Daisies⁓* (moments gifted)

Daisies⁓* (moments gifted)

A Poem by Richard
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Simple Quatrains in 8-count abab cdcd rhymes.

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© 2017 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
It's not my usual marathon, but I was told by a very thoughtfully caring and wise friend that fewer words, more often, say just the right amount.

"Daisies" a drawing, compliments of Pinterest.

Always, well-intended critique and comments are warmly welcomed! : )

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WELL...I love daisies so this was delightful poem for me to read! I love that it's short and sweet! I have a hard time writing short pieces like this!
Very powerful for its length,as well as enjoyable to read! I like a rhyme...it's got it all!
Tabby

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Yes, Tabby,
And, so easy, fun, and enjoyable to read and review,
eh(?) … it is a jo.. read more



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The ability to layer meaning on such a small canvas is a gift indeed. The tradition of picking daisy pedals, the name, and the floral metaphor.

You use some original rhyme.. Clever use of words that appeal.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Simple floral poetic quatrain at its most delicate … very pleasant! Your write does provoke the little greys cells into action – as this reader discovered! In the west, the daisy is a symbol of simplicity, chastity and transformation. We see that message repeated in Christianity, where the daisy is a sacred symbol of Virgin Mary signifying her chastity, grace and purity. :-)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Phil.
Nice review, along with an interesting bit of info on the daisy … I'm so g.. read more
Mythology of expression -sweet and tender..soft.
Presentation- beautifully presented with a sweet and simple picture of daisies. Fits the poem.
Assonance "o"..as in God,flower, containing.
Consonance - "s" final consonant in wondrous, stars,builds and memoirs.
Alliterations-maybe builds, beckons and bends?
Metaphor -''containing love's special power''
Line breaks - "bend and pick it"..perfect break as I think of the action..
Syntax- smooth as silk
juxtaposition - "wondrous flower patterned from god's heavenly stars."

This is just a sweet little poem....I love daisies too. :-)

A???? heheh

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Ya really got it goin' on good!
We'll leave the grade for later … right now, here's a big H.. read more
susancapozzi

2 Months Ago

:-) You are welcome..Thanks for the hug!
Yes, as You said a very thoughtful friend, I also believe sometimes the few words hold the great power, like saying (I love You), there is nothing to be said after or needed to be said, the mind knows well all the words which lay behind this one sentence.

I always felt that some people don't give justice to daises, in spring they spread the world with soft child-like beauty, but it's like people are used to see them, so it's like a normal thing to them... they leave them kind of neglected, it's sad... Your poem said it all, in few lines, yes your lines are few but VERY perfect and have this tender soft real power of daises, I very much like the wonderment You left us with in the next verse, almost like I'm surrounded by daises each beckon at me with a lovely thought, a lovely feeling and sweet smile...

Thank You dear Syr for keeping sharing Your amazing Art with all of us.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Thank you, Dear Lovely Light,
your feelings touch just right,
and every word shines br.. read more
+she plays with matches+

2 Months Ago

Awe...that's a beautiful tribute to a sensation review.
Richard

2 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so sweetly, Dear Poetess. : )
WELL...I love daisies so this was delightful poem for me to read! I love that it's short and sweet! I have a hard time writing short pieces like this!
Very powerful for its length,as well as enjoyable to read! I like a rhyme...it's got it all!
Tabby

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Yes, Tabby,
And, so easy, fun, and enjoyable to read and review,
eh(?) … it is a jo.. read more
simple writing, beautiful imagery. Well penned

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Thank you, Sonnie (love your name),
For your compliment and keen observations shared, I am mo.. read more
sonnie ibadah

2 Months Ago

aww, thanks ;) keep up the good work!
Gentle and lovely, the illustration is very pretty..is it your work i wonder ?

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

It is pretty, eh?
I very much like it, too, in its lovely simplicity. : )
Stella Armour

3 Months Ago

just printed it off before i go to bed , it looks like ink and wash , maybe my flowers will be yello.. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

I can only imagine how much more lovely your daisies will be, Stella. : )
That is beautifully penned, Richard. Daisies are my daughter's favorite flower. I always enjoy reading your poetry. Well done! :)

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

2 Months Ago

Gosh darn, Suzan!
You're going to have to administer 50 lashes with a wet noodle for not seei.. read more
SJ Mullins

1 Month Ago

You ate most welcome! ❤
I really love the simplicity of this piece, but it also says a lot. It has an almost wise feel to it, like you know something we don't. I love that learning-feel.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

You are a most lovely and keen-minded young lady, Jacqueline, who sees with far more than her eyes.<.. read more
This is definitely different from your norm ~ but still a very nice presentation of your excellent poetic & artistry skills.

~ hsg

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Why, thank you, Mary Jo!
How nice to see you here reviewing one of my more condensed and ligh.. read more
heavenscentgirl1

3 Months Ago

Thank you again Richard, it's good that you allow us to see the lighter side of your pen occasionall.. read more
Richard

3 Months Ago

Humbly, yours.

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