"Hello!" (suggestive)

Free Verse

      I remember best …

      

your breath 

kissing my skin

      

on autumn nights,

      

when your soft voice

      

quilted my dreams

      

with sighs.

      

It wasn’t so long ago …

      

when we dreamed together.

      

Even our eyes were twins,

      

mirroring wildflowers

      

in the meadows,

      

our laughter …

      

holding hands with the stars.

      

Countless trips to The Bistro

      

satisfied our stomachs …

      

chili con queso with chips

      

and margaritas,

      

the food of those who have

      

too little time to eat,

      

too little time to be distracted

      

from the religion 

      of 

making-love.

      

Praying  …

      

for just one more moment,

      

one more chance to know

      

the texture of your tongue,

      

the mystery of your

    

“I want you” eyes.

   

Even now …

    

I worship your mouth,

    

giving thanks to the gods,

    

for gifting me you,

    

for making me more

    

than I would have been

    

if your soft, sweet lips

    

had never whispered,

   "

Hello!"

         

Richard W. Jenkins

                     ©2015

Author's Note

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness Richard ...
I have read all the Free Verse poems you sent me and now I am going back over them and leaving reviews...
They are all wonderful, but for some reason this one speaks to me. It has given me chills each time I have read it.
I believe everyone wants to have those beautiful moments...but in my experience with people I find that few ever reach that feeling in their lifetime... Sad but true. Perhaps some experience a bit of this love "feeling" when they are first experiencing love but probably not again. To find this quality of a life partner where deep love stays with you...forever, is fantastic. To actually step out of oneself and be open enough to let go is not easy. Oh gosh, sorry I am getting too philosophical...
Just want to say I loved it,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

"Hello!" Lisa 😏

I am quite thrilled that you actually consider my Free Verse pieces, assigned to read as examples, inspiringly favorable enough to return with positive reviews.
Perhaps, this particular piece stands out for you from the others because of its metaphorical imagery, smoothly flowing syntax, timely line breaks, all expressed in simple language and an appealing presentation.
Creatively emotive thought and the relatable theme might play a pert in it for you, too.

I think you've philosophically and worldly wisely expounded upon its appeal far better than I could have poetically. ; )

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Lady-Poet! ⁓ Richard 🥂

[Lisasview]

So of course i had to reread this one again ~ and I have the same feeling for it..
Hugs,
read moreSo of course i had to reread this one again ~ and I have the same feeling for it..
Hugs,
L

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem for love Richard. Each line added to the power of love, of the kiss. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry for love.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Salutations, Bro. John 🍂

One can always depend on your keen grasp and expressed appreciation of their humble 'n hopeful efforts.
Yes, indeed, what could be better than love, sealed with a kiss.

With most grateful, thanks,
Happy Autumn, my find friend! ⁓ Richard 🌾

[Coyote Poetry]

Happy Autumn Richard and you are welcome. The poetry was so wonderful.

[Aura]

This poem describes the thankfulness one person feels at meeting their companion. So beautifully you describe their journey of love from the sound of her voice, their eyes like twins, going to the Bistro together and ordering delicious food, those passionate nights, all started by one small word "Hello!" I like how you wrap up your poem in the last verse, you connect it nicely to your title. The word "Hello!" has a newfound meaning! it signifies the first time two strangers meet, in which their eventual friendship blossoms into something more! Thanks for sharing Richard, I enjoyed reading!

[Richard🖌]

Well, Sweet Aura 🌸

Here I am again, held captive by the effulgently beautiful glow of your breathtaking words in review to one of my hopeful Free Verse pieces.
How is it you always so brilliantly, almost intuitively, discern the core essence of my work, when so few others seem to? "The word "Hello!" has a newfound meaning!" It's such a wonderfully pleasant surprise, when you do.

Humble, most grateful hugs of thanks to You! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Aura]

You are most welcome!

[lovelymarina]

Well....now I'm a miserable single woman! Just kidding. This pulled on every string in my heart, and was written beautifully, allowing one to feel every emotion portrayed and meant to devour throughout. Thank you for another lovely piece of writing!
Marina

[Richard🖌]

Feeling the sheer depths of living breath seething and broiling within your vibrantly dancing being, my imagination fully embraces ever-so completely, the searingly warm essence glowing from within your words.

No one, Marina, reviews like You, and your sense-of-humor is tangibly alluring.
Most grateful hugs, Poetess! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Haley]

I absolutely adore this, " Praying … for just one more moment, one more chance to know, the texture of your tongue, the mystery of your “I want you” eyes.

That feeling of longing is so raw and so easily felt here. The moment when you realize what the hello could lead to and fantasizing about where it could go. Beautifully written - I've loved everything of yours that I have read!

[Richard🖌]

Hi again, Haley✨

How wonderful of you to stay around for another bite of my bardic apple … it's a pleasure sharing with You.
That you adore and have loved anything pertaining to me and my battered olde pen is a warm nudge of stimulating praise.
The lines you've highlighted are among my favorite, too … birds of a feather.😏
Your expressed feelings and interpreted sentiments of this rather evocative piece, harmonize beautifully with my own … what more could a wishful bard ask.

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Haley, for loving everything of mine (so far).
I feel as though I've been sprinkle with stardust✨ ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Richard🖌]

"sprinkle" with a (d). ; )

[lightsong]

"Even our eyes were twins,
mirroring wildflowers
in the meadows..."

"too little time to be distracted
from the religion
of
making-love."

I read many poems, I can feel the writer's feelings to my very heart, I can cry or laugh over it, but in truth I don't read often something to impress and move my inners quite well, and I don't know how I never came across this breathtaking diamond... there is more than words and well-written poetry there, and the way You speak of something more than deep using ordinary things always stunned me, and I more stunned here by your fourth verse, then comes the last one to ignite all these warm and tender feelings to the crest and settle them there, "our eyes were twins,
mirroring wildflowers, religion of making love??!?" how did You even write these! my voice seems speechless now to a rare gorgeousness! a simple "Hello" turns to profound fondness.

[Richard🖌]

Of all those here who've read and reviewed me, Dear Ghounwah, you've done it with me longest, since our first, "Hello!" 🌾

And, I'll add, most deeply, completely, and beautifully, as you have here. Your words speak softly, ever-so warmly, in a voice few will ever hear or understand … almost, a gentle whisper.
Seems, from long ago, our poems moved and touched one another inwardly … I guess there is a specialness about our writings we both find a certain pleasure and alluring value in, eh?
It's true, too, I am but a simple man who uses simple, everyday words to express thought, feeling, and emotion … this is the reason I'm so easy to grasp, feel, and understand, I think … would you agree?
I very much like the words and phrases you've selected to highlight, because (to me) they convey warmness, naturalness, the affection of living, and an easy appealing depth.

It's been a great time sharing with you today, Ghounwah … thank you ever-so warmly! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[lightsong]

With You, I agree to a degree, and I don't to another. a simple man who is connected to his feelings and know how to express and convey them is far much better than a complicated one who doesn't connect or know how to express them :>

[Richard🖌]

You always know how to push the/my right buttons … sighhh* ; )

[lightsong]

may your days be always right and smiley* :*>

[Richard🖌]

✨Now, they shall be✨ 🌼🐝

[lightsong]

may You be blessed always and your heart never knows strife*** Syr. Kindness***

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Littlesong, with my most gratefully gentle heartbeat ⁓ for gifting me such a sweet, caring wish. 😊

[lightsong]

anytime***

[Richard🖌]

Thank You* for staying the sweet-hearted poetess you have always been. 😏

[lightsong]

~~~~✨🦋✨~~~~

[Larq]

"Even now I worship your mouth," one of my favorite lines-I mean, what woman doesn't want to be, "worshipped?" :) But there are so many beautiful aspects of this piece...the softness of reflection, the imagery created...so lovely. "When your soft voice quilted my dreams with sighs..." Such a warm and romantic piece.

[Richard🖌]

Ahhh, Lady Larq 🌸
What a sweet way to say,"Hello!" by strolling through my humble offerings to pick this subtly warm, gentle rouser. ; )
I must agree, too … the lines you've selected to highlight really do seem to express the core essence of the rest, and how lovely of you to include them and this moment shared ~ with your lovely voice.

Your review, such a romantic touch, so worshipfully enjoyed … thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Larq ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Susan 🦋]

Quilted dreams...funny I just came across this poem...and was thinking this too..( I quilt)..funny. anyway, yes...Hello can start sooo much! the poem is wonderfully played out in my mind...everything forms a picture...and a feeling.

[Richard🖌]

Beautifully spake, Susan!
How wonderful to realize how and why you really and truly feel this piece, and most definitely that you can tell me so concisely in the ways you do and why.

Thanks a bushel … big hug! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Praying …
for just one more moment,
one more chance to know
the texture of your tongue,
the mystery of your
“I want you” eyes."

Whoosh!! I loved these lines 😛
Quite suggestive 😉 I didn't know you wrote romance at such a level too!!
This is probably one of my favourite pieces of yours, Richard 😊

[Richard🖌]

"BLUSH!" 😊
Excuse me, Yumna, please, me while I catch my breath … I'm not so used to being appreciated and enjoyed, felt, and praised in such an encouraging way, but ohhh, how I love it!
That particular verse you favor is the centerpiece of this work, I think … how lovely we relate so well.
Thank you ever-so warmly, Yumna! ⁓ Richard : )

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I'm glad we relate 😊
And that is an understatement of you not being appreciated, Richard! As far as I know, you have quite a large fan following (me included) 😊
You're welcome! Always a pleasure reading your works 😊

[Richard🖌]

Most humbly 😌 I bow.

[Paul]

To no surprise, this is another beautifully written poem, Richard! Full of vivid imagery! Well done!

[Richard🖌]

Thanks again, Paul, for your appreciative words of praise and inspiration.
Many blessings to you! ⁓ Richard