Out in our Sun ( tender tragedy )

Out in our Sun ( tender tragedy )

A Poem by Richard
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Swap Quatrain (when one's soulmate dies)

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Out in our Sun
……………………………………………🌞 ……………………………………………


When I was young, I used to dance;
my feet would skip around and prance,
There was no song remained unsung ...
I used to dance when I was young.

When I was kissed, my young heart soared;
the girls and flowers I adored.
I'd shy away, but they'd insist ...
my young heart soared, when I was kissed.

There came one day, a special one;
eyes forest green and hair like sun.
We ran and laughed, in joy we'd play ...
a special one, there came one day.

We fell in-love, never apart;
we lived it all with loyal heart,
with all our days blessed from above ...
never apart, we fell in-love.

So sweet it went throughout those years,
all our eyes shed were loving tears.
We spoke and planned in moments spent ...
throughout those years, so sweet it went.

We'd found our way; though, in the sun
our love  grew strong since it begun,
there came a cold hand one dark day ...
though, in the sun we'd found our way.

Clouds drifted-in and you were gone;
ohh, I don't think I can go on!
Prayed high to stars, called out again ...
and You were gone; clouds drifted-in.

The wind, it blows a quiet refrain:
my heart, in tears, calls out your name,
and everywhere your mem'ry glows ...
a quiet refrain, the wind it blows.

Out in our sun, still loving You;
ne'er shall there be a love more true,
nor ever can it be undone ...
still loving You ~ out in our sun.


……………………………………………🌞 ……………………………………………
Richard W. Jenkins

©2016



© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Painting: "Magia of the Heart" … acrylic on panel by Andrew Gonzalez

Constructive critique and helpful comments are always welcome! : )

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a tale of love, of life, of life lived until the first touch of real love over that young heart, of what and how life has made him until he met her, and how life and love has made him with her, and without her... ever the same, in the most tender way of flow, words and emotions, (tender tragedy) is the perfect description to this deeply soft wistful poem, and the form just adding more gentle yearning, more sweet tenderness, like a gentle slow long wave, takes us over the blue ocean in a journey shared with You.

yet another beauty from Your ever gentle creative pen, a composer of the truest of emotions and feelings.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Weeks Ago

Goodness, GH!
No one interprets my poetry with the depth and clear imagery of vividness you d.. read more



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Clouds drifted-in and you were gone;
ohh, I don't think I can go on!
Prayed high to stars, called out again ...
and You were gone; clouds drifted-in.

these lines kind of hit home ..

its the pain of loosing , the separation and knowing maybe once more we would have love a little more..spend little more time...

You write with so much emotions, the reader feels it too within them..the pain..the separation...




Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Weeks Ago

Oh, thank you, Dear Ria!
Your words of understanding the core essence of this piece, your ten.. read more
a tale of love, of life, of life lived until the first touch of real love over that young heart, of what and how life has made him until he met her, and how life and love has made him with her, and without her... ever the same, in the most tender way of flow, words and emotions, (tender tragedy) is the perfect description to this deeply soft wistful poem, and the form just adding more gentle yearning, more sweet tenderness, like a gentle slow long wave, takes us over the blue ocean in a journey shared with You.

yet another beauty from Your ever gentle creative pen, a composer of the truest of emotions and feelings.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Weeks Ago

Goodness, GH!
No one interprets my poetry with the depth and clear imagery of vividness you d.. read more
This tells the love story, from beginning to sad pause. I use "pause" as the one left behind still loves and so the story is not over.

I enjoyed the Swap Quatrain format, and it displays your skill yet again in yet another form of poetry.

*bowing and backing away slowly*

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

How keen of you Dear Carol, to realize it is but a poetic tale of true lovers and their poignant dem.. read more
This brought tears to my eyes.

Poems driven by emotion are some of the best poems.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Aw, so sorry to make you cry, M'Dear. :'/
I sincerely agree, Lady Karen; especially, when rea.. read more
So classic, lyrical and eloquent! I so admire the beautiful style, rhyme, meter and Bard-like perfection of this poem. True love transcends all. Repetition of "nor ever can it be undone", so poignant and heartfelt, - Brilliant work!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

5 Months Ago

My, Annette!
What a gorgeous review you've gifted this rather deeply touching little effort .. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

5 Months Ago

Mutual admiration society here?? I think so..! Thank you from the heart :)
Richard

5 Months Ago

Without a doubt* ; )
A little tough to get through
without tears...
Some one ask how I get through my days, without My Love, I say.. I still have My Love .. in bright and gloomy
days, in endings, and beginnings, I have My love..
Forever..

Nice... ♥♥

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Jasmine*
Your words in warm and thoughtful praise and gentle e.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

10 Months Ago

You are welcome kind Sir....♥
First now I feel a tad guilty and feeling like giving back looking back at the gorgeous review you left on my page- hey at least I'm honest ;), second I love your status quote too, and third this piece is shining even though sad by the end, it's beam doesn't fade. Lovely rhyme scheme, very enjoyable to read.
And the title; very well chosen, simple but so highly expressive and image evoking. A little piece of poetic magic.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

Gosh, Vanessa!
Glad to obligate you … wink*
Well, to be honest, too, I cannot imagin.. read more
Closed

10 Months Ago

Oh how could I overlook this poem? ;) I'll certainly have a look at it. You're welcome.
Richard

10 Months Ago

Big thumbs-up!
It's always a pleasure to read someone who knows his poetry.

Excellent writing Richard. :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

Thank you sincerely for your expressed appreciation and praise.

Happy holidays, with .. read more
...such beautiful form, Richard...and the painting compliments it with the awe of a thousand words!



Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

So much said, Kelly … we do speak in such sweet silence, eh?
Happy Hols 'n New Year with ya.. read more
So many emotions ripple your words from youth to later life and at each stroke of thought, you paint a picture of yourself and how life brought you pleasures...

Then comes that love, that glorious love... and far too soon, the pain of loss. Yet, that sadness, that tragedy, births such beautiful verses, such reality, such depth. Love at its best is the sun and moon, at its worst is their reflection ever more.. somehow.

Now have to find tissues, Richard.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

10 Months Ago

Dear Em,
I thank you most warmly, gratefully, and appreciatively for your lovely pearls of de.. read more

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