When, with love ⁓ (the good life)

When, with love ⁓ (the good life)

A Poem by Richard
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Fours 'n Sixes

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When, with love ~
~---~---~---~--~~---~---~--~--~**~---~---~--~~---~---~--~--~---~

There's ne'er a frown,
when new-plowed ground
births early crops a start.
Tools now laid down,
we're homeward bound
t'ward hearth with grateful heart.


Warming delight,
fireplace lit bright,
in prayer for grace we kneel;
keep us held tight
throughout each night,
give thanks for our fine meal.


Faces aglow
from all we'll sow:
Love holds no reproaches.
Now's time to show,
gift, and bestow...
gloaming fast approaches.

Soon, will the night
from day take flight,
heads weary laid to rest.
It's then despite,
resist and fight,
with sleep, each one, we're blest.


Comes quick the dawn,
a sleepy yawn...
fresh, new day for giving;
until we're gone,
thus life goes on...
when, with love
~ we're living
.

~---~---~---~--~~---~---~--~--~**~---~---~--~~---~---~--~--~---~
Richard W. Jenkins
©2015


   FORM   

Doubledown Style 2, Fours 'n Sixes, or Quickie
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 19 Apr 1987

Any number of 6-line verses about anything:
Align left or center.

Syllable count per verse:
4/4/6/4/4/6

Rhyme scheme:
xx
xa
xxxa
xxxxxb
xxxc
xxxc
xxxxxb

xxx
d
xxxd
xxxxxe
xxxf
xxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...


© 2015 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
I would be greatly honored if anyone tries this easy flowing and interesting original form. If you should, please, let me know so I can read and review it for you.

Constructive critique and comments are always welcome! : )

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First of all I LOVE THIS PIECE! I love the images that come to mind as I read it. I love where it takes me in my mind.) Brought up on a farm so...) the rhythm flows beautifully like a warm hug on paper! I would love to try your form. When the mood strikes me! I will keep it in mind for my next piece! For now though this piece is AWESOME SAUCE!!
Tabby

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Well, Tabby!
You certainly have me blushing, but it's a warm and enjoyable kind that a bard l.. read more



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Gee
Charming says this man, wonderfully crafted by a fella who knows his way around poetry.
You're good ...perhaps better than

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Thank you most humbly and sincerely, Gee!
To receive such accolades from an accomplished poet.. read more
First of all,you've written it in such an imaginative and creative way!...
i was literally in happiness when i had the pictures of this going on my mind...and richard,..you've done magic...great work..keep going!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Wajiha!
Your enjoyment, praise, expressed involvement, and encouragement to "keep .. read more
Wajiha Nayeem

5 Months Ago

my pleasure....mr.Richard
First of all I LOVE THIS PIECE! I love the images that come to mind as I read it. I love where it takes me in my mind.) Brought up on a farm so...) the rhythm flows beautifully like a warm hug on paper! I would love to try your form. When the mood strikes me! I will keep it in mind for my next piece! For now though this piece is AWESOME SAUCE!!
Tabby

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

6 Months Ago

Well, Tabby!
You certainly have me blushing, but it's a warm and enjoyable kind that a bard l.. read more
You handled a potentially tedious form beautifully. And the spirit of authentic life and a job well done is wonderful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly and gratefully, dear lovely-hearted Poetess! : )

Hugs to you.. read more
I love this fresh perspective!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

And, I love that you love it … big hugs! ⁓ Richard : )
Beautiful!
‘Never a frown’ from the moment I started delving into this image-rich poem.
I’m an incurable romantic, and crazily look for elements of nature and emotions in every poem I read.
No wonder, each one of your lines here stoked my heart.
I felt that I was on a trip. The easy structure and simple diction did not let the voyager wander for a second away from the cozy world created herein.
I simply love the message of each stanza, each more positive and uplifting than the other.
However, for me, there’s always something intriguing about the approaching night in a poem. Perhaps that’s why the penultimate stanza is my favourite.
To conclude, there’s an analogy between this poem and ‘apple and cinnamon tea’ (something I’ll be consuming in barrels at the onset of winters! :-)


Posted 1 Year Ago


I just might try that one day beautiful poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thanks for reading, I hope you do! ⁓ Richard
annalysiar

1 Year Ago

😄 you're welcome😄
Hi Richard!
Thanks for suggesting this fine piece... an enjoyable read, flowing and inspiring!

Yes, I see I have used your 4/4/6/4/4/6 form!
Mine is slightly different in that each of my stanzas run
xxxaxxxaxxxxxb
xxxcxxxcxxxxxb
xxxdxxxdxxxxxb
xxxexxxexxxxxb
...
i.e., each LINE is 4/4/6, for a varying number of LINES in each stanza, and a single monorhyme ("b") ending each LINE in any given stanza...

Thank you for your 'tip', and for your interest!!!
Terry

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Terry,
Thank you ever-so warmly for a great review of this piece in homage to pastoral life, .. read more

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