Sharing Sweet Romances ⁓ (tender yearning)

Ballad

Sharing Sweet Romances ~

Mist’s cool embrace, along I stroll
lost deep in thoughts of You.
Soft windchimes ringing in my soul
sing psalms of lovers true;

and, as I ponder on our fate
amidst dew's gem-sparked grass,
such wonder bades spirits elate;
yet, woesome tears …  alas!

It’s not that there’s regret at all
what life’s brought You and I …
amidst love’s softly beckoned call,
with tenderness I cry.

No harsh, bitter tears of sorrow;
but, of the yearning kind
well and flow each waking morrow,
I'm still alone …  I find.

Tho’ many suns and moons may’ve passed,
your breath’s lived in my heart …
I pray our bond forever lasts,
as it has from the start.

Just o’er treetops sunlight peeks out
gifting a touch of You …
bright rays across morn’s blue skies spout,
blessing our love anew.

With lively step, a broad’ning smile,
this bard’s olde soul dances …
again, in dreams, let’s stay awhile,
sharing sweet romances.


Richard W. Jenkins
           ©2015

Author's Note

Constructive critique is welcome. : )

Reviews

[Cryingkate]

You Spoke my Mind as I read ...........

With lively step, a broad’ning smile,
this bard’s olde soul dances …
again, in dreams, let’s stay awhile,
sharing sweet romances.

Oh I could dance from life into death, while the song of your heart plays on... Just one word to add> B E A U T I F U L !

[Richard🖌]

Dear Kate,
it is always a pleasure to write and share with those whom can relate and appreciate my earnest, but humble little efforts, as you so ardently and openly profess.

I cannot thank you enough for your presence and for your most wonderful compliment! ⁓ Richard

[Cryingkate]

Kindred Spirits, But you have Mastered the art of speaking for the Soul.
I thank You for sharing.

[Tomás Ó C..]

I cant see much improvements... I loved every word and the roll of it...

[Jennesis]

Strolling through tender memories is the best way to dance in our daydreams. The flow of this is lovely, sunshine glimpses of times past, yet despite the suns rays there is still a cold loneliness I sense here. Haunting and beautiful at once.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Jenn,
Ya know? Sometimes I think loneliness has become my way of life, that all I really have are poetic dreams and the memories they gift, often inspiring new poems, and so it perpetuates, creates, innervates, invigorates many emotions, desires, and … well, you get the idea, I am sure.
I sincerely enjoy the manner in which you relate with my shared poetical thoughts, dreams, and emotions.
I feel fortunate to receive your praise and shared reflections, and I truly and gratefully thank you again, Jenn! ⁓ Richard

[Jennesis]

You're welcome Richard. Loneliness is a tough thing, I've been listening to my clients talk about it a lot lately. There's this sense of existential loneliness that is pervasive today. I think being aware of the connectedness we share with with each other and all beings in the universe helps. I know it's a little whooo wooey but I think there's something to it. Especially since relationships don't necessarily combat this sense of loneliness. ~Jennesis

[Richard🖌]

In 1624, English poet, John Donne, wrote, "No man is an island!", and I can think of no more fitting perception than this in acknowledging your own wise and sweeping verbiage of highest consciousness to our human condition … gee, I love how you see.
That of which you speak may be, indeed, be "whooo wooey" to some, but not to me, Jenn.
Still, as with love, there are an endless array of lonelinesses, eh?

[Jennesis]

For sure my friend. For sure. Xo

[Richard🖌]

"my friend" … I like how this touch feels, and the Xo, "for sure". : )
Thanks, Jenn⁓*

[DirectTangent]

I'm thankful that i can relate well to your piece - it is good fortune indeed, in a way, to be able to embrace such memories.

A wonderful message conveyed in such captivating way. Thank you for it.

[Richard🖌]

I, too am grateful, DT!
Thank you you for that, and for touching upon the very essence of this piece.
You are most welcome, My Friend, and I thank you most graciously for your wonderfully inspiring praise! ⁓ Richard

[Hoyam]

I've had the pleasure to read your poem. Well, it has an extremely touching effect similar to the one I feel when reading arabic poetry. I keep looking for poems like this because some feeling are hard to put into words but every once in a while, I read something that stays with me. Thank you

[Richard🖌]

Welcome to my poetry, Dear Hoyan! : )
It is a pleasure to meet you, and I thank you for selecting this lovely little Ballad to read and comment on.
How very gratifying it truly is to know you relate to it, as you do Arabic poetry … this is, indeed, a lovely compliment, and that the feeling it gives stays with you tells me you connected with this poem in a personal way … what more could a writer of poetry possibly hope for?
Hoyan, you are very welcome, and I thank you most sincerely, too, for gracing my poem! ⁓ Richard

[Sultrysoul]

I feel you in my heart. This poem speaks to my soul. I love it.

[Richard🖌]

Aw, SS,
How I missed this beautiful review of my Ballad I've no idea, but I've found it now and it's touched me so warmly and sincerely to know how deeply you've felt its sweet romantic nature, as it was intended to be felt and understood … you've let me know we've connected through my poetry, and who could hope for more.
Hugs and warmest blessings of thanks to you, Dear Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Sultrysoul]

It is always more than a pleasure to connect with you and understand the feelings you want to be felt.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Not being a 'Master' of words..I simply state
I like your soft/sweet style...

Romance so lovingly written..


Jazz

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Jasmine!
I'd no idea you reviewed this sweet, romantic little piece, and I love how you've expressed your sentiments. Your appreciation and praise proves that one need not be a master wordsmith to enjoy the well-written poetry of others … you have, indeed, humbled and touched me.
Hugs and many blessings of thanks to you, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome Richard............................:)

[Chris]

The last stanza echoes sweet...

but - alas - just seems not to fit, and breath's is not a possessive as used nor a plural.

[Richard🖌]

Hi. Chris!
Thank you for your appreciation of the final verse.

Why does "alas" not fit, you think?
You are correct that "breath's" is neither a possessive or a plural … it is a contraction of "breath is" or "breath has", and in the sense it is used, it is "breath has".

Thanks again, My Friend, for your comments and praise! ⁓ Richard

[Chris]

I think the present sense of the two lines of which "breath's" is a part doesn't lend itself to using the " 's" to work as a contraction for has... my mind has to force a has into the poem and forcing words in just feels unnatural - just me I guess. As for "alas" - you did say softly sad... and woesome tears is fairly heavy without an alas too.

[Richard🖌]

I suppose it's in how one views the aspects of these things, Chris, of how it feels to them personally, and as the contraction "breath's' is a far cry from your original comments, I'll just say that it's poetic license and leave it at that, rather than pick at it any further.
Those aspects of poetry that truly make a difference in improving a piece or helps better one's skills is that which I look forward to … blessings to you, My Friend, and thank you most gratefully for reading this piece and for your input.

[Chris]

Cool and readily agreed...

[Terry O'Leary]

When I read that stanza, I understood "breath's" to be a contraction of "breath has" which seems OK to me (for example, in the preceding line "may've" is a contraction of "may have"... poetic license???

[Richard🖌]

Well, not really poetic license, Terry, but for the sake of stemming further commentary on a seemingly fruitless issue … you understand, eh?

[PANDORA]

Has anyone ever given you a critique? How, when your writing is so near perfection?

I do have one suggestion (everyone reading this gasps.)

dew-damp grass,--dew damp is such an overused adjective maybe another descriptive phrase?

Thank you for the lovely read.

[Richard🖌]

… and, I most gratefully thank You, Dear Sheri, for waking me from my state of lazy complacency.read more… and, I most gratefully thank You, Dear Sheri, for waking me from my state of lazy complacency.
I completely agree, poetry should be as unique and original as is possible for its author to make it, steering clear, of course, from becoming totally abstract or too metaphorically vague … LOL!
It is critique such as yours that helps us become better writers, and I cannot thank you enough for your generosity in helping me, and for your gratifying compliment, which you are certainly welcome for … big smiles 'n hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

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there are some romances we wish to never let go, even when the other has moved along... your poetry is always a complex work of art, my friend, and your dedication to making it perfect is admirable...the ballad is one of my favorite forms to read and I sang this to an old Irish, three-quarter-time, melody just to waltz with the words...bravo!

[Richard🖌]

Thomas,
That you enjoyed this little Ballad enough to sing it is all the payment this olde barde could possibly hope for, and even more … I thank you with my heart, My Fine Poet Friend! ⁓ Richard