;)
I still haven't decided on my favourite stanza here but I loved it on the whole :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Meek?
Hah, that'll be the day!
You make me smile! 😃
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

I'm glad of that 😉😊
Richard🖌

7 Years Ago

Me, too! 🙃
Your words are soft and sensual, taking me to a place of beauty. I love romantic poetry and this is so tastefully done with a classic feel. Your word choices are lovely. Stunning poetry.

:) Julie

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Oh, Julie,
what a lovely review you've left for this little piece, and how very much I apprec.. read more
MsJewel

8 Years Ago

My pleasure Richard. Your poem is lovely. Thanks so much for the friend request. I look forward to.. read more
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Yes, Julie … me, too.
Rascal I am a new fan of yours. "With thine sweet rain fill me until I burst".

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

"GULP!"
Er, I am always grateful for fans, present and new … thank you, Rochelle! ⁓ Richa.. read more
i love sensual writes in good taste,and this one was great, and a pleasure to read.loved the image as well

Posted 8 Years Ago


Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Hot-doggies!
Another review from one of my favorite onsite poets, and you really know how to .. read more
 wordman

8 Years Ago

my pleasure rascal,

Beautifully and tastefully sensual Hexaverse and I like the occasional use of // between verses,
I love the line about Eros and the tempest strong enough to deliver your words,
written in only the way your passionate heart could write this...LOve,Sheryl

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Aw, Sheryl!
You are a doll to grace my page and treat me to your sweet praise and appreciatio.. read more
Sheryl

8 Years Ago

This piece was definitely my treat...Big Hugg's me
Interesting form and demanding but you pull it off with eloquence and style with a Shakespearean tint.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Hi, John!
Thanks for reading this unique, interesting, and challenging poem, filled with sens.. read more
You, my simple bard, are the essence of poetry, of all writing. The Old English was a brilliant idea and brought the imagery and evanescence alive. This brought tears to my eyes and made me realize that some still know and understand the romance of poetry, the nature of how to speak through words, and that chivalry still exists. Thank you, my dear friend, for making my day with this beautiful piece! You are a true Romeo, a Shakespearean at heart.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Goodness, Zoey!
Your delicious review is so warming, I think I may just print it and sleep wi.. read more
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A sultry read indeed!!

Images keep falling on the reader's mind like that sweet rain of pleasure you've so skillfully described. I think using Old English has heightened the poetic attraction to the poem.

A strong invitation to give in to the lover's request fully, without any reservation and quench his passion which is burning bright for both to see and experience.

I must say this diminishing hexavrese (or in your case decaverse) sounds like fun. I will surely give it a try whether an increasing or a diminishing one.

Thank you for showing us delicious poetry and fun ways to play with verses :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Gosh, M'Sweet Lady Skittles!

How did I ever miss the radiance of this marvelously ten.. read more
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8 Years Ago

:) you're welcome and you inspired me to write a hexaverse. :) it turned out to be fun. :)
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

You're a good sport, and a lovely one*
You are far from a simple bard! This is another form that's new to me, and your example is amazing. Do you choose the last word first and work from there? You sure know how to keep things interesting.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Ahhh, you so honor and humble me, Roland, and you know I like it … ya done good! : )
Next, .. read more
Roland Petrov

8 Years Ago

I did write a Petrarchan Sonnet for the poetry club I founded on Whidbey Island, but I haven't done .. read more
Richard🖌

8 Years Ago

Let me know when you're ready … 👍

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