Daydreaming’s Gifts (sweet fantasy)

Primetime, an original form.

Daydreaming’s Gifts                                       

         With morning tea, wafts a spell
      my wandering mind must tell,
   of fairest moments sharing her today.

         Crystal pond, wave cattails tall,
     of life’s joys, I’ve known most all;
   yet, to her sunny smile my daydreams stray.

         Vividly … lush, tender lips,
     "come, take me" eyes, steamy sips
   I dream will lead us into passion’s play.

        Soft, aglow ... like gleaming gold,
      tend'rest of life's gifts unfold;
   in every sip I taste her sweet bouquet.


                           Richard W. Jenkins
                              © 25 Apr 2016

Author's Note

Artwork, compliments of Google Imagery.

"PRIMETIME"
An original form:
Created by Charlyne “Char” Zurick 06/24/2010

Minimum of 4 verses.
Three lines per verse.
Syllable count 7/7/10.
Rhyme Scheme a a b c c b d d b e e b
Please note the rhyme for each of the third lines is the same.
Any theme or length.
Offset-aligned (when able).

Honest critique and helpful suggestions are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

mmmmmmmmm the reminiscences of a tea cup! ;) i think this is simply beautiful .. it takes me to a dreamy love strewn place where only two exist .. and all while sitting by a sunny window having morning tea by myself .. the mind is such a powerful thing eh!? really feel the joy in reading this one Richard ..glad i found it!
E.
ps and the artwork is perfect ..i just sat and soaked it up without even starting to read ..good stuff says i!

[Richard🖌]

Thank you ever-so gratefully, Dear Gene! : )
Heck, guy, with all the wonderful commentary and beautifully worded praise and appreciation, I like your review better than the poem.
Plus, I really enjoy your thinking, My Friend!

I am glad you found it, too, Gene … you're the best! ⁓ Richard

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ............... back at ya sir!

[ms. barrie]

amazing ink your pen spilled on this. the romantic, mystical, whimsical
& vivid imagery conveyed in this piece definitely captivates
one, as if under a medieval spell! stunning play on words
and dictation. Thank you for sharing
~ x - barrie

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Sweet Barrie!
This one's been waiting patiently for a long time, but it has only grown more beautiful, entreating, and delightfully delicious to the senses.

What an endearing and inspiring commentary you've blessed this lovely little piece with … warmest hugs to you, M'Lady! ⁓ Richard : )

[Ruth]

Inhales...prisitine and so inviting...I think that is the lure of your charmed and effortless flow Richard...each line a maze I gladly get lost and found within...perfect...elegant, enticing and magickal :)

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Poppy!
With such praise and sweetly-caressing accolades, you're gonna have me rushing to the store for some dietary shampoo … LOL!
I dearly love it, though, when a darling lady-poet comes along and enjoys one of my pieces so lavishly, because I know I've done something good enough for Her to join me in.
Please, come again, M'Lady … with my warmest hug of happy thanks! ⁓ Richard

[JayceeC]

I like the form and the softly sweet message. As always you have crafted this well. The only thing that may make it better is perhaps using imagery from the previous strophe in the last. perhaps "lip's bouquet" not sure but it's a thought. Right now that threaded imagery is that of the morning cup of tea rather than the daydream details.. but that's just my brain this morning.

[Richard🖌]

A beautiful Texas day to you, Jan!
Thanks for liking this one … it is special to me, and thank you for your endearing praise and suggestion; you always have something interesting and worthwhile to offer. This is why my happy smile likes to see your name on one of my humble efforts.
You know I appreciate your input, and that I'll give it sincere and genuine thought.
Big warm HUG of thanks, M'Dear Lady-Texan! ⁓ Richard

[JayceeC]

It's amazing that anyone can appreciate the randomness that is my thought process, so thank you for that ;-)

[Richard🖌]

You're one of (if not the) most intelligent, skilled, creative, and lovely poetess I know, Dear Jan … how can I not appreciate you? ; )