Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

Beside the pond ⁓ (wistful)

A Poem by Richard
"

Free Verse

"

    

       

      Beside the pond ~


          Alone,

          I sat beside the pond

          this morning.


          Early sun ...

          vibrant in its warm flush

          of golden welcome

          came cascading down

          from treetops' glow,

          embracing grass,

          gifting colors vividly alive,

          lifting flowers' faces …

          with their honey-pollened smiles.


          I was amazed

          at how the breeze knew

          I missed you

          or was even thinking of you,

          but I’d swear

          it touched mine with your cheek,

          slid a wisp of your locks

          across my shoulder,

          and became the sweetness

          of your breath.

 

          Olive oil and rose bouquet ...


          ... it hung for awhile

          in the morning air,

          a fragrant marker

          along a trail of yesterdays,

          leading to You ...

          places of dreams and hope,

          of love and laughter

          and impossible possibilities.

 

          I almost started to believe

          I’d turn my head ~

          and you’d be there.


          Each year

          has come and gone …

          You, like fertile mana

          ever glowing, growing

          in my heart.


          It’s said all things end,

          and walking back to the house,

          I sensed that coming truth

          as Autumn's leaves

          began falling

          like tears ~

          washing around

          my feet.




                  Richard W. Jenkins

                         ©2015





1st Place

"Poetry About Loss Contest"



© 2018 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Picture is courtesy of Wikimedia Commons.
Constructive criticism is always welcomed and appreciated. : )

I was asked to post a Free Verse for a change; so, here one is … hope you enjoy.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I loved the gentle imagery that you created, that ended with a poignancy indicated by the falling leaves.
Although not normally a writer ( or lover) of free verse, I felt that this worked particularly well. You may have helped to change my inhibited views. Thank you.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.
This comment has been deleted by this poetry author.
This comment has been deleted by this poetry author.



Reviews

I don't know much about poetry, but it seems you do. The picture you paint is wonderful and soothing. As with so much that's precious in life, however, it ends with an ache to the heart. This is very nice work, Richard.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Samuel,
I long ago learned one does not need a degree in creative writing to enjoy good poetr.. read more
Oh Dear, Yesterday after our review replies I wondered again to your site.
Of coarse after i had just spoken about each others pond and the connection we have about Riverwords i stumbled upon your pond. Coinicidence?
Naw.. we know better :-)

Richard, This write is so Beautiful and so Deeply felt and portrayed that it must of been mined from deep caverns.
I have been resisting the urge to write a reply. Restraining the Spirit is a tough one for me :-)
You have awakened the "Spiritual Maiden" in me.
Thank you so much.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Yes, Kate, some things flow and merge together, like thoughts, dreams, fantasies, desires, fate … .. read more
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
Cryingkate

3 Years Ago

Oh My.... The maiden clutches her fist to her heart as she tries to contain "The breath/The Spirit"<.. read more
The imagery throughout this poem is beautiful. You can really tell that you are an experienced writer. Thank you for sharing with the rest of us on here. Each word looks as if it was precisely chosen to further portray the poem in their own unique ways. Lovely. I thoroughly enjoyed this.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Dear Amelia,
It is such praise, expressed understanding, and enjoyment as yours that assures .. read more
This is wonderfully written. I love the line "impossible possibilities" a beautiful oxymoron. The fact that you added the photo really added to the imagery. I could imagine a man by the pond, lost in a memory. I love this poem. It's so emotional and flawless. Amazing.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The imagery and emotion in this piece is absolutely stunning. I sense a great sadness and longing in this one, and I can truly feel the words gripping my hear. Awesome poem, awesome story.

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is so beautiful. So lovely written. I understand that constructive criticism is always s welcomed, but I just don't know what any one could suggest to make this more perfect than it already is. I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Dear Lady-Poet,
Your presence and praise gift a specialness to the appreciation, emotion, and.. read more
forgot to say that including thee photo is a nice lead into the poem did you also take the picture?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Photo source is in Author's Note, Audrey.
a trail of yesterdays,,,,wonderful imagery and the way the words seem to float along like magic in all their glory I think your use of free verse is an excellent choice to lead from summer into the untidiness of fall

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Audrey,
I warmly and sincerely thank you for your praise of the picture, for your beautiful c.. read more
I enjoy the progression of this poem. You start with a description simply of nature. But it transitions flawlessly into the person who was lost.

I also appreciate the single line "Olive oil and rose bouquet ..." Having one important line that stands out in a poem works as a focus, and gives the reader something to remember--but of course you know that.

So in summary, thank you for a poem that simultaneously made me smile at the beauty of nature and sigh at the sadness of autumn and partings and the longing that comes with them.

Posted 3 Years Ago


wow!!! The way you described everything is so flawlessly magnificent... Thank you for sharing your beautiful moment with us. Its seriously beautiful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Years Ago

Such exuberance is invigorating, Zoe, and your praise of this deeply romantic and yearning Free Vers.. read more

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

4628 Views
94 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 3 Libraries
Added on June 15, 2015
Last Updated on August 3, 2018

Author

Richard
Richard

TX



About
~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~··~ ~·&.. more..

Writing
"GO VOTE!" "GO VOTE!"

A Poem by Richard



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Windy Windy

A Story by Samuel Dickens