When, with love ⁓ (the good life)

When, with love ~
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There's ne'er a frown,
when new-plowed ground
births early crops a start.
Tools now laid down,
we're homeward bound
t'ward hearth with grateful heart.

Warming delight,
fireplace lit bright,
in prayer for grace we kneel;
keep us held tight
throughout each night,
give thanks for our fine meal.

Faces aglow
from all we'll sow:
Love holds no reproaches.
Now's time to show,
gift, and bestow...
gloaming fast approaches.

Soon, will the night
from day take flight,
heads weary laid to rest.
It's then despite,
resist and fight,
with sleep, each one, we're blest.

Comes quick the dawn,
a sleepy yawn...
fresh, new day for giving;
until we're gone,
thus life goes on...
when, with love ~ we're living.

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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

   FORM   

Doubledown Style 2, Fours 'n Sixes, or Quickie
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 19 Apr 1987

Any number of 6-line verses about anything:
Align left or center.

Syllable count per verse:
4/4/6/4/4/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxa
xxxa
xxxxxb
xxxc
xxxc
xxxxxb

xxxd
xxxd
xxxxxe
xxxf
xxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

Author's Note

I would be greatly honored if anyone tries this easy flowing and interesting original form. If you should, please, let me know so I can read and review it for you.

Constructive critique and comments are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

First of all I LOVE THIS PIECE! I love the images that come to mind as I read it. I love where it takes me in my mind.) Brought up on a farm so...) the rhythm flows beautifully like a warm hug on paper! I would love to try your form. When the mood strikes me! I will keep it in mind for my next piece! For now though this piece is AWESOME SAUCE!!
Tabby

[Richard🖌]

Well, Tabby!
You certainly have me blushing, but it's a warm and enjoyable kind that a bard loves to feel in praise and appreciation of his earnest efforts … from such a lovely, accomplished poetess.
Please, let me know when/if you compose one of your excellent poems in this form, so I can read and review it for you.
You've blessed this piece with a lot of gracious love, and "I love" your original expressions in metaphor … simply, sheer delight!

Thank you ever-so warmly for making my day smile, Tabby ⁓ Richard : )

[Gee]

Charming says this man, wonderfully crafted by a fella who knows his way around poetry.
You're good ...perhaps better than

[Richard🖌]

Thank you most humbly and sincerely, Gee!
To receive such accolades from an accomplished poet as yourself is, indeed, praise and encouragement in the highest.
Your "good" compliment is gratification beyond expectation, and the "perhaps better than", I assume, is meant that I use my own ego to determine … LOL!

Thank you again, Gee … gratefully yours! ⁓ Richard : )

[Wajiha Nayeem]

First of all,you've written it in such an imaginative and creative way!...
i was literally in happiness when i had the pictures of this going on my mind...and richard,..you've done magic...great work..keep going!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Wajiha!
Your enjoyment, praise, expressed involvement, and encouragement to "keep going" certainly make sharing with you a beautiful experience.

Thank you ever-so sincerely! ⁓ Richard : )

[Wajiha Nayeem]

my pleasure....mr.Richard

[softlyfall]

You handled a potentially tedious form beautifully. And the spirit of authentic life and a job well done is wonderful.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, dear lovely-hearted Poetess! : )

Hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

[Crimson_ish]

I love this fresh perspective!

[Richard🖌]

And, I love that you love it … big hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[Blossom]

Beautiful!
‘Never a frown’ from the moment I started delving into this image-rich poem.
I’m an incurable romantic, and crazily look for elements of nature and emotions in every poem I read.
No wonder, each one of your lines here stoked my heart.
I felt that I was on a trip. The easy structure and simple diction did not let the voyager wander for a second away from the cozy world created herein.
I simply love the message of each stanza, each more positive and uplifting than the other.
However, for me, there’s always something intriguing about the approaching night in a poem. Perhaps that’s why the penultimate stanza is my favourite.
To conclude, there’s an analogy between this poem and ‘apple and cinnamon tea’ (something I’ll be consuming in barrels at the onset of winters! :-)

[annalysiar]

I just might try that one day beautiful poem

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for reading, I hope you do! ⁓ Richard

[annalysiar]

😄 you're welcome😄

[Terry O'Leary]

Hi Richard!
Thanks for suggesting this fine piece... an enjoyable read, flowing and inspiring!

Yes, I see I have used your 4/4/6/4/4/6 form!
Mine is slightly different in that each of my stanzas run
xxxaxxxaxxxxxb
xxxcxxxcxxxxxb
xxxdxxxdxxxxxb
xxxexxxexxxxxb
...
i.e., each LINE is 4/4/6, for a varying number of LINES in each stanza, and a single monorhyme ("b") ending each LINE in any given stanza...

Thank you for your 'tip', and for your interest!!!
Terry

[Richard🖌]

Terry,
Thank you ever-so warmly for a great review of this piece in homage to pastoral life, and for your inspiring, appreciated praise, as-well.
Yes, except in format presentation and your 4/4/7 4-line mono-rhymed verses, the count and flow is exact, and it is interesting we both came-up with it … I love things like this, rare gems of discovery that make poetry so exciting when discovered.

It makes me very happy we met, Terry, and thanks again for sharing! ⁓ Richard