Written with air ... (dolor)

Written with air ... (dolor)

A Poem by Richard
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Free Verse

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Written with air …

There may come a time
when thoughts dissipate,
like frost that lingered
as lace on green blades;
and, like early dew,
you are no longer here,
inside my mind, my soul ...
my heart unthawed
by life's sun 
bowing  out,

in abjured encore.


Where have our moments gone,
those that called us out to dance,
to warmly embrace it all,
to revel in laughter's afterglow,
shining with tears of forgiveness;
and, what of all the gold we shared,
our hours spent
in ethereal lovemaking?


I knew you - oh so well ...
the child inside,
the woman of you, too,
and all that life called us to be,
together ~
in the spark of eternal
forevermore.


Our days and nights,
spent wrapped in splendor,
thrust together,
entwined like vines
with insatiable fingers ...
swimming your pools
of endless depth,
those verdant portals
into your soul.


It is as though ...
a mystical wand passed over us,
and like the sigh
of a baby's first breath ...
here, in soft feathered touch,

... shhh!


Gone now,

forevermore ...
as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air.


Richard W. Jenkins
©2016


Not my best work, I know, but I needed to say something that felt real,
exactly as it crossed my heart ... I know you understand.
I didn't even stop to check for spelling ...

so very much unlike me ... LOL!
Any help is welcomed.


© 2016 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Illustration: Wikimedia Commons

Yeah, I know, it needs something … any help will be appreciated. : )

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A beautiful post, full of sincere emotions that poets can express so readily.. (whether edited or not.) Your sincerity is more than apparent by some wonderful said phrases, 'Where have our moments gone, ~ those that called us out to dance, ~ to warmly embrace it all, ~ to revel in laughter's afterglow,..:

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma Joy,
I have always looked forward to your deeply expressive, gratifying, and .. read more



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This is so beautifully descriptive and vivid! You're very articulate and eloquent. Detailed, but not verbose. You were able to describe things without sounding obscene. Instead, you were able to describe it as passionate and firey love affair. :)

Well done, Richard! :D

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Month Ago

Hi, Mari,
Welcome to the Café. : )
Your lovely and meaningful review of this rather p.. read more
"as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air."

I think this is my favourite of yours, Richard, after that French Kyrielle! The words you chose to portray the emotions really touch the heart (at least mine lol) and it does feel relatable too...
Beautiful read! (:

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Hi, Lady Yumna! : )
How wonderful to see you today, and to receive such an appreciative glow .. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

You're welcome, Richard! A pleasure always reading your pieces (:
ok, it's still early morning.. and I've been hesitant to review this piece, been "ignoring it" for days...ok here it goes.Free verse and technique I'm sure, is spot on. general theme...you're killing me! :-p Overall feeling?...ouch ouch and more ouch! Forgotten love?.oh the pain! sweet loving memories and a question in regards to what and who is remembered.Hard to believe such things can be written in the air...and just blown away. Why and was 'it" ever real to begin with. Why must it be this way. idk.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Susan,
Though, I certainly appreciate and enjoy it that you've selected this piece to read an.. read more
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I think the way you structure it makes it more charming and lively. The picture depicts feelings written in air(I guess),the title also suggests something which doesn't have much impact. I think the overall idea is love.
I admire the vocab and I need to say, I'm drawing a lot of inspiration!
Wonderful! "shining with tears of forgiveness;"

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Tazeen,
Your thoughtful, in-depth, and insightful review truly has blessed my humb.. read more
i followed this easily ...i think its fine unless you want some other dimension to come into play ...your theme...two people in love with history of youthful exuberance ...devil may care fire ... burn it up and slide through middle age all the way to a quiet time of lifes review ...at least one of them ..but it could be both ...i like being able to write my own ending ..as the beginning of the next adventure or ... sadly ... the end ;(
E.
ps. as i was reading this (out loud) my thoughts went pretty fast to .. i'll tell you what happens ...children happen!!! one gets so busy with them its a blur until they are grown, gone and now you can reflect ... without stress nor demand ;)))

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

yep ..i agree :) imperfection is a given in any earthly endeavor ... :))))))))
Richard

2 Months Ago

We so pleasantly see eye-to-eye, My Fine, Delightful Friend. : )
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

:) ..................
Mmmm, not your best work????

Well, you may be right ~ for you have penned & shared so many Masterpieces with us, it is vitually impossible to pick out a "best one".

Richard, each line/stanza of this exquisite piece is filled with so much passion, as well as with yearning, feelings of lonliness, a deep abiding love & finally, regrets of the loss of the love that once was.

This is an overall sad piece of writing but at the same time ... is beautiful in the wording & visual presentation ~ well done my friend.

Please take care & have a wonderful day.

Blessings,🙏
~ mj

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Hi, Mary Jo!
Thanks for such a broad scope of view shared in your heartfelt words for this hu.. read more
heavenscentgirl1

2 Months Ago

It's always my pleasure to read your words ... mj
A beautiful post, full of sincere emotions that poets can express so readily.. (whether edited or not.) Your sincerity is more than apparent by some wonderful said phrases, 'Where have our moments gone, ~ those that called us out to dance, ~ to warmly embrace it all, ~ to revel in laughter's afterglow,..:

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma Joy,
I have always looked forward to your deeply expressive, gratifying, and .. read more
You may think that this is not your 'best' work but your feelings come across loud and clear. You express the memory of one truly loved in beautiful wording. Written in air, maybe, but, like air, you and she are still everywhere in the atmosphere!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Hi, M'Dear Astri! : )
It is so lovely to see you tonight, and to receive the knowing warmth o.. read more
Gone now,
forevermore ...
as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air....

i think this would be my fav among all your poems... so captivating..
its just few simple lines you captured the jist of relationship which changes with passage of time..
struck a string of my heart and i felt the pain ..
aww richard... so pure and tender is your poem..



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Ria,
I always love how your heart and spirit dance through your reviews, tell.. read more
It needs nothing, free genuine piece of what "a real feeling" is, not only real... but alive, vibrant, timeless...it feels like it's just written, from the deepest of Your being, upon the page, unto our deepest cores, nothing in its huge sweeping power has flickered even a bit.
Is there really a river of tears? an ocean of sadness? a well ever-flowing with grieve? a pain that is beyond these skies? still is there more tenderness, more sensitiveness, more deep, clarity of emotions? more lovingly soul? more commanding energy over each of the senses? over each fiber? over each emotion? raising them into where the world disappear and all what left is... feelings.... in Your words all are here, abounding even more than any emotion can speak, I'm swallowed here, now at this moment where everything else disappear around, I was attempting to review more of Your works, but now I'm just drifted away where nothing else can be written, I need sometime alone, not even sure what I'm writing here, all I can say is each of my tears is a waterfall... Your words spoke to me like I've written them with my own blood... I feel just like I'm written in the air...

Posted 3 Months Ago


Light

3 Months Ago

Sorry for the groaning review, but it's Your powerful dolor upon the whole of me.
Richard

3 Months Ago

Well, GH,
One need not wonder what you think and how you feel about this touching little piec.. read more

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