A Peaceful Hush (her morning)

Mollietta

A Peaceful Hush

Through sheer lace curtains
 sunlight greets her eyes,
 to early dove song’s
 cooing calls to rise.

A stretch, or two,
 the shutters then thrown wide ...
 life’s splend'rous wonders
 on display outside.

Lies morning dew’s brocade
 spread 'cross the lawn ...
 caught in each drop
 glints sunbeams'
 spark'ling dawn.

Rise steamy mists,
 in ghostly arabesques ...
 stand floral colours,
 tall and statuesque.

Wends warmly through …
 a gentle breeze’s brush,
 while all around takes on
  … a peaceful hush.


Richard W. Jenkins
 ©2015

"1st Place Winner"

in

The Blue Rose Challenge

Author's Note

"Mollietta"
An original form created by Mollie Reckitt, from Ely, Cambridgeshire, United Kingdom, in 2013.
Rules:
No limit to number of verses, with a five verse minimum, each verse has twenty-syllables in any configuration, rhyming is author's choice.

Picture, compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Constructive critique is always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Jacob Clifford]

You know, it surprises me just how big an impact font can make on a reader. Normally, the words themselves would have to set the tone, etc etc. With every poem of yours I've read, the font (and accompaniment art) sets the stage and casts a gentle, romantic light on things. Then you, instead of using the font as a crutch, seem to use the already-set ambiance as a stepping-off point. You use your words to carry the reader through the poem like a leaf caught in a gentle summer's breeze.

Having said all that, the font doesn't take away from the words themselves, which can stand completely on their own.

One thing I like about your poems is that they aren't the typical perfectly-structured-flawlessly-rhymed love poems. Rather, they speak in romantic terms and simply set the tone for a romantic setting. There is enough mystique to make the minds of the readers work and think of their own happy places.

[Richard🖌]

Goodness-ME, Jacob! 🤔

Beautifully spake, dear poet.
How I ever missed your in-depth, insightful, and highly appreciated review I'll never know, but it's very fortunate for me I finally found it, as your assessments of my humble efforts offer much inspiration, gratification, and enjoyment to an olde bard's hopeful ear to write for and fulfill his readers expectations.

Thank you ever-so sincerely, Jacob, sorry for the late return.
Yours truly ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Elmarie]

Beautiful writing, I'm inspired. It was a visual feast.

Blessings

El

[Richard🖌]

Yee-doggies!

I get two reviews from you today … even the sun outside is smiling bright and the vibrantly-colored flowers are at happily play with morning's gentle breeze*

Thank you so dearly, El, for your lovely compliment and expressed enjoyment. : )
You've blessed my day … warmest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[SJ Mullins]

This is so beautiful. You paint a beautiful picture of the serenity of the early morning. I love that time of day when everything is fresh and new again. Each sunrise is magnificently different, and I love listening to the birds sing as they awaken to the morning light, and seeing dew like sparkling diamonds as the sun rises before it dries it up. We have a front porch where I love to sit and take it all in. You captured this time of day superbly. I love the way you write. :) Nicely done.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is a very pretty, romantic poem. I like the form. I may try it.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, KL!
Your warming words of praise and expressed enjoyment truly gratify my earnest efforts to compose and please.
I would be honored for you to try this lovely little form … it does inspire brilliant poetry.

Happiest hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Renée]

What a lovely way to start a morning... my mind's eye sees a pallet much like a painters..with all these words..and you have placed them for a delightful display for our eyes.. I shall have to read again with a cup of tea in the morning..
Thank you for your lovely work...

[Richard🖌]

It's a most lovely review, Renée! : )
Warmest thanks to you for selecting this mind and soul-easing little piece to her moments spent with morning Nature.
How delightful you've stirred my poetic colors so metaphorically sweet on your own palette of delightful imagination.
I hope your tea tastes better while sharing it with me through my poetry.
Hugs 'n happy smiles to thee, Renée ⁓ Richard

[kitty blur]

I think the image I conjured up is one of an ideal morning, and I think it's one that we all crave. No alarm clocks mentioned, no work to worry about, no grumpy voices or unpleasant weather; just peace and happiness. Your words make my heart fill with sunlight. Thank you.

[Richard🖌]

You've blown-n like a soft, gentle breeze of caressing beauty, Kitty … thank you so very warmly, Dear Lady-Poet, for blessing me with your delightfully sweet wonderment, your praise, and expressed enjoyment!
You've described perfectly how I'd dearly love life to be. 🌺

You words make my heart dance on that sunlight, and you are most welcome … thank you, too.
Warmest hugs and brightest smiles, Kitty ⁓ Richard

[William Liston]

This is an amazing poem. The gorgeous imagery created a calm, somewhat romantic mood that entranced me with an ethereal blissfulness. You should be proud of this poem. I am looking forward to reading more of your works. Best regards.

-William Liston

[Richard🖌]

Welcome, William, to my humble pages! : )
Thank you ever-so sincerely for selecting one of my humble little efforts to read and review … I am truly honored.
That you've found such favor in it to praise and relate to with thoughtful feeling, is gratification that rewards a bard's hopes to write and share for those whom can genuinely enjoy it.
It would be a great pleasure, William, if you were to read and review any, or all, of my poetic renderings. ; )
Many smiles 'n blessings of gratitude to you, My New Poet-Friend! ⁓ Richard

[Centipedle]

The imagery in this makes me feel all warm inside. The descriptive words perfect to me. I'm no expert in poetry and I can't say I dislike much about this poem. Something about it just sings to me. Pen on ^^

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Dear Pedle! : )
It is so wonderful to know you enjoyed this gentle piece of morning imagery,that you've found favor in its words … knowing, too, we've connected through the magic of poetry makes the moment perfect.
Hugs to you, Charming Poetess! ⁓ Richard

[Lee]

you are just too ;)
enjoy it..keep it up

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for reading and commenting, Lee, and a hardy welcome to the Writer's Café!
Glad you enjoyed this little number.
Post something for us to read and review for you! ⁓ Richard

[Lee]

sure richard I am working at its end...thanks bro

[Shabeeh Haider]

Beautifully written. I love the imagery. The sweetness and softness of the poem is complimented by the picture.
It is commendable how a morning routine has been turned into a beautiful poem by the magic of your words.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Shabeeh! : )
is it not in the way and artist paints that which they see that turns their vision into skillful art?
Blessings of many thanks, My Friend, for gifting your praise and enjoyment … I, too, find the picture harmonious with the poem … happy smiles to you! ⁓ Richard

[barleygirl]

Very artful description of one lady's graceful morning routine. Since doves are plentiful around here, I very much relate to some aspects of this morning song. As always, your poetic form is very tightly crafted & no suggestions come to mind.

[Richard🖌]

Good morning, My Lovely Friend, : )
How truly rewarded and blessed I feel by your words of expressed acknowledgement and relatability.
Thank you sincerely, Margie, for selecting this gentle piece of Nature-themed imagery to read and review for me … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard