The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

The River, the Clouds, and Us.... (longing)

A Poem by Richard
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The River, the Clouds, and Us....
I found a place to sit in solitude,
hoping to hear
what the moment held.

I listened....
imagining stories the river could tell
of its journeys through canyons,
how it overcame every obstacle
life, time, and Nature had set before it,
either going over, around, or under it
to flow right here to be with me.

Somewhere along the way …
my focus changed
as I watched the gray clouds building,
bullying the white ones into submission,
their thunderous voices rising....
until it's clear who the victor would be.

I sat in rain for hours,
thinking about how much
you are like those clouds at times,
angry, petulant....
ready to dampen everything
at the slightest provocation;

then, there's me … I'm like the river,
soaking you in, feeding on you,
determined to face any challenge
to get back to the sea....

where summer sun will heat me,
and I’ll rise up into your arms
until you tire of me again,
letting me fall back to earth.... 
the way you always do.



Richard W. Jenkins
           ©
2016

© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Picture: compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

Something set me into a wispy, dreamlike, drifting-off mood.

Please, feel free to offer critique, or anything you feel will help improve this piece! : )

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I love the cloudy images -- that stanza in particular is striking. The feeling of falling in love with a moody person, and the speaker is the calm anchor ...

one minor thing, I am sure it is just a typo or pesky auto-correct, but its journey does not require an apostrophe, unless there is something in that sentence I am missing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

That you've again blessed one of my pieces, KL … how very happy this makes me feel!
Then, t.. read more



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Beautiful thought and execution.
this piece puts us in a thought....
Claps are inevitable for this

Posted 11 Months Ago


Richard

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Poetess! : )
Iam ever-so grateful for your effulgently lovely review to this .. read more
wander girl

10 Months Ago

You're such an inspiration for young poets like me. Keep writing and I am obliged by your words. Hug.. read more
This is lovely, Richard.
Beautiful. It flows with a gentle melancholy all its own...a wistful longing.
I love this stanza:
I watched the gray clouds building,
bullying the white ones into submission,
their thunderous voices rising....
until it was clear who the victor would be.

Just beautiful.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

11 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Pam!
I am so happy you came across this unusually metaphorical little number,.. read more
This was really nice. The note you wrote about a dreamlike, drifting-off mood is something I can relate to. Love the poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Well, thank you, Ma'am!
It is my joy to please you and my reward to receive your inspiring wo.. read more
this is pretty darn good, enjoyed this write

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Hi, Kelcee! : )
Thank you, Dear Lady-Poet, for visiting my pages and for finding favor in an.. read more
blankspace

1 Year Ago

thanx, have you a good day
Richard

1 Year Ago

You, too, Kelcee! : )
Well,probably not one I should have read today when already feeling down..cause once again your writing is speaking to me. So many things I can relate to...but rather not mention on a public forum. But that emotional pull..is exhausting and painful. perfectly expressed in this piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Aw, don't give-up, Susan!
We both know life can often a way of evening out, if we can be pati.. read more
Nature is so poetic in its own right. The imagery is splendid in this poem. Combining the river and the clouds as a representation of relational interactions is unique. Your words inspire me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you warmly, Brianna! : )

T'would seem we've again connected in deeply meaningf.. read more
Nice way to do comparisons, when I look at the sky, its changing colors and beauty I see God's canvas laid out for all of us to see. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Hi, Dear Kathie! : )
Thank you so very much for the nice compliment, and for sharing your lo.. read more
I can't explain anything in detail, coz I'm new to writing poems that are just...let's say, perfect. I can just say that it was stupendous.
I loved the way you beautifully expressed what many people are obsessed by, when that dreamlike, drifting-off mood strikes them.
Lovely poem. Hope you help me too in pointing out the errors in mine. You're a wonderful poet :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Yashita,
Welcome to my pages … I an thrilled you meandering along to find t.. read more
Nice experience.

Going to digress for a moment,

Your Writing is often more then just writing.
Akin to food in a restaurant.

I'll compare the Pictures you add to the pleasant A.C cooling the place.
I'll compare the Fonts you pick to the kind, hospitable and easy on the eyes waitress,
And the little difference of the gray background, making the writing feel special, I'll compare it to a bright neon sign, filling you with hope as you pat your empty belly.

AHEM,

Good poem. I liked the image of the Clouds bullying another cloud. Very powerful, very thoughtful. Very original.

The rest of it is equally satisfying, the last bit is on the spot.
Great job.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Poet, with a friendly welcome to my pages! : )

Most gratefully and ap.. read more
Nice poesy! It had an amazing, storytelling, cozy feel to it. The first stanza was engaging, and everything else held me in accord.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Hi, Cypian! : )
Welcome to my pages, Poet!
Many grateful thanks to you for selecting .. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

Hi, Richard! :)
Thank you for the welcome.
You're most welcome for the comment!
.. read more

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