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One Desert Night ~ (twilight romance)

One Desert Night ~ (twilight romance)

A Poem by Richard
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Pantoum

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                                          One Desert Night ~

                                          One cool, dark night, bright stars above ...
                                          bloom cactus flow’rs o'er moonlit sand.
                                          Soft, soothing, coos the desert dove,
                                          quiet descends 'cross starlit land.

                                          Bloom cactus flow'rs o’er moonlit sand;
                                          coyote's howls, I'm lonesome, too.
                                          Quiet descends 'cross starlit land;
                                         'neath tall saguaro, dreams ensue.

                                          Coyotes’ howls, I'm lonesome, too;
                                          behind my eyes your face takes shape.
                                         'Neath tall saguaro, dreams ensue;
                                          in harmony ~ this world escape.

                                          Behind my eyes your face takes shape;
                                          lips soft like down caress my soul.
                                          In harmony ~ this world escape,
                                          while making-love, flow one and whole.

                                          Lips soft like down caress my soul;
                                          soft, soothing, coos the desert dove ...
                                          while making-love, flow one and whole,
                                          
one cool, dark night, bright stars above.


                                          Richard W. Jenkins
                                                      ©2015

"A Contest Capers Winner"

© 2016 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
"PANTOUM"
The pantoum is a poetic form derived from the Pantun, a Malay verse form: Specifically from the Pantun Berkait, a series of interwoven quatrains from the 15th century, a short folk poem.
The Pantoum is similar to the Villanelle, in that there are repeating lines throughout the poem. It is composed of a series of 5 Quatrains in lines of 8-syllables each; the 2nd and 4th lines of each stanza are repeated as the 1st and 3rd lines of each ensuing stanza, as follows:

Line 1 - Rhyme A
Line 2 - Rhyme B
Line 3 - Rhyme A
Line 4 - Rhyme B

Line 5 - Line 2 previous verse B
Line 6 - Rhyme C
Line 7 - Line 4 previous verse B
Line 8 - Rhyme C

Line 9 - Line 2 previous verse C
Line 10 - Rhyme D
Line 11 - Line 4 previous verse C
Line 12 - Rhyme D

Line 13 - Line 2 previous verse D
Line 14 - Rhyme E
Line 15 - Line 4 previous verse D
Line 16 - Rhyme E

Continue the cycle carrying the even lines to the odd of the next stanza for as many stanzas as you wish - though, with a minimum of four stanzas and a final Quatrain, as below:

EXCEPT FOR the last stanza which is built as follows:
Line 2 of previous stanza E
Line 3 of FIRST stanza A
Line 4 of previous stanza E
Line 1 of FIRST stanza A

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Critical reviews are always welcome! : )

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It certainly does work very well. The 'short folk poem', with its interesting repetitions, reminds me of music. Like music, it is heard with different senses. I can see you poem, I can hear your poem, I can feel your poem, I can envisage your poem, and even identify with it. Beautiful Pantoum!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

7 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Astri,
Your lovely words of understanding depth and delightful expressions ar.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

7 Months Ago

I am pleased it ignited the right buttons! Thank you very much for appreciative review.
Richard

7 Months Ago

You're a pleasure, Astri … hugs! ⁓ RJ : )



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I am so glad that I found your profile. I can learn a lot from here and hopefully, I would be able to grasp them in no time (though it would take me long - not sure). :) So beautiful! A very interesting poem I just discovered today. :) Thanks a lot for sharing your knowledge!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Richard

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
It is fun to share and learn with each other, and to receive appreciation .. read more
well Richard I have missed your words...the dove...a symbol that evokes love to many...something very personal to me, so I already am yours hook, line and sinker. You are brave to approach poetry forms that are difficult as such, it is so easy to get caught in our own patterns and not stretch our abilities because it is what we are use to. It is inspiring to see it done with such finesse.

The humor doesn't escape me either, and I don't know if I read it wrong...but I see 'the coyotes howling ...im lonesome too' with great inflection that cannot be typed on a page.

Well thought out as usual, you are a true artiste.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

8 Months Ago

Gee, Jesse!
What a wonderfully delightful and thoughtful review you've left for me and this v.. read more
I am in awe for this kind of poetic art. The flow is amazing and the structure is beautiful in its discipline.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Philip,
Your praise is more than enough gratification for this humbled bard t.. read more
A caress of a poem, as it touches the senses in its descriptions of space - the personal and the natural surroundings.

Thank you also for the explanation about 'pantoum'.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Anytime one of my humble poems caresses and touches a beautiful poetess' senses enough for her to te.. read more
Lyrical, unpretentious, simple and yet not simplistic.
The passionate tranquility of the verse makes it imperative for me to come back to it, again and again.

Looking forward to your future writings.
Best, M.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Dear Mallika,
I would like to thank you for coming to read my poem and for the beauty your wo.. read more
Very soft feel to this piece. I want to go to the desert and enjoy and you make me crave it even more. The analogy of desert and love is so well handled. A very soothing and loving piece.

The coolness of the desert night with your love close. Thanks you for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Ohhh-YES, Willard!
What could be better than being warmly cuddled in a sleeping bag with one'.. read more
Willard Wells

1 Year Ago

Glad to read your work always. Quality
Richard

1 Year Ago

Thanks again, Willard, and for the nice blush! : )
Beautifully written. I never studied writing, I just love doing it. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

G'Day, Ms. Kathie!
I hope all is well in your snowy neck of the woods. ; )
It is so wa.. read more
Should have been a song. Yes, really. Because of the harmony of the rhymes, making it melodical. Oh, and the images are so lovely.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

I cannot thank you enough for gracing my poetry with your gracious and generous praise … for, what.. read more
this is like peering into the deserts soul while it dances in the night.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Years Ago

Sweet are the beautifully romantic, soft-flowing sentiments you've breathlessly whispered through me.. read more
great poem about the ideal gotten from this poem is interesting and is not every bodies favourite next time try something out of the box that is an idea that is not used by many because the love theme is already choked up anyhow nice poem

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your candid (if not blunt) thoughts, Benson, and for your very nice compliments, as-we.. read more

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