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Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

A Poem by Richard
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Free Verse

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      Beside the pond ~


          Alone,

          I sat beside the pond

          this morning.


          Early sun ...

          vibrant in its warm flush

          of golden welcome

          came cascading down

          from the treetops,

          embracing grass,

          gifting colors vividly alive,

          lifting flowers' faces …

          with their honey-pollened smiles.


          I was amazed

          at how the breeze knew

          I missed you

          or was even thinking of you,

          but I’d swear

          it touched mine with your cheek,

          slid a wisp of your locks

          across my shoulder,

          and became the sweetness

          of your breath.

 

          Olive oil and rose bouquet ...


          ... it hung for awhile

          in the morning air,

          a fragrant marker

          along a trail of yesterdays,

          leading to You ...

          places of dreams and hope,

          of love and laughter

          and impossible possibilities.

 

          I almost started to believe

          I’d turn my head ~

          and you’d be there.


          Each year

          has come and gone …

          You, like fertile mana

          ever glowing, growing

          in my heart.


          It’s said all things end,

          and walking back to the house,

          I sensed that coming truth

          as Autumn's leaves

          began falling

          like tears ~

          washing around

          my feet.




                  Richard W. Jenkins

                         ©2015





1st Place

"Poetry About Loss Contest"



© 2018 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Picture is courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.
Constructive criticism is always welcomed and appreciated. : )

I was asked to post a Free Verse for a change; so, here one is … hope you enjoy.

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I loved the gentle imagery that you created, that ended with a poignancy indicated by the falling leaves.
Although not normally a writer ( or lover) of free verse, I felt that this worked particularly well. You may have helped to change my inhibited views. Thank you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Mr.Writer

1 Year Ago

Umm... ok?!
J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

Tetchy ???????????



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a fantastic free verse, i can just imagine sitting there. a truly remarkable piece.makes me want to get on and write,you have true talent

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Tracey, for your lovely and inspiring review and warming compliment!
Blessings upo.. read more
Again a lovely picture....I really liked this piece of yours..you might have a beautiful inspiration for all your writings sir...just want to know the meaning of fertile mana

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Aw, Dear Horizon,
How could I have missed your lovely, thoughtful review … I am sooo sorry!.. read more
horizon

4 Months Ago

You never need to say sorry sir..thank you for the meaning sir.. I think its the Hindi word mana whi.. read more
The images you have described are lovely, but more than that is the soft tone of your words...sad, yet beautiful. Anyone who has felt loss will relate to your words. You have a wonderful gift. Julie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Dear Julie,
When you've suantered along, selecting one of my pieces to grace with your own, a.. read more
A very beautiful imagery you have described here.
I could feel your emotions. I like the way yo have described the nature and that serves as a great metaphor. I loved the ending the way that you have come back to reality after being so immensely lost in thoughts and realised the fact that all things come to end and at that precise moment you have written about falling of the autumn leaves which not only shows the season but also shows the deep thoughts of your heart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Dear Najam,
I am not sure what I've done to earn such a lovely and touching review from a lov.. read more
Najam Us Saher

1 Year Ago

You've left me speechless. I am out of words. 😊
Richard

1 Year Ago

Somehow, Sweet Najam, I doubt it! ; )
Do only poets write about lost love. To seek it out in the hope that it isn't really gone. That our will alone will bring it back. I feel such empathy for you in this. I know that we must endure the pain so that we can experience and appreciate the ecstasy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I think this is my favorite free verse poem of yours ... it's certainly beautiful and captivating with its vivid imagery and gentle descriptions. This poem had a wistful atmosphere to it, and I could feel that more and more with each line. What made this piece even better was how much you focused on the sound ... the euphony and wordflow made the words dance across the page.

I have one little quibble: In line six of the second stanza, the "and the awe in me" felt redundant for two reasons: First, this stanza focuses on nature so the focus on the self seems out of place. Also, that phrase tells of an idea that can already be inferred from the beautiful descriptions alone. Whether you change it or not, this is still a brilliant piece.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


beautiful ..wouldn't change a thing ...very engrossing for me ..by the time i reached the closing i felt enough of this heartbreak to say "oh no! ...not the end!!!" :( so well done says i! and what a great pic .. and your speaker (it is inferred) goes to that place ...to see if hope can be nurtured ..to grieve and move on .. but each time ... he knows he will return again .. that's my ending anyway ;) and way in the distance his pain will be lessened enough so that he begins to forget ... amen! i am an optimist you see ;))
like i said ..very engaging read ..its a fine emotive painting for me!
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Gosh, Gene!
What a wonderful review to receive from one of my most admired writers … you've.. read more
Beautiful...simply beautiful. Truly touched my heart.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you for reading this piece, for your praise, and expressed emotion. ⁓ Richard
Beautiful captivating imagery that took me to the place you described, and helped me feel the love and longing as it unfolded. The words are lush, full of life and vitality. And yes, poignant because of the subject. I felt the vividness of the memory of the one with you, and yes, expected to see someone standing there. Wistful sadness, and enduring love. Thank you.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Love the poem dear it flows very elegant and free and the imagery as if I was there really I cannot correct this for your poems always hit the viral points bravo dear

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raylene

1 Year Ago

Lol Richard you honor me with the invite
Richard

1 Year Ago

Dear Raylene,
I bow most gracefully to your sweet, effulgent charm ! ⁓ RJ
Raylene

1 Year Ago

Thank you dear

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