I Prayed (war's sorrow)

I Prayed (war's sorrow)

A Poem by Richard
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English [Shakespearean] Sonnet

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I Prayed

Oft times, now early waking hours bring
a wonderland that soothes the aching soul.
Soft tunes that only wondrous birds can sing,
once fell on deafened ears that now hear whole.

Above dark ramparts high bursts flak and shell;
a din that seemed to drown eternity,
where every moment spent was living hell,
all in the name of keeping good men free.

John lost a leg and Stan his eyes and toes;
a mine exploded as they crossed the road.
The cost of freedom, only heaven knows;
no mortal man can tally-up the load.

I prayed for peace and raptures of the heart;
that’s why each day life gifts a fresh, new start.



Richard W. Jenkins
©2016




Honorable Mention

Fallen Soldier poetry Contest


© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Painting, compliments of Wikimedia Commons.

All suggestions and critique offered to improve my skills are gratefully welcomed and appreciated! : )

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Powerful and focused poem on war and its agonising uncertainties-I was especially struck by the two lines beginning "The cost of freedom..."I wondered Richard about the last two lines and I wonder about taking out the words "brand new" and put in "fresh"?

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Richard

4 Months Ago

G'Day, George! : )
I am especially pleased to see you, and definitely to receive another of y.. read more
George Coombs

4 Months Ago

Thankyou Richard and yes "fresh new2 would fit well I think-RegardsGeorge
Richard

4 Months Ago

Then, it's a done deal! : )



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Powerful and focused poem on war and its agonising uncertainties-I was especially struck by the two lines beginning "The cost of freedom..."I wondered Richard about the last two lines and I wonder about taking out the words "brand new" and put in "fresh"?

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

G'Day, George! : )
I am especially pleased to see you, and definitely to receive another of y.. read more
George Coombs

4 Months Ago

Thankyou Richard and yes "fresh new2 would fit well I think-RegardsGeorge
Richard

4 Months Ago

Then, it's a done deal! : )
This sonnet is well worth the read, demonstrating that a sonnet can be both contemporary and emotional in one. It has a matter of fact feel that is understandable to all, and in it, a heart that feels for the soldiers that fight and day for their countries in war.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much, KL!

Your words genuinely touched me and gratified my efforts to co.. read more
You write so eloquently. This grasps something I can't even begin to understand from the outside, but still moves me so deeply and fills me with such gratitude, respect and love for the people that do understand. I am so so moved by this, thank you so much for sharing it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard

1 Year Ago

Bless you with many smiles, Kaya! : )

I think I understand your expressed feeling an.. read more
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My dear father, now resting in eternity was one who heard these sounds, endured the horror and tragedy of warfare and yet he was ever proud to have served his country for the 20 years of service he so willingly gave. The image reminds me of him being snowed in during The Battle of The Bulge, his feet freezing, as so many others also suffered, but most of all only one among the troops hedged in, waiting and waiting and praying, praying and praying for relief! He always believed that it was by the divine grace of our Heavenly Father that he was saved as he saw so many others die. His Band of Brothers stood as a brotherhood, fighting for our country, for those loved at home, for survival! Your words cut deep to this reader as it makes me swell with pride for my precious father-my hero!

Thank you for sharing such poignant words during this time of reminder of the freedoms we have this day! You have served your country with honor my friend!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard

1 Year Ago

I proudly, reverently, and gratefully salute your amazingly brave father, Sheila … I know you must.. read more
A powerful piece of work my friend.
"The cost of freedom, only heaven knows;
no mortal man can tally-up the load.
I prayed for peace and raptures of the heart;
that’s why each day life gifts a brand new start."
The above lines my daily prayer for friend loss to war and for me to keep going forward. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

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Richard

1 Year Ago


Thank you sincerely, John!

The lines you've selected to quote are particularl.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome Richard. I have always enjoyed your work.
I can imagine writing this sonnet was draining, weaving..harsh reality of war into something palatable. I appreciate, that you do not leave your readers in despair, but close with hope..
Lovely work, Mr. Jenkins... Peace



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Richard

1 Year Ago

Peace unto thee, too, Dear Lady Renée,
From the topic alone, one could certainly imagine suc.. read more
Renée

1 Year Ago

I can also see, where, writing this poem would bring you comfort. There are times, I have read piec.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

I humbly bow!
Gratitude expressed .. and there is love, inside each thought of Peace....

Wonderful !

Jazzy..

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Jasmine, ever-so warmly and sincerely!
You know how much I cherish your readi.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

YOU ARE MOST WELCOME SIR...... :).....................JAZZY

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