Upon these words ⁓ (aspiration)

Upon these words ⁓ (aspiration)

A Poem by Richard
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© 2016 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
I hope you'll enjoy this moment shared.

Constructive comments and critique are always welcome! : )

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I love the feel of this poem, Richard. The rhythm and flow. The lilt. The cadence and rhyme. Yet, woven through it all is a sense of gentle freedom, like a butterfly dancing on a spring morning. There's a sense of floating into an embrace that encompasses more than the physical realm of bodies and limbs. The words are as ethereal as sunlight dancing on clouds...yet speak volumes to those with the ability to listen. A beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Relativity is a most wondrous ideal to me … the thought that for everything there is it equal and .. read more
ReedWrite

1 Year Ago

So true. Never trust someone who insists they are only what you see. We are all composed of light an.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

Ohhh-MY … BLUSH*



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It is just so much. Mesmerising poem. Sir..it. Just. Took. Away my attention from. All tha other activities..I was just. Drwan too. It.....it's words really holds depth..." pomegranate of your lips..whispering you are mine" these words are so intense I read it again for a couple of times.. I've felt each word really...it was soooo real...

Posted 9 Months Ago


I love the feel of this poem, Richard. The rhythm and flow. The lilt. The cadence and rhyme. Yet, woven through it all is a sense of gentle freedom, like a butterfly dancing on a spring morning. There's a sense of floating into an embrace that encompasses more than the physical realm of bodies and limbs. The words are as ethereal as sunlight dancing on clouds...yet speak volumes to those with the ability to listen. A beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Relativity is a most wondrous ideal to me … the thought that for everything there is it equal and .. read more
ReedWrite

1 Year Ago

So true. Never trust someone who insists they are only what you see. We are all composed of light an.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

Ohhh-MY … BLUSH*
Well Richard, you know I cant offer any suggestions with the technical stuff..so lets chat subject matter. If I wasn't already swooning with a whisper of "you are mine".....you definitely got me with"as one, our souls began to sing"..... there is such a tenderness with this piece!!..a softness, pure delight..oh my you!...yet raging dogs of war"...such is life and the balance... but end with hope. Always have to hold on to hope.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lovely..Beautiful................... Soft.. Nice

Jazzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


What a beautiful lovesong, capturing the sweet moments that change our perception and allow us to see all the colors and movement rather than the dark greys of life. I can easily picture this time, the sights and sounds captured and said softly to the lover by your side. How wondrous to feel this through your words, perfect choices, like "cerulean skies" and pomegranate lips, the lushness of these moments conveyed in such phrases. Beautiful Richard, and glad to see you back again here to grace us with your poetry.

Posted 1 Year Ago


This poem is very beautiful...you penned down your feelings very nicely in this poem....
keep on writing and thanks for sharing....
take care...
riddhi

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

For You (if it is a poem) I most enthusiastically will, Riddhi. : )
I just reviewed your ins.. read more
riddhi

1 Year Ago

Yes i just read your review and your words have motivated me to write more poems...Thank you so much.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

I humbly bow⁓*
This poem is so beautiful ... it may be your best love poem yet (it's at least third place, in my book).

From the enthralling visual presentation to the smoothly flowing words, I've truly enjoyed this piece. I also enjoyed the rhyme scheme; it's consistent, but not every line rhymes, which (in my opinion) helps to add a sense of freedom, reminiscent of this poem's care-free and easy-going vibe ... it's like everything moved in slow motion as I read it (if that makes sense).

I loved the last stanza, especially the line "Cease thee, ye raging dogs of war." That line really helped to bring contrast to this piece in a somewhat ironic way.

I have no critiques to offer ... you've done great with this one.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, William,
It is a joyful honor to share my humble little poetic renderings with you.. read more
Such a glorious poem of love. I see a family with a loving couple at the helm...children at their feet. Just a warm and wonderful write, Richard. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Lydi, for gracing my humble little poem of aspiring romance that conquers all … we.. read more
'Beside thee there I am, my love,
Sure as the stars above all shine.
In each and every gentle breeze,
I whisper softly,"You are mine." '
It's so touching...so sweet...so beautiful..
You've used imagery in such a good way that the reader can feel and imagine every single thing without any problem.
Seriously loved this one!
Please keep writing more such poems :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

I meant to say, "What an endearing verse you've selected … it's a favorite one of mine, too."
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Yashita Arora

1 Year Ago

Always welcome, and Oh, I don't think I'll ever stop! ; )
Richard

1 Year Ago

"B L U S H !"

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