Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

A Poem by Richard
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Free Verse

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      Beside the pond ~


          Alone,

          I sat beside the pond

          this morning.


          Early sun ...

          vibrant in its warm flush

          of golden welcome

          came cascading down

          from the treetops,

          embracing grass,

          gifting colors vividly alive,

          lifting flowers' faces …

          with their honey-pollened smiles.


          I was amazed

          at how the breeze knew

          I missed you

          or was even thinking of you,

          but I’d swear

          it touched mine with your cheek,

          slid a wisp of your locks

          across my shoulder,

          and became the sweetness

          of your breath.

 

          Olive oil and rose bouquet ...


          ... it hung for awhile

          in the morning air,

          a fragrant marker

          along a trail of yesterdays,

          leading to You ...

          places of dreams and hope,

          of love and laughter

          and impossible possibilities.

 

          I almost started to believe

          I’d turn my head ~

          and you’d be there.


          Each year

          has come and gone …

          You, like fertile mana

          ever glowing, growing

          in my heart.


          It’s said all things end,

          and walking back to the house,

          I sensed that coming truth

          as Autumn's leaves

          began falling

          like tears ~

          washing around

          my feet.




                  Richard W. Jenkins

                         ©2015





1st Place

"Poetry About Loss Contest"



© 2018 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Picture is courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.
Constructive criticism is always welcomed and appreciated. : )

I was asked to post a Free Verse for a change; so, here one is … hope you enjoy.

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I loved the gentle imagery that you created, that ended with a poignancy indicated by the falling leaves.
Although not normally a writer ( or lover) of free verse, I felt that this worked particularly well. You may have helped to change my inhibited views. Thank you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

Umm... ok?!
J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

Tetchy ???????????



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My my my Richard this is the most beautiful sad poem I ever read and I can see now why you want me to try a free verse poem too, I am sure I can not come close to making mine as good as this one but I will try my best for you My Teacher and I know you will be kind and patient with me so I am not worried -- I love this one so much! :)

HUGGS!
Sammi

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you dearly, Sammi!
You sure know how to make an olde bard feel grateful for his skills .. read more
Sammi

4 Months Ago

Oh I am sorry Richard for not getting that free verse poem ready as promised but the holidays and ne.. read more
I wouldn't hesitate calling you the next "Shakespeare".
You have the quality of snatching one's senses to nature's dreamland.
-Stunning imagery
-Vivid syntax

I want to know how you syntax it so well.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Goodness-ME, Tazeen!
Even mentioning me and Shakespeare in the same sentence makes me swoon w.. read more
I almost started to believe
I’d turn my head ~
and you’d be there.

Each year
has come and gone …
You, like fertile mana
ever glowing, growing
in my heart.

mmm such sad longigness ... and so much beauty in your words Richard :)
always love reading them...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

I thank you ever-so warmly, Ria*
Your presence and your words touch with warmth, appreciation.. read more
A quietly beautiful poem, contemplating a lost love, and feeling nature's gentle sympathy. The leaves fall, but after the Winter comes the Spring.
I like the free verse, but it is still lovingly lyrical. I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Astri,
You never fail to make me feel like I've done well and pleased you so .. read more
Great Aunt Astri

5 Months Ago

have a Happy Christmas. :}
When a free verse flows down like a free spirit, it's then a "free verse", when the real and truest emotion flows down free, like the rippling calm water, it's then we know we have a "pure" heart, a crystal mind, the ever vibrant spirit of Yours twinkling, softly, gently, over Your ink,

"Places of dreams and hope,
of love and laughter
and impossible possibilities."
in Love, there is always "possibilities", there is always "impossible" turning into "possible", hand in hand, heart within the other, beating as one, minds yielding together, understanding, willing and trust, surrender to the glorious moment of bliss, to the wonderment... drifting into the places of endless dreams and hope.......

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

What a beautiful compliment, GH, to think I have a pure heart, a crystal clear mind and spirit twink.. read more
Light

5 Months Ago

I "do" know You "do" have them all :) 🔆 ⁓
Richard

5 Months Ago

"BIG BLUSH!" 😊
This is a well-written piece. I've written many poems while sitting on a park bench, looking at the pond, the ducks and geese, often in the morning when it's nice and quiet, and few people around. In fact, the name of that collection was Park Bench Poetry. This poem reminded me of that. Free Verse is something I really need to practice.

The line that puzzled me for a moment was:
"it touched mine with your cheek,"
I thought, "Touched your what?"
OH, cheek! haha




Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

9 Months Ago

That sounds nice, Karen … I'd like to read the sometime.
When you practice, remember, the h.. read more
Early sun ...
vibrant in its warm flush
of golden welcome
came cascading down
from the treetops,
embracing grass,
gifting colors vividly alive,
lifting flowers' faces …
with their honey-pollened smiles
wow!!such a brilliant poem sir...reading this really feels like i'm sitting beside the pond, appreciating the beautiful nature and the simplicity of life. The above lines are my favorite.
But then I could sense the longing and sadness which brings me to tears...this is beautiful

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear LC,
For gifting me your most wonderfully lovely and gratifying words in revie.. read more
L.C. Jarrette

9 Months Ago

it's my pleasure to read your wonderful poems sir. i am still reading some of your poems...:)
.. read more
Richard

9 Months Ago

Ohhh, I am so honored, LC,
Please, review them for me, too, if you'd like … I'd enjoy that... read more
Gosh Richard. I only just came upon this. I was thinking, hmm this is good, and 'that's SO apt, etc etc and then I saw it had won a prize. Beautifully written.

Regards
Nigel

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Nigel,
Your expressed words of praise and keen reflection on this rather gently sa.. read more
Wow this is so beautiful. I could even sense the air, and breeze and it reminded me of the pond we used to have in my old neighborhood as a kid. Imagery is great!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Maria

11 Months Ago

Thank you once again, and I can see that you truly have a very good, practice in writing.
Richard

11 Months Ago

Yours sure is pulling me to them, too, Maria.
I'll be by soon! 🎶
Maria

11 Months Ago

Why thank you, I always appreciate a good input and or advice. :)
Beautiful writing Richard, a wonderful celbration of life and of the wonder of the present moment; I once heard it said (I forget where) "All that is is in the now" I particularly liked the concluding section beginning "It is said..." as Autumn is so very special for me, great writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

11 Months Ago

Thank you, George,
Most of my readers are our wonderful ladies, but I, also, gratefully appre.. read more
George Coombs

11 Months Ago

Thankyou richard, I'm glad you found my review helpful
Richard

11 Months Ago

You are very welcome, George … be safe and well, my friend. : )

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